Competition
Dash awoke with a start just before her dream self hit the ground, breathing heavily as her heart beat. God, that'd been vivid, for one of the dreams Jason had appeared not to take part in. She didn't have to look over to know that he'd gotten up for some reason or another, probably not because he was feeling super jolly or anything.
This was usually the part where Dash got up to figure out what was wrong, probably exchange a hug and some kisses to comfort the guy. But assuming he was still feeling homesick, not that she could blame him, her presence might not be the best thing for him to see.
"Pfft, yeah right." She whispered into the dark, getting up a moment later. A look out the window confirmed the time, somewhere near the dawn hours. Something shifted in the room with all of the human junk, not that she wasn't going to check there first anyway. Dash peered around the side of the door, gasping at how changed the room looked. What had previously been a pile was now a building of blocks and several organized stacks and rows. A glob of pieces probably stuck in the vague shape of the object they would become floated past, followed by several books and a circuit board.
"How long have you been up?" She asked, stepping inside and noticing the pile of stuff that JAson must've called junk behind the door.
"A few hours." He replied shortly, sounding a mixture between annoyed and depressed.
"I went down to get some books from the library. Did you know they have nothing on long distance teleportation?"
"How did you get the books this late?"
"Ugh, Twilight left the door unlocked. Or Spike I guess. Anyway, I left her a note, and grabbed a bunch of books."
Dash sighed and sat down next to Jason, leaning her shoulder against his. "This isn't good for you, Jason. You're just going to burn yourself out."
"No I won't. What's the big deal anyway? I would've just been sleepless in bed, I may as well get something done."
"Just make sure you know when to stop, alright? I don't need a husk of a fiancé laying around."
"As if, I have more brain power than that, I'm not just going to lose my mind."
"You can never be too careful, right?" Dash asked, pushing her forehead into his and watching her reflection in his eyes.
"I'm guessing you missed having me in bed?"
"No! Well, yeah, but that wasn't the reason I came over here. I'm worried about you, I just don't want things to get worse when they have a chance at getting better."
"Heh, yeah." He paused. "At least this time you didn't freak out when I left."
"I figure you're not going to find somepony else who wouldn't be scared around you anyway. And that you couldn't hold a good enough alter ego, or have the patience for another relationship, or-"
"Alright, I get it. You're my one and only love, blah. Happy?"
"A little." She replied with a smirk, sitting down next to him to put a hoof around his neck. "Plus, you gotta be rested for that race tomorrow, I don't want to beat you when you're all tired. That's no fun." She leaned over to kiss him, before getting back up and sneezing.
"Fine, just a minute." He said, watching her return to the door.
"Oh yeah, Jason?"
"Mhm?" He wiped his nose.
"Just because a spell isn't in the book doesn't mean it can't be invented." She left on that note, chuckling at the blank expression on his face. If he could get something working, he'd have to take her along. For all Jason had talked about Earth, it must be a pretty crazy place. Nothing like the boring sameness of Equestria, anyway. And she was always ready for a challenge.
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"So who's going to win?" Scoots asked as Jason and Dash landed in the town square, both breaking into trots as they shared a competitive glance.
"It'll be me, I'm sure." Dash replied triumphantly, bumping against Jason with a giggle.
"Oh yeah, I guess we will, huh?" Jason countered, pushing his forehead against hers roughly as they stared at each other, plotting and scheming as they walked towards the start line. A balloon floated overhead, settling over a forest that Jason assumed wasn't connected to the Everfree. He could see Pinkie manning a loudspeaker, looking down excitedly at a crowd that he could see in the distance.
"Heh, in a way, I just want to beat you, I don't care what place I get."
Dash giggled, covering up her muzzle with a hoof as it turned into a cough. "I'm handicapped."
"Shush, I was coughing for a while last night also, and I have less sleep to work with."
"You've got longer legs."
"You're lighter."
"You have more muscles."
"You're more aerodynamic." Jason finished, looking at her smugly as she struggled to come up with another handicap. He picked Twilight out of the crowd as she walked towards the trio, thinking briefly about trying to go around her before she was already too close to avoid.
"Are you three competing? Or two, I guess. Scoots may not want to compete." The mare said, turning her gaze towards Jason. "Are you feeling better? I heard you had some sort of flu?"
He nodded. "It wasn't that bad, really. I think I'm catching what Dash has though."
