“hatW? OwH nac ouy eb ni oevl wiht em? I balery ownk uoy!” Twilight shouted. Seeing the puzzled looks on her guests faces clued her in on what she actually said. OK Twilight let's try that again but this time lets not speak in gibberish. “What? How can you be in love with me? I barely know you!” Twilight said again.
“Trixie knows that Twilight Sparkle. Yet Trixie cannot help how Trixie feels about you. Please Trixie is not asking for much, just a chance for us to get to know each other.” Trixie pleaded.
“Well of-” Twilight began
“Absolutely not!” Rainbow Dash interrupted “Why would she want to date some two bit showmare who destroyed Ponyville? Just get back in your cart and buzz off!”
“Rainbow Dash!” Twilight yelled “How dare you say such things about Trixie! Sure she was abrasive the last time she came to Ponyville but everypony deserves a chance. So yes I will give her that chance, even though you disapprove. Also you don't get to answer for me in a matter so personal! Trixie lets meet up tomorrow and make plans. Now can you both please leave so I can go to sleep? I had a long day helping Applejack and I'm exhausted.” Twilight said before heading upstairs. The two other ponies left the library eyeing each other. Trixie could not keep a victorious smirk off her face as she headed to her cart.
“Just keep laughing Trixie. I'll wipe that smirk off your face soon enough. You'll never get Twilight, not if I have anything to say about it.” Rainbow Dash muttered to herself as she glared at Trixie. She then quickly flew up to her cloud home where she spent most of the night pacing and thinking up plans to drive Trixie out of town. Finally she gave up and fell into a restless slumber.
Trixie on the other hoof was ecstatic. Too excited to sleep she paced around her cart and planned how she would impress Twilight the next day. Finally she settled down and fell into a sweet slumber. “Twilight will be Trixie's, all mine.” She muttered in her sleep as she dreamed.
Meanwhile in Canterlot a very different mare wasn't sleeping at all. This was nothing unusual though. After all she was the Princess of the Night for a reason. The aura of melancholy and longing sigh weren't out of place either. However something was odd. Usually Princess Luna would be quite happy after visiting Ponyville. Her usual glum shouldn't have arrived so quickly. Noticing her distress, Luna's personal hoofmaiden Starshine rushed over.
“Is there something the matter, my Princess?” She said with a bow. Luna just sighed again and continued to walk towards her throne. Starshine decided to try again. “How did your trip to Ponyville go?”
“IT WAS HORRIBLE! NOT ONLY DID I FAIL TO STOP TWILIGHT FROM CASTING HER SPELL, BUT I EVEN MADE THINGS WORSE! HER SPELL WAS MISCAST AND NOW MY SISTER'S BELOVED STUDENT CANNOT CAST MAGIC AT ALL! FINALLY I MADE AN UTTER FOAL OF MYSELF WHEN I SHAMEFULLY FLED BACK TO CANTERLOT WITH BARELY A FAREWELL! HOW WILL I EVER FACE TWILIGHT AGAIN!?” Princess Luna bellowed at her servant.
“My Princess if you believe that you have wronged Celestia's student then shouldn't you right that wrong?” Starshine pointed out with a bow.
“YES, YES YOU ARE CORRECT MY DEAR SERVANT. IT IS ONLY RIGHT AND FITTING THAT WHILE TWILIGHT HEALS FROM HER INJURY THAT I BE AT HER SIDE CARING FOR HER AND PROTECTING HER. PACK OUR THINGS STARSHINE, FOR NEXT NIGHT WE LEAVE FOR PONYVILLE!” Princess Luna decreed, her mood noticeably improved at the thought of returning to Ponyville.
“As you wish, Your Highness.” Starshine bowed once more and trotted away on her princess' orders.
