Pinkie Pie is leaving you at home for a week so she can go run off to the Crystal Kingdom with her friends. You two lead a very loving romance, tons of sexual exploration. Perfect right? Well no matter what the situation she will not, under any cir
There is an extreme overabundance of mental scarring and horrible images that have entered my mind because of this chapter. I hope you're satisfied, because I'm gonna have nightmares about winona and spike or inkie and blinke for the rest of my life.
So, it looks like the Elements of Harmony are going to kill Frost within a week as predicted by the Kinkie Pie sisters. My bet is that Luna or Discord is going to save him at the last minute.
Thank you for the mental scarring. The three-some was bad but bearable. I could handle the twisted incest of Inkie and Blinkie. The Lyra thing was just too much. I think with some clopfics, there should be a line of sorts. You have yet to cross it, but it should still exist for those horrible trollfics.
2332785 Sleep? What is sleep? 2332832 More Luna is coming! 2332919 Mentally scaring? Wait till Wednesday :D 2332925 Shit happens 2333004 HAHAHAHAHAHA No. 2333048 YES! 2333016 :D i love dancing around those lines. 2333059 Now the next time your in your room alone you shall think of nothing but winona~ 2333084 Screw sleep there is story to be had!
Another fantastic chapter! While I do believe the bit with Lyra was... well, horrifying, the fact that the main character was so traumatized, and that the scene wasn't actually written in detail, instead of something potentially awful, it was a humorous end to the Lyra scenario, assuming her fetish has been fully sated.
Now, though, you're teasing us with Luna, putting her in a situation that could easily get her closer to the main character, but given Cup's reaction, and the main character's (Ours?My? Always hard to describe the character in a send-person fic) love for Cup, I'm not sure if that would ever happen. Though, you've already got a lot of other sub-plots brewing, perhaps I'm being greedy thinking about Luna too?
40 suitors?! Wow, Celestia's bed is no longer, so especial if she so open to be with any stallion she want depending of how she feel that day a little like Molestia but she control herself…kind off.
I'm very sorry for Luna, she just want something real and not only some carnal pleasure, that is worth some depth respect, I hope she can get what she want, perhaps she can join the herd or something. She don't need some stress relived, just feel loved, and you can be more than happy to obliged. Also I really hope the whole Diamond Tiara thing will be over soon, that is starting to get very creepy and very wrong and that people just stop calling you Frost, is kind of degrading.
P.S: Rocks that can cancel magic? Hmm perhaps Epona can still save herself, where is she anyway? She only has one week left
Spike, Angel and Winona. No. ALL MY NOES! That was mentally scarring. Sort of funny, in macabre sort of way, but mentally scarring nonetheless. As for Lyra "spraying"... Well, I sort of went between pulling a face of outmost disgust and choking down laughter.
Also, Luna. We must have ALL the Luna! Because Luna. 'enuff said.
You are really going over bored with how much sex is in this story. First it was that Celestia is a slut that has a collection of man whores, then ot was the whole swinger thing with Rarity's parents. Spike and bestiality is just too far. Can you please tone it down. Otherwise all of the pointless seaxualness is going to over shadow the romance.
Man I love the way this feels, Cup is very sweet the poor thing. A lot of creep went into this chapter but it's no where near the worst thing I've been exposed to.
2333834 Oh don't be such a frump you will find out that i skate a very thin line every time. Thats not far to Winona, do you hate Winona 2333720 You do know this is a clop story right, I hand stitch every single chapter to have some form of sex in it Remember the description "A clop story WITH a plot" Romance will bloom all over the place. Side note: You know this WHOLE story is bestiality right? From the very first chapter its been filled with it. Just saying. 2333644 Corrected :D Thank you for the catch. 2333634 You so silly Anon, ^_^ 2333577 I shall use the extra three for extra credit. 2333556 Well there will be some more given the next chapter about the sub-plots with Luna and Celestia. Also Diamond Tiara will be there throughout the entire story :p 2333547 I haven't even started story boarding yet :p 2333475 I do to :D 2333391 Well i did accually write out the scene but i cut it out because i want people to KEEP reading the story, So by going into less details i left it more open to interpretation. 2333330 I love that line too ^_^ 2333325 Two words "Explosive Diarrhea" 2333319 Lyra will be there and not be there at the same time. As for little Woona She will have her own parts and as per my usual i dont like telling events of future chapters 2333306 Thank my editors, they make is Awesome
2333959 No, what I don't like is that Spike is into bestiality when there are clearly other ponies he can be with. That's just low what you did to him.