"Did you ever think that maybe you should skip the race?"
"It crossed my mind, but what if I'm not around next year, as morbid as that sounds?"
"Uh, um." She replied, seeming unable to come up with a response. "Did Dash at least tell you about the human that showed up?"
He started to walk towards the group again. "A little. I heard he escaped within like, a half hour."
"Yeah." Twilight responded, drooping her head. "What humans don't have in magic, they definitely make up for in quick thinking and durability."
"And the hands."
"Yeah, and that." She sighed. "I wish I could've questioned him, but after Dash came back and said the trail went dead, well, I dunno. It was a lost opportunity."
"So is this the usual turnout, or is something else going on?" Jason asked, changing the subject as he looked around.
"Celestia's coming here today for something about awards for soldiers that have come home. She's gone through most of the cities already, and Ponyville is the last one before Canterlot."
"So what's the news there? Anything of particular notice?" He asked.
"I'm not sure, I think there have been a few high medals, but most of them are probably going to be given to the ones still inside the Griffin Empire."
"It's Equestria now." Dash pointed out.
"Well, not until we actually have peace talks on the matter." Jason said. "But I don't know when those are anyway."
"Hey guys!" Another pony yelled, bringing Dash and Jason out of their conversation and over to the speaker. Morning was hobbling over with Tank, who had an arm over her back.
"He's okay?!" Dash yelled, galloping over to hug at the pony's neck. Jason felt a weight lift from his chest as he hugged Tank as well, feeling a tear squeeze itself out of his eye.
"You scared me Tank, I didn't want to be responsible for your death."
"Ah, you didn't call me tank for nothing I guess." He replied, his free arm wrapping around Jason's back.
"I can only carry you to a point." Morning wheezed out, before Tank returned his hoof to the ground.
"Anyway, in the long run all that will have happened is the loss of some feeling in my leg and my back. That's what the doctors say, anyway. Morning filled me in on what happened while I was out, it hardly seems like I should be complaining. But I'm happy for you two, even if I did see it coming a mile away."
"Always that hint of an insult in there, eh Tank?"
"Vanilla conversation is boring." He chuckled. "So are you running? I can guess you are, Dash."
"Like I would turn down an opportunity to win at something."
"Ah bet." Applejack said as she walked up. "Ya think you got it easy this year, huh Dash?"
"Yeah." She replied. "Unless Jason beats me, which I doubt."
"Hey, jus' ta clear this up, ya can't use yer changeling powers fer nuthin'." She turned to Dash. "And that means no flying for you either."
"Pfft, I don't need flying. So long as you don't stop time we'll be fine, Jason."
"Huh." Twilight said, her ears perking. "What, exactly, do you mean?"
"Well, when I was trying to bring Dash back to life, or keep her from dying as it may be." He replied, "I learned some other spells first, like that one."
"Ain't that jus' like teleportation?" Applejack asked.
"Hah, no." He said, concentrating as power channeled through his horn. His surroundings went silent as he looked up, grinning that everyone had stopped moving. Jason carefully picked up Applejack and laid her on her side, taking her saddlebag to stick over Twilight's horn. He stood back and thought for a moment, before he grabbed one of Dash's front hooves and stuck it into a position that made her look like she was thinking, before he propped up her arm with a stick. Jason ended the spell with a feeling that didn't feel unlike the rapid outflow of air, and stared at his victims.
Dash just started to laugh, lifting her hoof so that the stick could drop. Twilight shook the saddlebag from her horn, the hint of a smile showing up through her bewilderment as Applejack chuckled and grabbed back her saddlebag.
"How'd you do that?" The lavender mare asked. "I- I've never seen anypony attempt something like that before."
"Yeah, well I had to I guess." Jason looked at his hooves. "That's pretty cool though, being able to do stuff like that."
"So did ya ever find out why Dash used magic?"
"Uh, I'm still looking into it, I guess." Jason replied, needing to yell over the volume increase of the crowd. In all probability, Celestia had shown up. He felt a little jealous of her popularity, but in a way he kinda liked the fact that he could go out in public without being swarmed. If only it was a little less extreme.
The noise quickly diminished as most everyone bowed, leaving Dash and Jason out of the loop as they turned around. Dash went to drop before the princess extended an arm from a wooden stage not too far away.
