Song Prompt: "Te Mando Flores" - Fonseca
Note: This chapter is directly related to Chapter 6!
In Ponyville, Rainbow Dash lay slumped on a cloud above Sweet Apple Acres. She let out another sigh. She’d been doing that a lot for the past week or so. In all honesty, Rainbow’s been keeping herself busy with clearing the skies of Ponyville, napping, and thinking about Twilight for the last several days.
Who knew she’d fallen so deep in love with Twilight that a week without her felt like an eternity? She felt empty, a strange sense of being hollow without Twilight around.
“Rainbow Dash!” a familiar voice called, “What in tarnation are you doing up there?!”
Heaving another sigh, Rainbow flipped off the cloud she was current occupying and glided down to greet her friend.
“Heya Applejack. I already finished up my weather duties for the day and was just taking a break,” Rainbow explained.
“Taking a break my Great Aunt Gala! You’ve been moping around ever since Twilight left for her research assignment!” Applejack accused.
“Hey! I do NOT mope!” Rainbow shouted in defense.
It was Applejack’s turn to sigh as she did her best to reign in her temper and suppress her annoyance at Rainbow’s antics of late, “Look sugarcube, I get that you miss her, I really do, but lying around all day missing her isn’t gonna make her come back any sooner. Come to think of it, I haven’t seen you practicing your stunts in a while. Why don’t you go do that? Take your mind off of Twilight?”
“No! You DON’T get it Applejack! That’s the problem! Nopony gets it! I’ve tried going out to practice my flying, but it doesn’t feel the same without Twilight there on the ground cheering me on! It just feels so…unnatural without her there. I can’t read the latest Daring Do book without her!” Rainbow fumed, her pent up frustration coming to the surface.
“Ya really love her, don’t you RD?” Applejack asked softly.
Collapsing on the ground, Rainbow covered her face with her hooves, “When did I get so sappy AJ? Ugh, I should hate it. I should hate feeling that I can’t do anything without another pony there. I’m the Rainbow Dash, for Celestia’s sake! The fastest flier in Equestria, the only pony to ever pull off the Sonic Rainboom! Since when am I this mushy?!”
“I don’t think I can answer that, sugarcube,” Applejack said, taking a seat next to her prismatic friend.
“The weird thing is…that I don’t hate it AJ. I don’t hate feeling this way about another pony. I don’t hate that I want, no, that I need to do these things with her by my side. I love it. And I love her. What I do hate is that she has to be gone for so long on this stupid research trip…”
Applejack nodded understandingly, “Well, maybe a walk through town might take your mind off of things? Maybe you should go visit the other girls. I bet ya Pinkie will be doing something interesting.”
“Yeah, I think I’ll do that. Thanks for listening AJ. But don’t think that this mushy stuff is gonna soften me up! I’m still the best athlete in Ponyville!” Rainbow proclaimed, puffing her chest out in pride.
“We’ll just have to wait and see for the next Running of the Leaves. Now get going before I have to kick your loitering flank off my farm,” Applejack retorted with a smirk.
“Yeah, yeah. Catch ya later!” Rainbow said as she took off.
Flying into town, Rainbow spotted a pink blur darting around town square.
“Hey Pinkie, what’s up?” she asked as she came in for a landing.
“Oh! Dashie! My knees wobbled, ears flapped, and tail twitched! That means somepony’s coming back to town!” Pinkie said excitedly, bouncing around the square.
“Really?! Ahem, uh, I mean, oh really? Who do you think it is?” Rainbow asked, trying and failing to hide her excitement.
*GASPS* “I LOVE guessing games! Hmmm,” Pinkie put a hoof to her chin, “Oh! Oh! Is it Doctor Hooves! No, Rosebud! Or is it Octavia?”
“Uhhh, never mind Pinkie. I think I know who it is. Gotta go, bye!” Rainbow said as she took off, making a beeline for the florists.
Twilight…she’s coming home early!
She couldn’t explain how she knew, or even why she thought so in the first place. Maybe she was just getting her hopes up, maybe she just missed Twilight too much, but for some reason she felt certain that it was Twilight.
She’s gonna get one heck of a welcome!
A few hours later…
Twilight stepped off of the train from Canterlot onto the Ponyville platform. As expected, nopony she knew was there to greet her.
Perfect.
Twilight smiled as she gathered her things and left for home. Shortly after, she arrived back at her library home, excited to see the surprise on Rainbow Dash’s face.
She opened the front door and announced her return with a “Guess who’s home?!” giggling all the while.
She was stunned, however, to find a large banner hanging from the ceiling that read ‘Welcome home Twilight!’ in large friendly writing.
Before she could contemplate what she was looking at she was tackled by a certain rainbow-maned pegasus.
“Twilight! Hahahaha! You’re home!” Rainbow shouted, wrapping Twilight up in an all-consuming hug, her smile threatening to break her face.
“R-rainbow?! What is this? How did you know I was coming home?” Twilight asked, baffled by her marefriend’s behaviour.
“Pinkie’s pinkie sense went off, and I don’t know how, but I knew you were coming home! Oh! And I got you these! Your favourite!”
Rainbow produced a bouquet of lilacs and roses from behind her back.
“Oh, Rainbow! They’re beautiful!” she said as she sniffed the flowers.
She put the flowers on the table and kissed Rainbow, “I missed you too much to stay away any longer.”
“I missed you too Twi’. You have no idea.”
Twilight giggled, “I think I do.”
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And I prided myself on never messing up "to," "too," and "two." And I agree, RD is indeed the best cause.
