the starfisher and the moon

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the starfisher and the moon

The moon can be a lonely place its night’s eternal its days nonexistent. This is the truth I’ve had to live with. The truth I’ve always known. I try not to think of it, it hurts too much. The loneliness of the moon is eternal only to be tested by the loneliness of the heart. I learned this when I met her.

I saw her there crying, her mane as dark as the night. “Why are you crying?” I asked. She did not reply. So I sat next to her to keep her company. At the time I did not know if was for her or for me. I just sat next to her. Her tears still flowing freely. I sat next to her watching the stars. I tried to comfort her but she turned me away. I did not mind this. After all I was no longer alone. I was happy even though she would not talk to me.

“My name is Starfisher, what’s yours?” I asked Again no words escaped her lips only more tears from her eyes. So I continued to sit by her side I would have sat next to her for as long as the night lasted but not all things last forever.

“Hello.” She finally said her tears stopped flowing freely. “Who are you?” she asked

“Starfisher.” I said again. “What’s yours?” I asked

“Luna.” She replied

“What a lovely name, a lovely name for such a lovely creature.” I said to her. She did not reply, only smiled and I smiled back. I was truly happy. Even though I truly did not know her.

“May I ask why you were crying?” I asked again not really expecting her to answer

“Because I’m lonely.” She replied

I nearly started crying when I heard those words. For I knew how truly painful it was to be alone. “It’s ok you’re not alone now, I’m with you, and I’ll stay by your side for all eternity.” I said to comfort her or me. At the time I truly did not know.

“Why, you do not know me?” She asked.

This was true I did not know her but I did not care. “Because no one deserves to be alone.” I replied

“Thank you.” She replied

We continued to sit there watching the stars as they passed by.

“What are you?” She asked.

“I am a figment of your imagination.” I replied jokingly. She was not amused.

“I’m a starfisher.” I said

“I thought that was your name.” she replied

“It is my name and what I am”. I said

“May I ask what you are?” I asked

“I am…..was a princess.” She replied.

“You’re not anymore?” I asked.

“No.” she replied sadly

“Why?” I asked. In an instant her expression of sadness turned to anger.

“BECAUSE MY SISTER BANISHED ME!” she replied.

“Why, why would your own sister banish you to the moon?” I asked

“Because I wanted night to last eternal.” She replied, her expression turning back to sadness.

Many time’s I have watched the world below. The creatures as happy as they could be but I also saw night was not eternal. Unlike the moon. So I asked her.

“Why would you want night to last eternal?”

Because nopony loves my night’s. They sleep in them and play in my sister’s days.” She replied.

I put my hand on her back and said. “If the nights lasted forever they would not be special. So do not fret that nopony sees them for the most beautiful things are usually never seen. Do not worry though for I have seen many of your nights each more beautiful than the last.” She smiled but I could see that she was still sad. “Hey let me show you why I’m called a starfisher.” I picked up my fishing rod that was lying next to us and flung it up towards the heavens. I pulled down the first star that its strings touched. I gave to her it was the first gift I ever gave to anyone.

She took it and said “thank you.”

She was happy or so I thought. We spent many centuries together telling each other stories. I told her the stories of the stars and she told her stories. Like how she used raise the moon every night. Truthfully I thought this was funny back then. How could any creature let alone a pony raise the moon but I did not say anything. I did not want to hurt her feelings. We we’re happy so very happy for both us we’re no longer alone. Sadly all things must come to an end.

“STARFISHER, STARFISHER!” She screamed running towards me.

“WHAT?!” I replied

“I found a way home” She said happily.

I was saddened when I heard that but I did no let her know. “That’s wonderful news, I’m so happy for you” I replied.

“Me to, I was watching a mare on the world below. She was reading book. It was about me.” She said.

“What did the book say?” I asked

“It said that four stars would free me.” She replied ever so happily. “So umm I was wondering could you use your rod to fish down the stars?” she asked me

Hesitant, I said “yes” I truly did not want to see her go. I loved her. But I never told her. Thinking back on it I wish I did.

“Really, thank you, thank you so much.” She said.

“What stars must I pull down?” I asked her.

She lifted her hoof towards sky and pointed out four stars. “Ok but it will take some time.” I said to her. I was lying I could of easily brought down those stars in mere seconds. I just did not want to see her go.

“Ok” she replied. She then went on her own way to watch the world below. Knowing she would soon be there.

“Luna are you ready, I have pulled down the stars. I said

“No.” She replied tears coming from her eyes.

“What’s wrong?” I asked her

“The ponies they fear me. They call me nightmare moon they say I’m a monster.” She replied

“How do you know this? We cannot hear the words below we can only see.” I said confused.

“I saw it in a book that the mare was reading.” She replied

“The same mare that was reading the book that told how to free you?” I asked.

“Yes.” She replied

“Well you know what you must do.” I said

“What?” she asked still crying

“You must go to them and show them you’re not a monster.” I replied.