"Jason, you're supposed to bow!" Applejack hissed.
"Fuck that shit." He whispered back
"There's no need." She said with a smile. "If anyone should be bowing it'd probably be me anyway." A slight gasp circled around as the princess let out a slight giggle. She made a gesture and the ponies rose back to their hooves. "Meet me after the race, I've got some news you may find interesting."
Jason saluted briefly, turning back to the others as Celestia called out a name. He chatted idly with Tank and Morning for several minutes, watching as ponies quickly received medals and departed, amidst a fair amount of applause. Jason's name never came up, and for some reason he hadn't expected it to. But as the last pony got off the stage and attention shifted to Pinkie in her balloon, he knew that he wasn't going to be disappointed.
A few tense moments passed as Jason looked over at Dash, sharing her competitive grin as he dug in one of his hooves. Morning lined up next to him as Applejack took her place next to Dash.
"This could be any amount of awesome this year!" Pinkie yelled, "Applejack and Rainbow Dash, the usual favorites, have new competition that could shake our perception of the world altogether!!"
"Pinkie, you're exaggerating again." Spike sighed. "In all actuality, ponies are saying that Jason and Morning Rain, both members of the to be decorated Team Green Bean, will make a surprise dark horse running this year, no pun intended."
"Exactly!" Pinkie replied. "And so, without further ado, the something something annual race thingy is open!"
Jason could swear he heard Spike facepalm from all the way down on the ground. "In spite of Pinkie's... shenanigans, is everypony ready?!" There was a huge cheer, as Jason let out a yawn that turned into a cough.
"Oh crap, Scoots." He pulled the filly off of his back. "Meet me at the finish like, okay?" He asked, before tossing her into the air and watching her start to hover.
"Good luck then." She sighed. "Too bad you can't both win." Heh, kids.
"Set?!" Pinkie yelled before Spike could continue. "Well then.... GO GO GO!!!!" A pounding of hooves filled the air as Jason took off, bumping into Dash's shoulder as they ran neck and neck. Jason took a look backwards to see that Applejack and Morning weren't too far behind, the former gritting her teeth as she tried to catch up. Jason only pushed himself harder, drawing out a slight lead. He hardly felt winded, whether that was from his body or the exercise though, he couldn't be sure.
He took a breath, feeling some gunk in his throat. So the goddamned cold had caught up with him, he assumed. He wasn't sure if he could be happy, all things considered. He'd wanted to win this, one-up Dash in some way. Just because he was her husband to-be didn't mean he was just going to be a push over. And some part of him knew that she wouldn't want him to give any less than his all.
"Jason, Dash, Morning and Applejack seem to have created their own pack already, although it's too early to tell who can keep the breakneck pace they've started with. We may be on our way to a new Running of the Leaves record, if this keeps up."
"You mean they might beat Swifthoof?!" Pinkie yelled, narrowing her eyes. "I'll believe it when I see it."
"Well it doesn't look like you'll have to wait long." Spike replied, watching the competitors through the falling leaves. "They're already through the first leg, and this looks like it'll be a much cleaner race than last year."
"Yeah, but who wants that? It was way more interesting when Dash and Applejack fought it out."
"Let's just hope we don't end up with a fatality, alright?"
"Well that sounds fine, Jason can just fix anypony up, that doesn't matter."
Jason shook a hoof at the balloon. "You better not... try anything, Pinkie!" He coughed, watching her giggle back before he refocused his eyes on Dash, as she drifted ahead. His hooves thundered down the path, struggling to find purchase as the soil went gravely for a few moments. Jason coughed again, slipping slightly as a stone rolled under his hoof. His next hoof came down on worse footing and he tripped, smashing his face into the ground as he slid along. A few feathers tore out of one of his wings as he came to a halt, still coughing like mad.
"Jason!" Dash yelled, pulling something from under a wing. "Catch!" She jumped, flaring her wings for a moment to throw an object backwards, which ran into his hoof. A cough drop. Heh. Jason got up slowly, rubbing his wing as he popped the thing into his mouth. A blob of ponies ran by, followed by a few stragglers. So what, he could catch up.
Twilight trotted by.
"Pacing isn't going to help you this time, silly horse." He said, remembering what Dash had said earlier that morning. Jason didn't giver her time to respond before he took off, breathing more heavily than he would have liked as the cough drop soothed his throat. It only helped to an extent, though. He coughed again, quickly passing by the pack as he ran.