Am, I the only one who is okay with the whole Winona and Spike thing? I mean seriously, All it is, is just two species screwing. And as I see it, Winona seems far more intelligent than your average dog so I can call this consentual. Also compared to the shit I've read this story is great. I also had no problems with the watersports part because again, I have read worst. I think nothing at this point will triumph the mental scarring Sweet Apple Massacre gave me.
2333959 I know you weren't going for that kinda story but its still funny to poke at those who got creeped out by that. 120 days of blueblood was more fucked up than any story I've read beating sweet apple massacre and others.
2333959 PLEASEOHPLEASEOHPLEASEOHPLEASEOHPLEASEOHPLEASE!!! I don't beg, but I am asking you in the most kiss-ass way possible to take the high-road and don't commit the biggest and most hated clichés in all of the romance genre. Please, OH PLEASE, don't use the "Misunderstanding" cliché (where the love interest encounters an event that is not what it seems but assumes the worst anyways, leading to a breakup, an unnecessary moping scene, and at the end, they reunite and live happily ever after)!!! This cliché is too old too live, and too stubborn to die. I don't care if this story ends with Cup alone or the main character dead. I don't care if there is no happy ending. I don't care if the ending is happy, bitter, bittersweet, dark, or mean-spirited (actually, I do care if the mean-spirited ending tries to add insult to injury by being comical). But what I do care is if you put the most common, most bland, most hated, most unnecessary, dumbest cliché in your story or not. I know I sound like a troll or a hater or something along the lines, but I have seen this act TOO many times in movies, shows, novels, short stories, and fanfiction. I even saw it in a music video; who does that? I'm sorry if this sounds like a complaint worse than Rarity's. I actually like this story very much; it's the perfect perverted, human-trapped-in-Equestria fanfic so far (minus the few grammar nitpicks, of course). I just don't want this gem ruined with, pardon my French, shit like the misunderstanding cliché. Even if it may seem a bit inevitable, find another route to prevent it. You are a bright author. I'm (fairly) positive that you can do it. Please don't make me bring Doug Walker into this request. Thank-you.
2334382 Since you seem so prevalent and want to avoid the “Misunderstanding” cliché bits of this and you just seem so completely adamant on wanting to avoid the giant canon ball of foreshadowing. I know what you mean it is cliché and it is over used. Just so you know that there WILL be a huge misunderstanding just not the one you’re thinking of. God I can’t wait for that part. I actually try to avoid the misunderstanding scene, remember at the end where “Frost” openly tells Cup about the letter. Since I don’t want to give out any more info, I am not a fan of telling what is to come.
Another great chapter, pal. I'm really, really enjoying this story so far. It had it's hiccups in the beginning but it's so nice to see it become something so grand and deep. I always look forward to see your fic in my favorites box!
Had a really good chapter this week, a bunch of new information, developments and characters. The "Kinkie Pie" sisters are most certainly trouble, I like that. Not only do we have Discord messing around with Cup, there's the matter of her faith in the main character, the Main's constant flings, Chrysalis will be here hopefully soon, the Kinkie pie sisters, the Mane Six will be back soon looking for blood (so to speak), GAH, so much going on! Such a wonderfully tragic tale so far.
I can't wait to see the Main meet up with Luna and see where that goes. If he's going to meet her soon then does that mean he'll be giving his herding gift so early? It'll feel awful fast if so, there's many options available to him and I'm questioning who in the hell will ultimately be in this herd considering all that's happened and will happen! You've got me crazily invested in this damn story...
I will say though, not to make it seem like I have a one-track mind, but I was kinda missin' the clop here. I know it's not focal, but the Pie sisters' scene was pretty good in a twisted way. Spike and Angel with Winona was VERY surprising but it gave me a good laugh and a semi (Many weak stomachs appeared in the comments...). The story holds well enough on it's own, but I really would've killed someone to see that Lyra scene in it's fullest...
Anyway, lookin' forward to seeing where this all goes. I'm dreading the outcome of the Main's and Diamond's relationship.
2334468 I know what misunderstanding you are actually planning to do since it involves 5/6 of the (spoilers). It would just suck if the act that follows it is moping followed by redemption. I get peeved when authors don't try to be creative, that's all. Glad you informed be before hand...although it probably would've been better to pm me this so as to not let the other readers aware of this foreshadow, since they're busy at the moment with the "wincest kinkcest" and the "pétnage à trois". For they might notice this once they're done being scarred.