The next day arrived with the same glorious sunrise as it always did. Rainbow Dash however was in no mood to appreciate it. As always the sunlight made its insidious way towards her bed where it danced upon her face. Dash responded the same way she always did, by pulling some cloud over her head to block the sun. This time though she woke abruptly as she remembered that she had something important to do. She had to convince Twilight to not date Trixie no matter what. So Rainbow Dash puffed away her cloud bed with a flick of her wings and dropped out her house. She spread her wings and started to glide in the early morning air. From her house she could reach anywhere in Ponyville with no effort and it was too early in the morning for stunts anyways. With a subtle shift of her wings she turned towards the library. She wouldn't arrive for a little while which was good because Rainbow Dash knew that Twilight would only listen to thought out arguments and she needed the time to think. Rainbow Dash grinned, a smart pony like Twilight would surely listen to an awesome pony such as herself. Trixie didn't stand a chance.
Applejack rolled out of bed groaning. Her head ached from lack of sleep and lots of worry. Now she had a long day of work to look forward to. While she loved the farm there were times where she wished she could sleep in and spend all day napping. I bet Twilight gets to sleep in whenever she wants. Applejack shook her head irritably, “Why do all of mah thoughts keep leading back to that mare?” Applejack grumbled to herself as she got to work.
Fluttershy got to sleep in. She was curled under her blankets with only the tip of her muzzle exposed so she could breath. Normally Angel would wake Fluttershy up but today was different. Today was the day of the week when Angel took care of the animal's breakfast while Fluttershy slept. In return Fluttershy made Angel his special salad and always made sure to include the cherry on top. For now though Fluttershy slept and dreamed sweetly of what she wanted. Slowly she woke up, sleepily pushing her covers away. “What a lovely dream. I can't wait to tell Rainbow Dash about it.” She said softly to herself as her eyes adjusted to the light.
Twilight woke up with a grin. She felt much better with a good night's sleep and now she had a date to look forward to. I can't believe Trixie is in love with me! Me of all ponies! Okay Trixie was a little abrasive the last time she was in Ponyville but she seemed nice enough last night. Anyways I can't wait for our date! Twilight though to herself as she pranced down the stairs from her room. She sniffed the air, enjoying the smell of Spike's freshly cooked muffins. When she reached the kitchen she was greeted by the sight of a rainbow maned friend of hers munching down on a muffin. Twilight stopped and stared at Rainbow Dash's back for a second before grabbing a muffin of her own. I really shouldn't have expected that Rainbow Dash would have given up that easily. Ah well, might as well get this over with. Twilight thought with a mental sigh.
“Good morning Rainbow Dash,” Twilight said as she continued to eat. Rainbow nodded and finished her muffin before answering.
“Hey Twilight. I wanted to talk to you about Trixie.”
“Of course you did. I don't understand what the big deal is.” Twilight sighed.
“The big deal is that Trixie is a no good, arrogant punk! Remember how she caused the Ursa Minor rampage? She's probably back here to try and get some revenge for you showing her up back then. Trust me Twilight, Trixie is nothing but trouble and will end up breaking your heart if you let her.” Rainbow Dash said.
“First of all Rainbow Dash; Trixie did not cause the Ursa Minor rampage remember? It was Snips and Snails who lured it into town. Second why would Trixie want revenge on me? She could have died if I didn't intervene. Even if she did want revenge why would she go through the effort of tricking me into thinking that she loved me first? Finally how would you know if Trixie is nothing but trouble? She was only here for one day and you interacted with her for all of thirty seconds. Not exactly enough time to get to know someone. So I'll give her a chance, and I'll see who she really is. You don't need to worry about me Rainbow, I'll be fine.” Twilight countered.
“She's just no good for you!” Rainbow Dash shouted.
“How do you know?”
“It's just so obvious! Come on Twilight don't do this!” Rainbow Dash yelled grabbing Twilight with her hooves.
“Rainbow Dash, calm down. Why are you getting so worked up about this?”
“It's because, because-” Then Rainbow Dash interrupted herself by kissing Twilight. It was nothing more then a quick smooch on the lips but it still left Twilight speechless. “Ah, Um, I have to go walk Tank!” Rainbow Dash blurted before fleeing the library at top velocity. Twilight just sat there not moving a muscle. Several minutes later Fluttershy poked her head in and saw Twilight still sitting there.