His face felt a little wet, and he knew without touching his face that some of the gravel had cut grooves in his cheek, probably deeper than he'd thought. Jason shut his eyes and ran faster, opening them after a few seconds to take advice for a sign that pointed him up a hill. God, something seemed off. Or familiar, he couldn't quite tell which.
Running up stone was much harder than along dirt, and was one of the things he really missed about having feet. At least it appeared to be some sort of pointy sandstone, which would give him traction. But then again, he'd be cut up if he fell. He caught sight of the end of the slope and tried to change direction, sliding to a stop as a few rocks rolled down over the edge.
"No use staring, I guess." He said quietly, sure that the sign had been turned at this point. He hardly remembered this episode anyway, Ben was the real brony anyway. He'd just seen some of the episodes. Maybe most, he didn't know how many there were, actually. Jason sighed, looking over the edge.
He jumped over, spreading his wings as he hit the ground. He could feel his hooves heat up as more and more of the hill went by, accelerating him despite his wings' attempts to slow him down.
"Wow, who said this wouldn't be interesting?!" Pinkie yelled, swiveling to stare Spike down. "Look at him, sliding down a hill!"
"Yes, he appears to be doing something different over there." He paused. "Is that legal?"
"It's the same distance, and he's scraping off his hooves to keep going, just let him be, Spike."
"But-"
"Shhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh..." The mare replied, putting a hoof over his mouth. "Shhhhhh..."
Jason's hooves hit the dirt of the path with a thud, making him almost faceplant again at the sudden change in speed. He could feel that there was a fair amount of hoof missing, feeling almost as if it had started to become rubbed raw. But assuming he didn't slide down any more cliffs today, they should stay together.
"It seems as if Dash may be the winner this year." Spike said, "Assuming, of course, that she can keep that pace up and stay ahead of her competition. Speaking of which, Applejack seems to be closing in."
"Oh, but I wouldn't forget about Jason or Twilight Sparkle, if anypony's going to make this more interesting, it's gotta be them."
Jason sighed at their banter and sped up, almost feeling the energy drain out of him as a cramp developed in his shoulder. Just go faster... he kept thinking to himself, ignoring the pain as it flourished towards his hindquarters as well. He could see the others, slowly gaining on them as he got more and more out of breath. Fuck it, at this point he was going to give it all he had in a rush; there was no way he was catching up otherwise.
Applejack and Morning were neck and neck as he caught up, slowly passing the pair by as a drop of blood made its way into his eye, stinging it and turning his vision a slight hue of red as it spread out. He could hear them huffing and puffing as he put in the last ounces of energy he had, drawing up closer to dash as the finish line neared.
Dash turned to look him in the eye, smiling for a moment as she dipped her head, starting to pull ahead. Jason kept up, feeling his hoof catch along the ground. A sinking feeling hit him as he floated through the air for a moment, watching Dash's expression turn from competitiveness to slight disappointment. He hit the ground for like the millionth time, sliding across the line just ahead of the other two.
He didn't move for at least a minute, trying to regain control of his body. Dash pulled him upright, sweeping her hoof down along his cheek in an attempt to rid any of the pebbles of the grooves they'd caused.
"You okay there, big guy?"
"I shouldn't have done that." He mumbled, taking a few steps forward. "I'm tired." He stumbled over to Applejack, bumping his hoof against hers. "Good race."
"Got me there at the end, huh?"
"Yeah. Some idiot changed the sign around, I had to go down that hill thing."
"Is that still like that? I thought it was pointing the right way."
"Who went by last?"
"Ah did, that's why Ah was sayin'..."
"Whatever, ugh, I'm fine with this."
"It's still weird." Morning said.
Dash left for a moment, returning a minute or so later adorned with medals. "I believe this is yours." She said, handing one to Applejack, then Morning, and finally Jason. He put it around his neck, looking down and freaking out for a moment. "You left the wing at home, Jason."
"Oh yeah."
"Wow, I can't believe you won!" Scoots yelled, hugging onto Dash's leg.
"Yeah, well it wasn't something I'm totally proud of." She replied. "I'd have rather won without Jason tripping."
"It's no big deal, I should've watched where I was going."
"So why didn't ya want to bow to the princess, Jason?" Applejack asked.
