168429 I'm always hoping that the way I write them can change your opinion; maybe not of clopfics in general but of how they can be written. A lot of people have told me that Preggity is more romance novel than fapwork. Maybe they're right, I'm not sure. In any case, thanks for giving it a look-over, and I'd be glad to hear which parts you do and don't like.
I might give this a try, the fact that most chapters are really long, could mean it's really well thought out and written. Tho I usually not an fan of human and ponies together, but I'm not one to shrug off an fic with this much effort.
'Fraid not. It started out as a joke on a friend who wrote Human / PoV stuff, and I wanted to make a romance out of it once it caught on. By that point I had way too big an accidental following to just flat out displease, so I did my best to compromise. Sex is in every chapter but the epilogue, and it's plenty fetish fuely in places; but I try my best to aim for good taste in each instance. Once the e-mails started to really pour in people started to mention how much more they liked the romance than the clop, but at that point the framework was established. Over time the sex gets much more spread out as a result.
First, the complaints: I hate 'silent protagonists'. You did this one very well, expressing thought and even dialogue without actually having him speak, but it always feels like an unnecessary hoop. Your terminology slipped a couple times. Particularly, seeing the word 'womanhood' is always out of place to me. 'Marehood' seems like the more proper term. Maybe that's a more personal preference, but eh.
All in all though, damned impressive work. The characters were well-developed and intelligent, they had flaws, they grew. The B plot romance was a great accent (and is also my favorite Mane 6 ship) and I look forward to seeing Unicorn Diaries completed. I always appreciate seeing authors who will take 'clopfiction' and turn it into something as large and powerful as this. This was excellent.
I was drawn in by that twenty thousand word chapter as well. I'm not into clopfics, but this was written quite well. Honestly, I wouldn't mind reading more of this calibre. Bravo.
Don't you just love it when so many people comment on a story saying "I have not read this". I came to this story for the clop, but after reading this, I truely loved it. It was not only well written and sexy, but it had an actual plot(excuse the pun ) and made me care about the characters. It pulled me in and kept me tied down until I read all of it, and I am happy for it. Thank You!
Having read this story on another site, I have to say this is one of the best clop fics ever. It's characterizations are spot on and wonderful. The story is magnificent and can range from funny to a little bit of sad in it. The clop scenes are just perfect and the fetishes they got in it are done right. In face some of these fetishes like the pregnant one, I never got into it until I read this story. A grand story for all to enjoy and simply one of the very best. It gets the well deserved 5 stars.
0.0 oh i see the picture for the start of the novel that little picture of rareity in fornt of the fridge eating something looking back at you while you...
well i think i covered that detail enough...
also...
sequel i mean unique just got born why not show some of her life...
First clopfiction that I have ever read that has gone so deep and is so rich with plot and actual romance. I thought the way you portrayed the love between Rarity and the POV perspective to be very intense and realistic. You, good sir, have thoroughly won me over for plot-laced clopfiction.
Please keep up the good work...I'll be watching you!
Good story, it's uncommon find a clopfic with more story than "on the third day they buck, and it was good." You even could call it a... Rarity. Although, this is more of a saucy romance story with well discripted sex scenes. I thought your explanation on names was a well done excuse as to why he never gave his name although it was rather late in the game, but that just added to the whole romance not clopfic feel of the story.
I think everyone can agree that there is one mare that deserves pity — that spa pony.
First off I want to start out being honest. I don't clop, I have never liked clopfiction and I just cannot sexualize ponies. I love MLP and it's great characters for many reasons, but physical attraction isn't one. That said, this fic was really quite amazing.
Admittedly I skimmed much of the sex, again not my thing and some of it got a little too crazy for me, but the emotions were so well written, it was easy to see the love shared between Rarity and POV. The fact so much time was spent building on this relationship and not simply jumping to the sex was great and written astoundingly. Add in Dash and Twilight and it really brought it all together. I admit I wish we'd have seen more of a hint of the others of the mane 6, but sincethey weren't important to the story its not an issue. I urge everyone to read this, if you can just step outside your comfort and give this a shot, there is a really enjoyable romance here about a pony and s person in love who are truly willing to do anything for each other and their growing family.
I like this story, but there's one part that always bothered me. Are there other humans in this story or are 'you' the only one? Admittedly I only made it a few chapter in, but then again why the hell am I complaining?
312555 "You" seem to be the only one, though princess Celestia seems to know what you are, and Twilight seems to have some degree of research done about you; implying that humans are on some kind of recorded history of Equestria. Doesn't fully explain why a modern day human from our world is dropped into their universe though, and it's more fun to let the readers come to their own conclusions about it.
Bravo sir, well done! This was a very enjoyable story, not just for the first-class erotica, but for the magnificent romance that surrounds it, which drew me in and made me feel as if I truly was the POV in a loving relationship with my dear Rarity . Granted I did spend most of the story wondering how the trans-species pregnancy happened in the first place, and was a bit surprised when the foal turned out (mostly) normal, and the heavy weight and extreme eating fetishes were not my cup of tea, but it was nothing that detracted from my appreciation of the tale.