2333959 Saying that xenophillia is bestiality is an insult. The Equestrian ponies are very much sentient/sapient like humans. That is not bestiality. Not the same case with Spike and AJ's dog. While the animals are smarter then the real life counterparts, which is really just because I is a cartoon, they are not really sentient, and not at all sapient.
So yeah, you could have a clop story with plot, but there is still a line. One you have crossed.
This chapter, well, it was fuckin' awesome! I am most excited for Luna for some reason. Also Fluttershy would so kick someone in the face if she was made to be angry enough. One last bit, the catholic penis thing, holy god that was funny.
Now this'll be interesting. So if he talks to Luna, and, after a deep and meaningful conversation, she wishes to join his herd, that'll really stick it to Carrot... but of course, I'm sure he'd run it by Cup, right?
2334847 Discord is a good guy, how could you say that about poor Ol' Discord :D 2334800 :D Im glad you enjoyed the chapter as much as i enjoyed writing it :D Fluttershy is innocent why would she hit anypony? 2334997 Anal 4TW 2334570 When did i say anything about xenophillia? 2334543 ^_^ Trust me, its a great misunderstanding BUT i never said anything about the 5/6 having a misunderstanding of anything 2335090 Maybe yes and maybe no, ^_^ who is to say. Just have to keep reading and find out
YO!
I was getting ready for bed and everything too :L
oh well! oh needs sleep anyway?
damn, so deep. MOAR LUNA!!!!!!!!!!
There is an extreme overabundance of mental scarring and horrible images that have entered my mind because of this chapter. I hope you're satisfied, because I'm gonna have nightmares about winona and spike or inkie and blinke for the rest of my life.
I was ok with literally everything...EVERYTHING... and then I read about what happens with Lyra and now I gotta sleep with a lot of sht in mind....
2332785 ^same
still a FUCKING AMAZING chapter though
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fuck discord
Inkie and Blinkie are like the McDoyle brothers.
So, it looks like the Elements of Harmony are going to kill Frost within a week as predicted by the Kinkie Pie sisters. My bet is that Luna or Discord is going to save him at the last minute.
Thank you for the mental scarring. The three-some was bad but bearable. I could handle the twisted incest of Inkie and Blinkie. The Lyra thing was just too much. I think with some clopfics, there should be a line of sorts. You have yet to cross it, but it should still exist for those horrible trollfics.
...Nope
I got rum and beer. I could be drinking. But what do I do? I read.
And I'm going to resume drinking til I forget that Spike, Angel and Winona scene.
I lost it.
I think you meant he instead of him.
but that aside this story is great and just like the others before me i was headed to sleep as well but who needs sleep now a days
Oh God, oh man, oh God.. dear God.
This chapter is actually going to leave a mental scar, with spike and his intercourse with a dog and a bunny.
But the story is still good.
2332785 Sleep? What is sleep?
2332832 More Luna is coming!
2332919 Mentally scaring? Wait till Wednesday :D
2332925 Shit happens
2333004 HAHAHAHAHAHA No.
2333048 YES!
2333016 :D i love dancing around those lines.
2333059 Now the next time your in your room alone you shall think of nothing but winona~
2333084 Screw sleep there is story to be had!
This chapter is like the others, pure Awesome!!
Another fantastic chapter! While I do believe the bit with Lyra was... well, horrifying, the fact that the main character was so traumatized, and that the scene wasn't actually written in detail, instead of something potentially awful, it was a humorous end to the Lyra scenario, assuming her fetish has been fully sated.
Now, though, you're teasing us with Luna, putting her in a situation that could easily get her closer to the main character, but given Cup's reaction, and the main character's (Ours?My? Always hard to describe the character in a send-person fic) love for Cup, I'm not sure if that would ever happen. Though, you've already got a lot of other sub-plots brewing, perhaps I'm being greedy thinking about Luna too?
I eagerly wait to see what happens next.
AUGH! That killed any sort of boner I could muster. The ceiling?! WHY?!
Is that the best you got?
120 days of blueblood is more scarring then this you lily livered pansies.
*howls of laughter*
I love this fic. I really do.
Aaaaw. That is just precious. I hope for another update soon!
40 suitors?! Wow, Celestia's bed is no longer, so especial if she so open to be with any stallion she want depending of how she feel that day a little like Molestia but she control herself…kind off.
I'm very sorry for Luna, she just want something real and not only some carnal pleasure, that is worth some depth respect, I hope she can get what she want, perhaps she can join the herd or something. She don't need some stress relived, just feel loved, and you can be more than happy to obliged.