"Well bowing has a bad connotation, usually. It refers to an absolute monarch, as far as I'm concerned. And I kinda don't want to be part of a system where I'm forced to bow. I can show respect in other ways, just not that."
"Ah."
"I don't see too much of that anymore, it's too bad, in a way." Celestia said, walking up to the group. "Quite a showing, you four. I'm impressed." She sighed. "In any case, I'm coming to you two, possibly any others of your team, that we'll be beginning peace talks in Canterlot tomorrow. You don't have to take part, but I feel you bring something to the table."
"Thanks." Jason said, smiling over at Dash. "Can we by any chance bring Scoots? Maybe Evening as well?"
"I'm sure I can get a room ready, if that's what you're asking." She glanced at Dash. "Maybe two rooms."
"Where is Evening anyway?" Dash asked. I haven't seen her anywhere.
"She's here." Lyra said as she walked up, dragging along an unconscious Evening. "Came over last night and discovered alcohol. And then I discovered a couple things. Don't let her out of your sight with alcohol, and don't let her drink alcohol.
"Is she hungover?" Celestia asked with some concern.
"I think so. She's probably fine, but she drank so much at once and Jason says that changeling metabolism is way faster than with ponies, so... She kinda got all that alcohol in her system all at once"
"Alrighty then." Dash said, poking the mare.
"Yes, at the very worst, we'd rather honor you for your service when you're actually present, so try to arrive by tomorrow at the latest. Three, if I'm correct."
"Sure thing." He sighed. "There's at least one thing I have to do first though."
"Oh, by all means, do whatever you like. I'll tell somepony to look for you at the gates of the castle." Jason waved as she left, watching her disappear into the crowd.
"So what's this thing you need to do?" Dash asked.
"Remember to keep you alive." Jason replied simply, taking a few deep breaths as white light started to spread into his vision, sucking him into that peculiar sameness. Just like last time.
Oh, how he wished things were simpler.
well i am VERY glad you are not taking a break with a cliffhanger. I have read enough stories that do that. Good chapter, looking forward to what happens next
Ah, I love seeing updates for this story, once again, the best MLP fanfic in my book.
I like this story, please write more, even if you wait until the end of july to do it. don't forget about it, because this story is too good to leave unfinished. In fact, I think I'm going to go start from the beginning of the first story and read it all all again right now.
Everytime I see an update for this story:
"Ooh, an update. Wonder which story- *SQUEEEEEE!!!*"
Then I get strange looks for the rest of the day because my face is stuck like
A little sad that there won't be an update for awhile , but that'll make it so much better when it comes.
awwww, gonna be sad that your slowing it down, this is one of the few stories left in the website i actually look forward to updating. Does this mean that this story is coming to an end soon?
To require comments; I know the feels man, I know the feels. It's un-nerving to know people see your work, but don't comment or otherwise express their opinion on it. You shouldn't let this false communication get to you. Even without communicating it, everyone would die a little inside if this story were to end. Although personally on reflection of the story, I feel Jason has become a bit, idk, omnipotent when it comes to a situation. Time traveling to save dash, high ranking skills in military leadership adv healing magic. yeah.
Ok, ok, I've been lurking since the first story, pretty much the only reason I made an account was track stories I actually like. Shame though, only like 5% of my favorited stories post more then once a week. :(
That's probably the main reason I have so many.
To be honest, I've never been a commenter. Never.
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Thanks, it means a lot.
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No. Without giving away too much, I've got to take care of Eravel, the Soul Magic guy, and Chrysalis. So a while, at least. Not that they're necessarily going to happen one at a time, or in that order.
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He only appears that way because he's in between things. It's pretty easy to do amazing things when they're separated by lots of rest. I have my ways of keeping Jason from becoming OP.
I am not sure what to comment on
so i might as well say i like where the story is going.
So basically Jason has to do this time spell once a week to save Dash for the rest of his life? Also if Jason does find a way to return to Earth and bring Dash with, what happens then? Since there is no magic on Earth, I'm assuming that this teleportation spell is going to be a one way trip(just like Terminator)
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Well, this is going to be long...
First question:
No. It's like what happened In that one episode with Twilight. The only change is that the future he averted was, well, averted. So he's technically doing the spell for the first time. If that makes sense.