“Um, hi Twilight. Did I see Rainbow Dash rush out of here? I've been looking for her all day, do you know where she went?” Fluttershy asked.
“AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!” Twilight suddenly screamed.
“Eep!” Fluttershy dove for a bookshelf, squeezing behind it. Unfortunately there isn't enough room for a pony behind a bookshelf so instead of hiding, Fluttershy just ended up knocking it over. Twilight kept screaming as the bookshelf inevitably landed on her. “Oh no!” Fluttershy gasped. Rushing over she lifted up the bookcase and pushed it to the side, letting it fall to the ground. Twilight had collapsed on the ground, covered in books. It was hard to tell if she was still screaming for a rather large book had effectively gagged her.
“Are you alright Twilight?” Fluttershy said digging Twilight out of the books. Twilight just groaned around her mouthful of book and shook her head. “Oh no! Should I get help or take you to the hospital?” Fluttershy gasped. Twilight just shook her head again and finally spat out the book.
“No, I'm physically fine, it's just....” Twilight trailed off. With another shake of her head she struggled to her hooves and began pacing. “Why would she do that?” Twilight just suddenly asked.
“Do what? What happened Twilight?” Fluttershy asked.
“I don't want to tell you.” Twilight admitted with a blush.
“Why not? I can't help you otherwise. If this is troubling you then you need to talk to somepony.” Fluttershy pointed out.
“It's just....I don't want to upset you.”
“Don't worry Twilight. I'll be alright and you can trust me with whatever secret you have.” Fluttershy said.
“Alright then.” Twilight took a deep breath. “RainbowDashkissedmeandIdon'tknowwhattodoandbythewaysorryIdon'twantthistoruinourfriendshipcanyoupleaseforgiveme?” she said as fast as she could.
“What? Twilight you need to slow down.” Fluttershy said flatly. Twilight nodded and tried again. With the exact same result. “Maybe you should start from the beginning?” Fluttershy suggested.
Twilight took a deep breath and nodded. “OK so I woke up this morning as usual and find Rainbow Dash downstairs in the kitchen. She starts trying to convince me to not date Trixie-”
“You're dating Trixie!?” Fluttershy exclaimed softly.
“And when I confronted her about why she was so concerned about Trixie she got all flustered and she ended up, well kissing me.” Twilight continued, not noticing Fluttershy's interruption. “I'm so sorry Fluttershy! This must be so hard on you and I don't want to get between the two of you and why are you looking at me like that?” Twilight said noticing the strangely happy expression on Fluttershy's face
“Rainbow Dash....kissed you?” Fluttershy repeated softly.
“Yes, and I'm sorry Fluttershy. Please don't be mad at me!” Twilight replied. Fluttershy began to walk closer to Twilight.
“It's okay Twilight. In fact I'm happy to hear that.” Fluttershy blushed as she moved even closer.
“I-it is? You are? Why?” Twilight asked desperately as she fell back on her haunches.
“Because I get to do this.” Fluttershy whispered. Fluttershy leaned in and gave Twilight a soft and passionate kiss. Twilight just stared at Fluttershy in response. “Now you just stay right here. I have to go find Rainbow Dash but we'll both be back soon. I promise.” Fluttershy breathed into Twilight's ear. With that Fluttershy flew out of the library. Twilight snapped out of it shorty afterwards.
“What do I do? Is this just some elaborate prank? No way Fluttershy wouldn't do that, but then what's going on? They couldn't actually mean it, could they?” Twilight muttered to herself as she started to pace. Suddenly the door was flung open with an explosive burst of green and red smoke.
“The Great and Powerful Trixie has arrived!”