I do hope you continue to write more of these wonderful stories for us, as romantic-clop of this scale and quality is rare indeed, and a great delight to read. Thank you!
I'm in the same boat as some of the others before me in that HiE, pregnancy, and the weight fetish aren't my cup of tea but I really really enjoyed this story. Thank you, you did a wonderful job with this.
I read this exact story 2 months ago when I started getting into MLP, and I just came back back to say thank you for writing this; even though it's a little odd(not saying it's bad or anything). Your work really got me into reading stories like my little Dashie and once bitten, twice shy. So again, I want to say thanks, and I hope to read more of your stories as the fandom progresses. Oh PS static.fjcdn.com/comments/you+kind+sir+get+all+my+internets+for+the+week+_0b6a62981a8957db81fc6d6a0387c200.jpg
I………wow, HOLY GOD IN THE SKY character development. No really the human is…well you get to know him so well you will fall in love whit him, is fetish is so well executed it take you from the start to end in a (too) long story of love, perversion and sin. Rarity is well…. her character is acting how I think she would, well done there. I do like it that the reader is the human (he got no mane) it your story, you’re the man that fell in love whit that white pony and married her, I like it that how he got there is not important or how he got married, on and speaking of not important thing how the HELL is she pregnant if you ask that well magic is what I say. Good luck on the next story.
I really enjoyed this story. Thanks for putting so much time and effort into it, man.
I loved the second-person perspective with 'me' as the human. Especially since Rarity is best pony and the thought of having a foal with her... Awesome!
no man no
Too late. It can't be unseen.
aw fuck yeah
Not sure if want... May give it a try when I get bored enough. Which may not be too far off considering how dull the last couple of days have been.
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Goddamn! It's over 100k words, this could take a while...
Dat picture...
Human and pony stuff ain't really my thing, still this fic does have some heart warming moments as well as drama and even a bit of comedy
Over all, I give a 7 out of 10
chapter 8 ITS OVER 9000
oh fuck yeah, its on fimfiction now
I hate clopfics, but just the fact that there's a 20 thousand word chapter makes me want to read this.
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I'm always hoping that the way I write them can change your opinion; maybe not of clopfics in general but of how they can be written. A lot of people have told me that Preggity is more romance novel than fapwork. Maybe they're right, I'm not sure. In any case, thanks for giving it a look-over, and I'd be glad to hear which parts you do and don't like.
I might give this a try, the fact that most chapters are really long, could mean it's really well thought out and written. Tho I usually not an fan of human and ponies together, but I'm not one to shrug off an fic with this much effort.
is there a chapter in this story without a sex scene
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'Fraid not. It started out as a joke on a friend who wrote Human / PoV stuff, and I wanted to make a romance out of it once it caught on. By that point I had way too big an accidental following to just flat out displease, so I did my best to compromise. Sex is in every chapter but the epilogue, and it's plenty fetish fuely in places; but I try my best to aim for good taste in each instance. Once the e-mails started to really pour in people started to mention how much more they liked the romance than the clop, but at that point the framework was established. Over time the sex gets much more spread out as a result.
Dude... That picture is WRONG!
But the story is kinda neat...
First, the complaints:
I hate 'silent protagonists'. You did this one very well, expressing thought and even dialogue without actually having him speak, but it always feels like an unnecessary hoop.
Your terminology slipped a couple times. Particularly, seeing the word 'womanhood' is always out of place to me. 'Marehood' seems like the more proper term. Maybe that's a more personal preference, but eh.
All in all though, damned impressive work. The characters were well-developed and intelligent, they had flaws, they grew. The B plot romance was a great accent (and is also my favorite Mane 6 ship) and I look forward to seeing Unicorn Diaries completed.
I always appreciate seeing authors who will take 'clopfiction' and turn it into something as large and powerful as this. This was excellent.
I wish I could kill you and absorb your powers so I can make my Twaifufics as good as this
But no, really, this is beyond anything I could have imagined.
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Swiper no swiping. Swiper no swiping. Swiper no swiping!
I was drawn in by that twenty thousand word chapter as well. I'm not into clopfics, but this was written quite well. Honestly, I wouldn't mind reading more of this calibre. Bravo.
yay
yay once uppon a time there was a fat rarity she was so fat every one died the end !!! (spongebob square pants)
Don't you just love it when so many people comment on a story saying "I have not read this". I came to this story for the clop, but after reading this, I truely loved it. It was not only well written and sexy, but it had an actual plot(excuse the pun ) and made me care about the characters. It pulled me in and kept me tied down until I read all of it, and I am happy for it. Thank You!
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nice story but i came here for the clop orginally... now i am here for the story.
meaning the story is great (so far i have read to chapter 6)
Having read this story on another site, I have to say this is one of the best clop fics ever. It's characterizations are spot on and wonderful. The story is magnificent and can range from funny to a little bit of sad in it. The clop scenes are just perfect and the fetishes they got in it are done right. In face some of these fetishes like the pregnant one, I never got into it until I read this story. A grand story for all to enjoy and simply one of the very best. It gets the well deserved 5 stars.
why is people complaining about a picture...