“Ok, thank you.” She said wiping the tears from her eyes.

“See isn’t that better. Now are you ready.” I asked her.

“Yes.” She replied.

It was done, the stars where in place. The portal was opened. This would be our first and final goodbye but I would soon find out a black heart can’t so easily be painted over. I saw her there smiling back at me. If only I knew back then how much she was hurting inside.I watched as she left me. I watched as she landed on the world below. To my horror I watched as she imprisoned her own sister as she did many years ago. “LUNA NO.” I cried out but she did hear me. I knew she couldn’t hear but I kept calling out her name. I saw her setting traps for six ponies. I do not know why she did this. For I could only see what was going on not hear.

Finally it had come, at the time I thought it was going to be her demise. My beautiful Luna would be lost to me forever but I was wrong. The six ponies freed her from her black heart. She was happy now. She was no longer alone. Her sister even made up with. I was happy that she was now happy even though I was now alone again. “Good bye Luna and good luck.” I said.

(Many years later)

So the moon can be a lonely place its night’s eternal its day’s nonexi…….

“Starfisher is that you?” Luna called out.

Starfisher then broke out into tears and said “Yes it’s me I’ve missed so much.
They then ran to each other embracing. “I have missed you too.” Replied Luna

The End

Author's Note:

Well I hope it wasn’t to bad this is the first time I’ve ever written a first person story

Comments

[epreeses1]

First off. I wing it alot too
But i'm a bit more successful at it then you Please don't hate me.
First off the story line has a lot of potential, but it wasn't executed properly.
Okay, the first thing storywise is that there's no setting. yes you mention that it's on the moon, but what it it like? for all i know there is a constant barrage of candy filled jelly balls. Tell me what it's like, is it cold, hot, dark, scary. Are there flesh eating monsters that are trying to give you ballons filled with cream paste? i need to know becouse the setting is partly the way the reader connects with the story.

Also, not to be rude, but your description of Luna kind of sucked, and who is Starfisher? where is she from? why was she on the moon? what does she look like?
it's questions like this, that you need to ask yourself. Do you know the character as well as you do yourself? if not than it's not good enough.

I'm sorry if i'm being long winded but if you want i can take the story into a word doc and really dig into it, correcting grammar mistakes cuz there were alot and making it so that the story makes sense. you have a good story, it just needs a little push

Thanks

[Nineveh]

I don't know why this has so many damn dislikes, but this is amazing in its own way. I happened to find this and I was surprised. Utterly shocked at the way it was written, and the grammatical errors don't matter; it was beautiful. The feelings put into this were strong and beautiful. And Starfisherー I loved the way she/he was written. I don't know why people should be disappointed at her lack of background, but I love the mysterious aura of her. I could almost feel the tightness of the bond between Luna and Starfisher. When I read a story, I try to imagine how it would feel to be the main character, in this case, Starfisher. The pain of losing someone you love gets to you, and I could see and feel that string pain. Ignore whatever espreeses1 said; just the fact that Luna said "I'm lonely" brought the setting of the moon and the descriptions of it to life (sorry, espreeses1). Also, ignore what they say about not liking Luna's character in the story; it's a fanfiction, and thus it shouldn't matter, because she is how you see her. You are you, and there's nothing that can change that. And no, I'm nowhere NEAR done. This story completely changes my perspective of Luna's banishment. As I mentioned before, I feel the pain that Starfisher felt at losing Luna, though she/he knew that it was only best. Then to see Luna bring havoc to Equestria, after all the years that she was imprisoned, must have really been terrible, because Starfisher knew that it wasn't who she really was. I LOVE the ending, their reunion, the way it just ended and allowed the reader to continue to their liking ("you decide what happens next"). I really, really hate the fact that there are so many dislikes. I see only grammar getting in the way of this story's publicity (and it could use some cover art, too). If you'd like, I'd be extremely happy to edit this for you. I see much, much potential in you, and if you continue in the path you're going, you're sure to become one hell of a writer.

[Nineveh]

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for all i know there is a constant barrage of candy filled jelly balls. Tell me what it's like, is it cold, hot, dark, scary. Are there flesh eating monsters that are trying to give you ballons filled with cream paste?

I'm really, really sorry about this, and it's nothing personal, but, come on, really? Use some common sense.

....your description of Luna kind of sucked, and who is Starfisher?

I'm sorry again, but, it's up to the writer to decide how they see a certain character; the reader is the one who interprets the writer's perspective. Also, Starfisher. If you didn't notice by the name, "star fisher." By the story (the part where Starfisher is asked by Luna to pull the stars to the moon, initiating the portal for her escape) and my own knowledge, I'm guessing a starfisher is some sort of magical figure that has the ability to mobilize or move stars.

I'm very sorry to contradict your comment, and I very well see the basis for you concerns, and though it's not my place to criticize or judge comments, I did, and I hope you understand that it's nothing personal. You're a great writer, and it's not up to someone like me to look down on you.