Pinkie Pie watched with her head cocked to the side as first Rainbow Dash and then Fluttershy rushed out of the library. She gasped in surprise as Trixie entered with a magical flash. Deciding to get closer she adjusted her trenchcoat and picked up her desk. She moved it to the middle of the street and peaked through her binoculars at the target. No sign of any movement. Pinkie sipped her coffee and looked around to see if anypony was watching her. Nopony seemed to be paying attention to the rather large desk in the middle of the street. I knew this disguise would be unnoticeable! Pinkie thought smugly to herself as opened up her newspaper and took another peek at the library. Pinkie's stomach started flip-flopping again as she contemplated what could be happening inside. Was her Pinkie Sense trying to tell her something? Or were the thoughts of her bestest friend Twilight Sparkle causing the flip-flops. Or perhaps it was the eight coffees and two dozen donuts she had eaten to maintain her disguise. It truly was a mystery, one that could only be solved by the genius detective Pinkie Pie! But first she had to rescue her clueless assistant who was being held captive by her arch-rival the Dreaded and Diabolical Trixie, whose genius mind was a match for her own! Pinkie Pie had not let deduced the latest of Trixie's cunning plans, yet Pinkie knew that her poor assistant would be caught up once again in her never ending struggle against Trixie. For now ace detective Pinkie Pie would play the waiting game, and Pinkie Pie was great at all sorts of games!
Let me guess. The want-it Need-it Spell is on Twilight.
I think see what you did here, dood.
So let me speak in code: While the Mad Parser was casting her spell on the Freya, the Galaxy Knight came up and spooked the Mother Brain and the spell rebounded off the geo-crystal and hit the Mad Parser, which KOs the Mad Parser and all the demons take her to the Infirmary. The spell might have given her a new Evility based on sight. Unfortunately when the Mad Parser came back to life, she came back with no SP.
Now we have Valkyire that is confused about her thoughts, the Bandit that's super protective of the Mad Parser, the Star Mage that the audience isn't too sure if she's under the Evility's effects or if her feelings are real. The Healer apparently has become kinky and wishes to be sandwiched between the Bandit and the Mad Parser, the Galaxy Knight is in grief for hurting the Mad Parser but now is off to rectify the situation. and the Android is off to save the Mad Parser from the evil clutches of the Star Mage while also trying to figure out why the Mad Parser is causing her belly to do flip-flops.
No word yet on the Bow Master, yet.
(I couldn't remember the colour scheme for the class ranks so I chose Teir 3 or 4 for each except the Galaxy Knight who is Teir 6)
This has Twi-Harem, instant faved.
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Maybe, it's hard to tell at this juncture, but my magic 8-ball says 'signs point to yes'
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... took me 10 mins to process this information.
Ahem. *cough cough* *puts on the derby voice*
"The first annual Twilight Derby has come to the beginning. In this exciting race, there are many possible outcomes. Currently in the lead is Twixie by a hair, followed by Twishy Dash. Next in the competition is Twijack (Applelight?) with Twiluna *hey that's the wrong picture you dopes in electronics* . In fifth place is Twipie, trying to make up for her late start. But before we cut to commercial, I can assure that there is at least one more contestant in the heated, once in a life time race that you will not want to miss. So put your flanks in your seat and put out bets as this race is going to be a long one with many clashes and possible crashes. This is Rocfang50 commentating and I will stay here for this entire derby. Now a word by our sponsors.
'Ever feel like your life is missing something? A beloved one? Are you unicorn? Do you not care for consequences? Then try the new Want It, Need It spell. Results are guaranteed. WARNING: There might be zero to many complications and in any case that your are dissatisfied, we really don't give a b*ck and know that you can't do anything about it. So try Want It, Need It spell today.'
I would like to thank the sponsors once again and now back to the race. -"
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Now in reality. I am loving this fanfiction, obvious by the telecast I just started ( which I plan to continue with updates). I give you 2 fluttershy yays, five mustaches, and 10/10. Keep up the awesomely hilarious work.
1895502 it's in code...that's why, dood.
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actually, that was pretty easy. sorry, was that bragging?
oh yeah! author person, don't wait to long to post another chapter!
1895841 The Intell stat was never high for me to begin with, dood.
Good job Sherlock homes
Sometimes I have to wonder if all of Luna's servants are nearly deaf...
The story hints at the spell affecting Twilight...