...and a diabetically sweet wrapup. Good show!
Hmm, requests? How about:
Or the album version (live version is better), with lyrics: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=X_Hfy6Ng4y0
Timaeus! You must know this! Hahaha I love your stories! But here's another piece of news! I believe you can do better! Haha not with the word prompt... No, that just makes you leave details out(not that your not rockin that out... Very well) hahaha no, you must make a romance FULL story! (If your stories here are to be any indication your talents would make it throughout the site!) (most likely... BUT not the point...) hahaha. I'd love to see you take any of these and extend me to full on stories(not that their bad... Accually they are awesome.) And you said you might, haha. (*cough*"To The Sky"*cough*) hahaha. ANYWAY review on this story. Nice flow, has great emotion. The relationship only being a week old and all might be a little much (for some people) but works nicely with the story. The flashback moment is nice to have a bit of backstory to the whole feelings part, so nice touch. (Also gave me an idea for my story) and the whole going early and working hard is totally Twi material. So all in all a great story. Looking forward to the next chapter/story
2224057 So shall it be written, so shall it be done. Give me some time though, and I can get one up!
2225607 Hmm, an interesting proposition. This may end up being a spawning point of various different fully-fledged romance stories in a few cases. I had a lot of fun writing "To The Sky," and I don't think I'd mind fleshing that out into a full on romance story. I'd just need to come up with a larger plot (hahaha) and overarching story for it, although it probably wouldn't be longer than 4-5 chapters at most. I also am planning on taking chapters 2 & 3 and using that concept to make another fully-fledged romance story (it would be a little sadder than "To The Sky," but that's to be expected) and probably around the same length if not a little longer. And I'm glad you enjoyed the last couple chapters! You and The Abyss have given me quite a bit to think about!
2225757 Hahaha, good joke there. ANYWAY hahahahaha, I know for a fact it's turn out to be a great story! ("To The Sky" AND Chap 2/3!) Believe me! haha (or don't, your choice ) Soooooo... yeah. Hahaha, pretty much all I can say without giving anything away to other people! (Not that I'd know what YOU'D write... hehe...) Big story with detail = MUCH bigger story.... My math is NEVER wrong when it comes to stories
All of these are downright awesome.
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2227863 Hmm, "Money," eh? Interesting
2228368 WOO! I'm glad you're enjoying it! I'll definitely take that song into consideration, thank you for the prompt. I'm just going to be really bogged down this weekend with uni stuff, but I should have more than enough time for at least one chapter this weekend.
2233024 <3
Great so far! Can't wait for more.
Too bad you've already done a fic similar to it, because otherwise Bon Jovi's You Had Me From Hello would have been a great one.
2249443 Firstly, thank you! I hope Cliche'd isn't a terribly bad thing, but I get what you mean. I'm hoping to start work on it once I get some free time on my hands (maybe a couple of weeks from now, depending on workload from uni ). Secondly, I really enjoyed your prompt collection (especially "Fish," that one made me laugh)! Thirdly, I'll see what I can do. Who knows? Maybe some random creative impulse will rain down on me from the heavens.
2249666 Well really the only really cliche'd bit was them both feeling the same way for each other but keep beating around the bush about it. It's a trope that's been overdone, but given the point is that these are short stories based on prompts, I can forgive it.
I like the execution, just that story element is a little overplayed. If I might make a suggestion is that Rainbow feels compelled to look for Twilight for reasons she doesn't understand (and she really wants to know why Twilight said "I'll always be yours"), and she gets increasingly more desperate as she begins to understand that her feeling may go a little beyond friendship to the point where she starts to do the Rainboom thing, and upon seeing the Unicorn, it clicks in to place.
Just a little suggestion, take it or leave it! Haha.
And thank you! I should really write another one, but I've just been so busy with the blog and stuff, I'm getting close to a point where I'll be able to start updating again, and I kinda can't wait for it.
And I can definitely relate, I have questions posed to the ask blog which have always been in the back of my mind, since last year, and have only now formed idea's good enough to post! Inspiration strikes when we least expect it.
2249703 I agree that initial bit there is definitely cliche'd, but yes, you are correct, the whole point of many of these short stories is for everything to be as cheezy, cliche'd, and short as possible. This isn't meant to be a series of deep stories, but cute little one-shots (in the case of some of them two-shots).
I really do like that suggestion, and I haven't done the actual outlining of the story yet, so everything's up in the air for the time being.
Thanks for all the feedback!
Just a minor typo: I need to do these things with here by my side. -> should be "her"
Aside from that...I love the format of these mini-stories. Perfect for a bite-size amount of d'awww while I'm waiting at a bus stop.
Huh. New song. I like this one.
Y'know, the best part about songs in a language I can't speak is that I don't give a damn what they're actually saying. It could be the most inane thing I've ever heard and it won't matter as long as the composition is good.
2304706 Thank you for pointing that out. I should really get an editor for these little bite-sized stories...and for my other stuff in general...man I'm terrible at this.
2306060 Claro que si, mi amigo! Me encanta esta canta. Yo la oi primer en mi clase de espanol hace dos anos. Have fun translating that (fair warning this website is not good for putting accent signs on vowels or the n's with a little ~ over them). Also, just so ya know, the title of this song roughly translates as "I Give You Flowers."
90 likes as of mine this day. Still not enough for your wondeful works of art.
I don't know if you specifically want songs that aren't about the characters, but this one seems like it'd be really good for a fic prompt. Actually, I'm probably gonna write one of my own off of it someday, but I wanted to see what you could do with it...