Now how magic works is a little more simple. It's assume to be a way of doing work, expending the energy to do an operation. Like using energy to lift things with an invisible arm. So it works, equestria or not, but obviously humans can't control energy in the same way. That was as scientific ad I could get with magic anyway. It goes both ways, long story short.
Obviously ask me to clarify if this doesn't make sense.
You know what the problem with commenting? It means you gotta read what I say, and that means you're not writing....If you know what I mean. Also your story is probably one of my favorite on this site. That's saying something also. Tank Missle!
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Still don't get the first one. Still question the second, even if Jason still has magic in him when he goes to Earth. he wont be able to tap into it since humans cant do magic.
I am loving this story immensely! Please don't stop writing it! At the moment, it is my favorite story!
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He's not human though... I don't understand...
Alright, so dash died. Then he went back and saved her, and perspective changed to past Jason, because future Jason didn't have a future to go back to. Then he essentially used the spell for the first time because the future in which he used it for the first time never existed. So as long as saving dash keeps the future the same when he goes back, it creates a stable time loop, and he no longer needs to go back. If you still don't understand, try asking someone in person.
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I think I get it(the time travel part), And I'm assuming if Jason and Dash go to Earth they'll change into humans(there was a movie that was like that if you didn't know)
2830265 uh no he only needs to do the spell once, he had a window of about a week to do it. and if he failed to do so then it would create a paradox which is pretty much like a crack in the universe, and when the universe fixes itself, it would be like the event where he prevented RD's death never happened. and for a return trip he would just need to find a way to bring the magic with him somehow that can be deployed by the push of a button
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I guess you'll have to see how I explain the changeling thing. As in, why Jason became one. Should be interesting, hopefully original.
Awesome. I hope your return comes quickly for me.
I have a feeling Pinkie's statement was foreshadowing.
Don't worry about people not commenting...sometimes, people just want to lurk around and read the story. Just think of the positives: you got a lot of readers, a lot of people give you thumb-up, and you are still doing a great job with this. And, thank you...heh, I mean what I said, you should be proud of this story and yourself. Enjoy the break...
Story-wise, someone doesn't seems to be doing too well. I don't think it might have been a good idea to run while in that condition. And, heh, it seems someone found out why it isn't a good idea to try alcohol...poor Evening...heh heh. Nice to see Tank doing all right...all things considering...
C&Cs will be PM to you, to prevent a page issue.
nice chapter yey again
Hmmm I'm not sure if you addressed this yet but... where is Tank the Tortoise?
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Mhm, yes. *strokes chin*
As far as you know, I didn't forget. But since I did and it's irreparable, I'll have to creatively explain his absence. There always seems to be that one thing...
I might not be a regular commenter, but I do enjoy your story. I just have nothing special to say. BTW, can't you check the number of chapter views to get an impression of the readership?
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Yeah, but that isn't a good indicator of how well received the chapter was. I usually try to look at what people think before writing the next chapter, and the lack of a comment could mean anything. Sure, laziness is a big one, but what if everyone threw their hands up and said: screw it, this is so bad! And then didn't say anything? That's the main reason why I want the comments. There are others, but that's the most important to me.
Just cause we don't post doesn't mean we don't love ya man. This story is awesome the only thing I have ever had to complain about was the opening of the first story and the massive cilffhanger at the end, but I love the rest of it and the only reason I hated the cliffhanger is because I love the story and you teased me with more.
This story is definitely in my top 5 favorites on this site.
Amazing chapter as always. Can't wait for the next one (and whatever plot twists you have up your sleeve)
Finally caught up. been reading ng straight through from the first story to this chapter. I like this series. though I do wonder why Lyra and or twilight have not sat him down with some of the items and asked him what they were for and why they look like pony items in some cases. I also wonder why no one is freaking out that random things from his world are showing up here and what happens of say... larger chunks of there begin popping in here. like say.... a blue whale dropping on Canterlot palace. The flower pot would just be like "Oh no not again."
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He met a tentacle monster but the story had a gore tag and the innapropriately shapped tentacle split him in half?
woo... another chapter. It was put up while I was at EverfreeNW, so I only just now read it. yay for moar
I guess we can pretend this short hiatus is Jason getting his time ducks in a row.
Ow with all the face planting.
One thing that made me wonder however, seeing as his one hoof is shorter than the rest; wouldn't he be forever unable to run as fast as before seeing as the balance and the like would be skewered?