Obviously, the twist ending is, when it imploded, the spell fizzled out, causing it to fail. The feelings are all legitimate.
The most popular side character returns
Twilight barely knows her but that never stopped a good nemesis get together.
Trixie didnt cause the ursa minor accident, true, and Twilight might think she's just misunderstood...Twilight kind of forgot that she humiliated Applejack, Rarity, and Rainbow Dash in front of their friends and neighbors, and largely ignored that she's a boastful, lying egomaniac both on- and off-stage.
And of course it all takes place in The classic FiM fanfiction world
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Why can't I hold all these tropes?
Luna yells so loud I can hear it even when I have my iPad on mute, when I was not wearing the headphones connected to it. In space. Yeah.
when this is done: i'll come back and see if it ended up being a twiluna and then i'll read it... yes, i'm very bias.
1897239 a sober person would throw it...
Bwahaha. I haven't laughed so much at a fanfiction in ... ever, maybe? Brilliant work!
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You sir, are a genius. That was an amazing commentary.
So you're telling me that Twilight Sparkle THE Twilight Sparkle who is the crazy prepared, most planning have a list for absolutely everything, smartest and logical pony in town...
Does not realize what's going on?
Ok so you established that Twilight had been working on this love spell for who knows how long and now you're telling me that Twilight Sparkle, who probably read every single book that ever existed on love spells and how they could go wrong, who, no doubt, planned out a solution and a list for every situation if the love spell did go wrong before testing it, was not prepared for a situation where everypony could fall in love with her, the caster of the spell, when testing a love spell?
Casting a love spell+ everypony suddenly falls in love with you = the love spell is causing it!
Why can't she connect these simple dots, especially after doing extensive research of love spells?
Twilight isn't such an idiot! Her character is the opposite of an idiot! Its obvious!
I dont know why, but i still think this is going to be clopfic. (Not that I'm complaining)
Hilarious story, keep up the good work.
My guess is that Twilight's lack of social skills is part of the reason why she hasn't pieced it together yet.
Applejack's behaviour was odd to Twilight because she seemed completely unaffected (As far as she knows).
Trixie wasn't anywhere near the spell, and the combination of Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy's advances has likely rendered her incapable of much rational thought.
1897338 because plotline. That's why.
Also a bit of overconfident unicorn could help a bit
I mean, how many times haven't twilight done something utterly stupid with her magic
I mean seriously, she's downright crazy sometimes
I enjoyed reading through this. So far, this has a lot of potential, and it hasn't stepped in overly magnifying everyone's affections to (ridiculously) OOC levels that many other fics that take this route do. I'm really enjoying this, as so far, most of the characters are more-or-less true to themselves, with a few exceptions. (But hey, love does strange things to people, right?)
I cracked up like a thirteen year old in sex ed when I saw the number of likes was sixty nine as of my reading this. Is the internet draining my intelligence or just my maturity?
1897568 There's not really anything immature about finding something crude to be funny, it's really all about setting. For example, you don't tell a fart joke at a dinner party, but you also don't drink fifty year old brandy at a frat party. Personally I cracked up when I read your comment, and since this story is more or less about everypony trying to get inside Twilight's pants (or lack thereof) the joke is totally appropriate.
*Reads Description.
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Missing a capital on that n.
Rainbow Dash thinks leaving her last name thingy uncapitalized is uncool.
The main issue I have with this chapter is that Twilight seems a little too eager to date Trixie. I love them together, but I think it's a little unrealistic for Twilight to easily accept that Trixie has returned, and that she's in love with her. Personally, I think Twilight would either A) take some time to think about it, or B) freak out. It's your story though.
1897161 More people should comment like this, dammit!
This.. this is beautiful.
You have me interested.
First off, welcome to the Featured box! Cute story, interesting setup - it gets a gold star from me. That being said - I suggest getting someone to proofread, even if you don't get a full-fledged editor. There are punctuation and grammar issues in all three chapters so far. Not enough to take away from the narrative, but it's a bit distracting. PM me if you don't already have someone lined up.