Also I really hope the whole Diamond Tiara thing will be over soon, that is starting to get very creepy and very wrong and that people just stop calling you Frost, is kind of degrading.
P.S: Rocks that can cancel magic? Hmm perhaps Epona can still save herself, where is she anyway? She only has one week left
13/10
good show sir
Spike, Angel and Winona. No. ALL MY NOES! That was mentally scarring. Sort of funny, in macabre sort of way, but mentally scarring nonetheless. As for Lyra "spraying"... Well, I sort of went between pulling a face of outmost disgust and choking down laughter.
Also, Luna. We must have ALL the Luna! Because Luna. 'enuff said.
Commence read.
Should-er?
You are really going over bored with how much sex is in this story. First it was that Celestia is a slut that has a collection of man whores, then ot was the whole swinger thing with Rarity's parents. Spike and bestiality is just too far. Can you please tone it down. Otherwise all of the pointless seaxualness is going to over shadow the romance.
Man I love the way this feels, Cup is very sweet the poor thing. A lot of creep went into this chapter but it's no where near the worst thing I've been exposed to.
2333834 Oh don't be such a frump you will find out that i skate a very thin line every time. Thats not far to Winona, do you hate Winona
2333720 You do know this is a clop story right, I hand stitch every single chapter to have some form of sex in it Remember the description "A clop story WITH a plot" Romance will bloom all over the place.
Side note: You know this WHOLE story is bestiality right? From the very first chapter its been filled with it. Just saying.
2333644 Corrected :D Thank you for the catch.
2333634 You so silly Anon, ^_^
2333577 I shall use the extra three for extra credit.
2333556 Well there will be some more given the next chapter about the sub-plots with Luna and Celestia. Also Diamond Tiara will be there throughout the entire story :p
2333547 I haven't even started story boarding yet :p
2333475 I do to :D
2333391 Well i did accually write out the scene but i cut it out because i want people to KEEP reading the story, So by going into less details i left it more open to interpretation.
2333330 I love that line too ^_^
2333325 Two words "Explosive Diarrhea"
2333319 Lyra will be there and not be there at the same time. As for little Woona She will have her own parts and as per my usual i dont like telling events of future chapters
2333306 Thank my editors, they make is Awesome
2333959 No, what I don't like is that Spike is into bestiality when there are clearly other ponies he can be with. That's just low what you did to him.
2334011 You do know that would still be beatiality if he got with a pony too right? Spike likes it and so does Winona ^_^ be happy
2334051 It would just be more better if it was with somepony like Rarity, or Fluttershy, or somepony at all, not some dog or pet or something.
Am, I the only one who is okay with the whole Winona and Spike thing? I mean seriously, All it is, is just two species screwing. And as I see it, Winona seems far more intelligent than your average dog so I can call this consentual. Also compared to the shit I've read this story is great. I also had no problems with the watersports part because again, I have read worst. I think nothing at this point will triumph the mental scarring Sweet Apple Massacre gave me.
YOU! I WAS LED TO BELIEVE THE MANE SIX (sans Pinkie) WOULD SHOW UP THIS CHAPTER!
2333959
I know you weren't going for that kinda story but its still funny to poke at those who got creeped out by that.
120 days of blueblood was more fucked up than any story I've read beating sweet apple massacre and others.
2334068
120 days of blueblood nuff said
2334114 *shudders* I don't think I could handle that at all
2334127
I honestly couldn't finish it yet due to my stomach fighting me to not read it.
It won of course.
2334142 Link? I would actually like to see if I can read this
2334154
Click here
Your body better be ready mate!
2333959
PLEASEOHPLEASEOHPLEASEOHPLEASEOHPLEASEOHPLEASE!!! I don't beg, but I am asking you in the most kiss-ass way possible to take the high-road and don't commit the biggest and most hated clichés in all of the romance genre. Please, OH PLEASE, don't use the "Misunderstanding" cliché (where the love interest encounters an event that is not what it seems but assumes the worst anyways, leading to a breakup, an unnecessary moping scene, and at the end, they reunite and live happily ever after)!!! This cliché is too old too live, and too stubborn to die. I don't care if this story ends with Cup alone or the main character dead. I don't care if there is no happy ending. I don't care if the ending is happy, bitter, bittersweet, dark, or mean-spirited (actually, I do care if the mean-spirited ending tries to add insult to injury by being comical). But what I do care is if you put the most common, most bland, most hated, most unnecessary, dumbest cliché in your story or not. I know I sound like a troll or a hater or something along the lines, but I have seen this act TOO many times in movies, shows, novels, short stories, and fanfiction. I even saw it in a music video; who does that? I'm sorry if this sounds like a complaint worse than Rarity's. I actually like this story very much; it's the perfect perverted, human-trapped-in-Equestria fanfic so far (minus the few grammar nitpicks, of course). I just don't want this gem ruined with, pardon my French, shit like the misunderstanding cliché. Even if it may seem a bit inevitable, find another route to prevent it. You are a bright author. I'm (fairly) positive that you can do it. Please don't make me bring Doug Walker into this request. Thank-you.