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Well, seeing as he's not missing muscle tissue, I'd have to say that it wouldn't make much of a difference. It's easily remedied anyway.
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A fair amount. He fought a lot of griffins, and there was also that torture.
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Flower pot... Wut
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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4LLbQ7WDh8c
He's referencing this scene.
Sorry it took me so long to get around to reading this Snail. I've just been so busy.
And I just wanted to let you know that I truly appreciate you writing this story and all the work you put into it
Oh and Drunken Evening is best pony XD
Im sorry i havent been a good fan of your story.....
Please forgive me
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How can you not think about how this affects me? How this makes me feel?!
I'm just kidding. People have lives, I just like it when they leave comments after reading the chapter. Doesn't matter when, really. Thanks for reading this story in the first place though.
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I've thought about it, actually. (Thanks, by the way). I'm just not sure if I could make up an idea that stood by itself and allowed for a lot of writing. But it might be a good idea if I can figure something out, I don't get money from this.
By the way, I'm making a new story, (not to try to plug it or anything) and that should come out in a few weeks. It's unrelated to this story, so hopefully it will receive better reviews. It's not as if I haven't improved.
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I'm pretty sure some people forget to like and favorite. I just finished the last chapter, I'm totally hooked on this.
I was kind of antsy with the whole "going back in time again so that he could keep Rainbow Dash alive" thing. just.. make it come out ok, cause, I was really happy when she came back.
idea: after a few peace talks, make the story end, and then write the triquel. makes more sence that way, and it doesn't turn into one gigantic story.
also: bananarama.
that is all..
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also, you have that whole: soul magic thing left. which is cool.. makes a good trilogy.
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There's probably not enough for a sequel anyway. I'm trying to bring this story to a close eventually, and I'm not sure if I want to create another story just for that. That way I can lead everything up to a big finale.
Of course, I'm sure ill need to write a follow up story set some number of years in the future, but that's not pressing.
I DON'T WANT IT TO ENNNNNNDDDDDD!
THIS IS THE BEST CHANGELING FIC EVER!
I KNOW THE CHARACTERS SOOO WELL!
IT'LL BE LIKE LOSEING A FRIEND!
S so dddon't *sniff* talk about that *sniffle* ok?
I need a hug
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Are you referring to the very end of the story or the fact that I'm gone for a while? Either way, you have nothing to worry about. I get back in less than a week with three full debut chapters minimum (Released on consecutive days).
And the story has a ways to go. A month at least. Then, if anyone wants it, a follow up that takes place a few years later. That, however, will be more slice of life oriented. And for once bad luck won't seem so common. I'm actually looking forward to writing it.
I'm glad you like the characters, it means I at least did something right.
Ok, this story is just REALLY good. And I am not saying this very often ...
All characters ale belivable, almost all are lovable. Pacing seems to be perfect ... well it is just a good story. I lack the vocabulary to express how good this story is. I am definitely looking forward to more content with this bunch of characters.
I have three favourites. And this is one of them.
2932494. That's pretty sensitive...'shadow reaper'. Lol but besides that fact... *Hugz*
Okay, so, Jason is a (as of yet completely undecorated and largely officially ignored) war hero, who has saved the entire country from being taken over once, has led a completely successful retaliatory invasion, and is (apparently, for some reason we have yet to be explained to us) fifth or so in the line of royal succession to the throne (why?). He also saved one of the vaunted Elements of Harmony, Equestria's most powerful weapons against the likes of Discord and Sombra, from not only certain death, but actual death. Celestia knows how much he is shunned, feared, and hated in Ponyville, and she also knows that nopony there (other than Dash) knows just how ridiculously important and honored he's supposed to be (and yet actually isn't, for whatever reason). So rather than holding a very, VERY important ceremony honoring him and his achievements in Ponyville, where it would do the most good, she completely ignores him during a ceremony for war heroes, thereby confirming Ponyville's collective belief that he's no one of import and is, basically, a liar, along with Rainbow Dash.
He's a hero who has sacrificed nearly everything for others and yet has been declared a murderer and enemy of the state (only pardoned because of his services to Equestria, not because he's friggin' innocent), injured, tormented, tortured (twice), dissected, and nearly killed by the very ponies he's worked so hard to save.
Way to show loyalty, Princess.