You got an alright idea here, but your grammar just isn't very good. It was rather difficult to understand and read at times. Sorry.
I Sure will read this!
Later...
Sorry, I have more stories to catch up with...
But, Very inntresting case you got there and nice ideas.
And to quote the Joker
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Very cute and funny so far, so I'll be watching this.
One question, though. The way Twilight was apologizing to Fluttershy for getting kissed by Rainbow Dash, followed by how positively Fluttershy took it before kissing her as well, it gave me the impression that Fluttershy and Dash were a couple or at least had an existing interest in each other at the start of this story. Is that a call-back to another story of yours, or do I just have my shipping goggles on too tight?
This is really entertaining. Please keep writing
Oh god, this is awesome.
The twist: The spell wasn't actually cast at all. They all just independently and coincidentally fell in love with Twilight at the exact same time.
After miscasting a spell
You couldn't think of anything else? Going to read it simply because it seems that folks like it, but come on. Twilight messing up a spell? face to floor please.
1897161 filly please. Luna is the most popular Ensemble Darkhorse. Otherwise you're pretty much 5 for 5 so far as Troping goes.
As to the story itself, I can't say much for the spealling and there were some run on sentences that could have used punctuation not that a lack of commas ever made a sentence confusing he said condescendingly some might say sarcastically. This said, there isn't any offensive content and it's not like I'm looking for any soul-searching themes like A Bluebird's Song or subtle imagery and symbolism like Composure, so I suppose the plot is harmless enough.
Also, so far as Twilight goes, I think that she'd be pretty much as open to attempting a relationship as shown here. Maybe that's Shipping Goggles talking (actually no, shipping goggles has chimed in to say she can't be this excited for romance with Trixie because she's too busy pining after a certain solar diarch ), but I've never seen Twilight be an especially reserved type. But she is OOC as not being meticulous if she's going to experiment. Twilight would check every romance novel and its companion story (and the companion story to its companion story) before wildly throwing herself into a romance, even if she would throw herself into a romance with adorable naivety all the same.
Lastly, as to why to like and read this story: You've read just about every shipping pair for
best ponyTwilight Sparkle already, from the plausible like TwiJack and Twilestia to the far-flung like Spilight and TwiRarity. But wait! Now you can get every shipping pair at the same time all at once! Yes folks it's time for a magically induced TwiHarem! Nothing about this scenario could possibly have any unfortunate consequences!1898906
Not a big fan of that whole "Cast spells wrong and things go crazy" thing huh?
WELL Here is the perfect story for you where everything goes just fine!
yeah, wouldn't have much of a story now would we?
also due to the lack of author responses it seems the authors attitude on this story is this:
I think this is very entertaining, and funny as well! Lol! Can't wait to see what would happen next!
Hmmm, I say that the events in this piece of fiction have intrigued me. I shall have to moniter this story further.
Keep going this is awesome!
this is gonna be good, eagerly awaiting updates
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i shall be of help and i am now starting a betting pool on the likely-hood of all said ships
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Actually I thought I had posted something but apparently I was mistaken. Which sucks cause it was a long post too. Well I'll try and summarize things below.
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Thank you very much for your corrections. They are very helpful.
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You haven't read it yet, but I think the reason I had Twilight miscast a spell was very reasonable. As for cliche factor, yup I pretty much couldn't think of anything better. My other ideas were much worse
There have been a lot of questions that'll be answered in later chapters. Or other commentors have already answered.
Also thank you all for your support!
This premise is gold, pure gold
Ah Twi, you're just too 'adorkable' for words.
Well. It's getting CRAZZZY Nothing detective Pinkie can't hand.
Excuse me, I am the artist of the image you are using, and I didn't give you permission to use it as your cover. Please give credit where credit is due and ask permission next time.
seems like you kinda rushed the whole trixie twilight thing. there is usally at least some build up. She just seems somewhat more out of character even for this kind of story.
ooooh ok so twilight cast the want it need it speel onto herself... and now everyone in proximity wants to be her fillyfriend. hmmm.... still leaves out trixie.....
connot wait to see what you come up with!