2334382
Since you seem so prevalent and want to avoid the “Misunderstanding” cliché bits of this and you just seem so completely adamant on wanting to avoid the giant canon ball of foreshadowing. I know what you mean it is cliché and it is over used. Just so you know that there WILL be a huge misunderstanding just not the one you’re thinking of.
God I can’t wait for that part.
I actually try to avoid the misunderstanding scene, remember at the end where “Frost” openly tells Cup about the letter. Since I don’t want to give out any more info, I am not a fan of telling what is to come.
Another great chapter, pal. I'm really, really enjoying this story so far. It had it's hiccups in the beginning but it's so nice to see it become something so grand and deep. I always look forward to see your fic in my favorites box!
Had a really good chapter this week, a bunch of new information, developments and characters. The "Kinkie Pie" sisters are most certainly trouble, I like that. Not only do we have Discord messing around with Cup, there's the matter of her faith in the main character, the Main's constant flings, Chrysalis will be here hopefully soon, the Kinkie pie sisters, the Mane Six will be back soon looking for blood (so to speak), GAH, so much going on! Such a wonderfully tragic tale so far.
I can't wait to see the Main meet up with Luna and see where that goes. If he's going to meet her soon then does that mean he'll be giving his herding gift so early? It'll feel awful fast if so, there's many options available to him and I'm questioning who in the hell will ultimately be in this herd considering all that's happened and will happen! You've got me crazily invested in this damn story...
I will say though, not to make it seem like I have a one-track mind, but I was kinda missin' the clop here. I know it's not focal, but the Pie sisters' scene was pretty good in a twisted way. Spike and Angel with Winona was VERY surprising but it gave me a good laugh and a semi (Many weak stomachs appeared in the comments...). The story holds well enough on it's own, but I really would've killed someone to see that Lyra scene in it's fullest...
Anyway, lookin' forward to seeing where this all goes. I'm dreading the outcome of the Main's and Diamond's relationship.
2334468
I know what misunderstanding you are actually planning to do since it involves 5/6 of the (spoilers). It would just suck if the act that follows it is moping followed by redemption. I get peeved when authors don't try to be creative, that's all. Glad you informed be before hand...although it probably would've been better to pm me this so as to not let the other readers aware of this foreshadow, since they're busy at the moment with the "wincest kinkcest" and the "pétnage à trois". For they might notice this once they're done being scarred.
2333959
Saying that xenophillia is bestiality is an insult. The Equestrian ponies are very much sentient/sapient like humans. That is not bestiality.
Not the same case with Spike and AJ's dog. While the animals are smarter then the real life counterparts, which is really just because I is a cartoon, they are not really sentient, and not at all sapient.
So yeah, you could have a clop story with plot, but there is still a line. One you have crossed.
This chapter, well, it was fuckin' awesome! I am most excited for Luna for some reason. Also Fluttershy would so kick someone in the face if she was made to be angry enough. One last bit, the catholic penis thing, holy god that was funny.
first time im glad that discord is kind of a douchebag.
Oh my... somehow i knew that bit with Lyra will end horribly but i had no freaking idea it would be that bad. Good show.
Now this'll be interesting. So if he talks to Luna, and, after a deep and meaningful conversation, she wishes to join his herd, that'll really stick it to Carrot... but of course, I'm sure he'd run it by Cup, right?
2334847 Discord is a good guy, how could you say that about poor Ol' Discord :D
2334800 :D Im glad you enjoyed the chapter as much as i enjoyed writing it :D Fluttershy is innocent why would she hit anypony?
2334997 Anal 4TW
2334570 When did i say anything about xenophillia?
2334543 ^_^ Trust me, its a great misunderstanding BUT i never said anything about the 5/6 having a misunderstanding of anything
2335090 Maybe yes and maybe no, ^_^ who is to say. Just have to keep reading and find out
"Stallions like that just don’t fall from the sky"
*letter falls on table*
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