0.0 oh i see the picture for the start of the novel that little picture of rareity in fornt of the fridge eating something looking back at you while you...
well i think i covered that detail enough...
also...
sequel i mean unique just got born why not show some of her life...
First clopfiction that I have ever read that has gone so deep and is so rich with plot and actual romance. I thought the way you portrayed the love between Rarity and the POV perspective to be very intense and realistic. You, good sir, have thoroughly won me over for plot-laced clopfiction.
Please keep up the good work...I'll be watching you!
I came for the clop, but stayed for the story! I would love to read a prequel.
After reading the whole thing, all I can say is that I enjoyed this, thank you very much.
After the first few chapters I forgot to clop.
Good story, it's uncommon find a clopfic with more story than "on the third day they buck, and it was good." You even could call it a... Rarity.
Although, this is more of a saucy romance story with well discripted sex scenes.
I thought your explanation on names was a well done excuse as to why he never gave his name although it was rather late in the game, but that just added to the whole romance not clopfic feel of the story.
I think everyone can agree that there is one mare that deserves pity — that spa pony.
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First off I want to start out being honest. I don't clop, I have never liked clopfiction and I just cannot sexualize ponies. I love MLP and it's great characters for many reasons, but physical attraction isn't one. That said, this fic was really quite amazing.
Admittedly I skimmed much of the sex, again not my thing and some of it got a little too crazy for me, but the emotions were so well written, it was easy to see the love shared between Rarity and POV. The fact so much time was spent building on this relationship and not simply jumping to the sex was great and written astoundingly. Add in Dash and Twilight and it really brought it all together. I admit I wish we'd have seen more of a hint of the others of the mane 6, but sincethey weren't important to the story its not an issue.
I urge everyone to read this, if you can just step outside your comfort and give this a shot, there is a really enjoyable romance here about a pony and s person in love who are truly willing to do anything for each other and their growing family.
I like this story, but there's one part that always bothered me. Are there other humans in this story or are 'you' the only one? Admittedly I only made it a few chapter in, but then again why the hell am I complaining?
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"You" seem to be the only one, though princess Celestia seems to know what you are, and Twilight seems to have some degree of research done about you; implying that humans are on some kind of recorded history of Equestria. Doesn't fully explain why a modern day human from our world is dropped into their universe though, and it's more fun to let the readers come to their own conclusions about it.
Bravo sir, well done! This was a very enjoyable story, not just for the first-class erotica, but for the magnificent romance that surrounds it, which drew me in and made me feel as if I truly was the POV in a loving relationship with my dear Rarity . Granted I did spend most of the story wondering how the trans-species pregnancy happened in the first place, and was a bit surprised when the foal turned out (mostly) normal, and the heavy weight and extreme eating fetishes were not my cup of tea, but it was nothing that detracted from my appreciation of the tale.
I do hope you continue to write more of these wonderful stories for us, as romantic-clop of this scale and quality is rare indeed, and a great delight to read. Thank you!
This is long as fu.....
I'm in the same boat as some of the others before me in that HiE, pregnancy, and the weight fetish aren't my cup of tea but I really really enjoyed this story.
Thank you, you did a wonderful job with this.
You sire, are fucking awesome
I read this exact story 2 months ago when I started getting into MLP, and I just came back back to say thank you for writing this; even though it's a little odd(not saying it's bad or anything). Your work really got me into reading stories like my little Dashie and once bitten, twice shy. So again, I want to say thanks, and I hope to read more of your stories as the fandom progresses. Oh PS static.fjcdn.com/comments/you+kind+sir+get+all+my+internets+for+the+week+_0b6a62981a8957db81fc6d6a0387c200.jpg
*cannot save picture to computer*
friiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiick.
Okay. Sure, I'll like this as it is very skillfully written but I just can't read any further.
I... I just can't.
I think I might go and commit myself to the mental ward now.
~AC
Nicely done my friend!!! *stands up with waterfalls of tears claping loudly*
Very nice!
I hope we can see another one with another one of the mare 6???
Perhaps fluttershy?
I………wow, HOLY GOD IN THE SKY character development. No really the human is…well you get to know him so well you will fall in love whit him, is fetish is so well executed it take you from the start to end in a (too) long story of love, perversion and sin. Rarity is well…. her character is acting how I think she would, well done there. I do like it that the reader is the human (he got no mane) it your story, you’re the man that fell in love whit that white pony and married her, I like it that how he got there is not important or how he got married, on and speaking of not important thing how the HELL is she pregnant if you ask that well magic is what I say. Good luck on the next story.
I really enjoyed this story. Thanks for putting so much time and effort into it, man.
I loved the second-person perspective with 'me' as the human. Especially since Rarity is best pony and the thought of having a foal with her... Awesome!
the fetish stuff is disturbing but i lovd the overall story
I am satisfied.