Arc 4 - Coming Down
Arc #4
of
Bad Company
In which Jay faces a new challenge that will test him in ways he never thought possible. In the end, he might come out as a different man.
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Welp, bullcrap, now the waiting is going to kill me over in around a week or so.
That's what happens when you have a whole lot of free time and you read a fic in about 2 days. 
*btw do not eVEN DARE STOPPING THIS OR I'LL SEND YOU A LETTER CLAIMING FOR THE NEXT CHAPTERS!
Have I mentioned that Jay is hilarious lately, because he was in top form this chapter.
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I just checked, and I still think you are pushing too hard in their first meeting. My issue wasn't just the word "beautiful", it was his absurd instantly smitten reaction. It should have been a statement of fact at first with him only starting to develop meaningful attraction later in the chapter and the serious development happening while Jay is out of town (not that it would change anything about the teasing).