"this looks good" - thought
dafauq brain?

Thanks for this, now despite this being foalcon and perhaps make me 'somewhat' of a pedophile, I dont care. Truly thank you for this story, you've earned a watch and a fave and of course...obligatory and of course...
DUKE OF EARL

...well then. That was a delightful read. And the tag says incomplete. Hmm...

/tracked

"I think I'd like that." She let out a soft giggle and then pulled herself to her hooves, looking back at her flank excitedly. "Did I get it, did I get my cutie mark?"

For a story that is just the clop with its setup and premise, this is fine. I'm sure we'll have someone block-headed come through and talk about how Rarity is so OC it hurts. But if we were to go with Rarity IC, it'd take at least six chapters of wearing her down on the railroad tracks to get to this point - defeating the purpose.

So, good job. It's about time someone made this happen, and did a decent job with it.

That thing sure looks weird + looks down = I'm pretty sure she just grew a dick... right?

Well... time to scroll back up to check.

EDIT:
And I was right... And... What? Rarity immediately offers to show her sister how to use her
new penis. Either Rarity is a complete idiot in this fic or she was already horny to the bursting point
and couldn't resist the first dick she saw...

Hey, Kat. I'm glad to see such a story be made and to welcome you to MLP Nothing wrong in terms of grammer or spelling that I noticed though it was odd how Rarity just chose to mate with her little sister....but she's y least favorite pny so I could not care less.

Was honestly thinking that Spike would swear this being a Mature story but hey, to each their own, any other pairings in this? Are you a fan of Spilight?

As long as you don't allow Sweets (my favorite of the CMC) to buck males with her cock, then I'll foloow you every hoofstep of the way, now if she has sex with them with her orginal sexual deveices then I'm 100% ok with that.

I got your back if you ever need any help, ideas or advice friend, can't wait for more and veey, very well written story so far.

Well... I'll give this a like...

Sigh... And people were all hating on one of my fics because I used a character from
a different show. But wound up actually not using him at all because my depiction
wound up being totally out of character.

Lesson I learned from that experience: Don't use a non-MLP/non-original character in
a clopfic purely made for the clop. Because you'll need a whole lot of back story first before
you can even make a feasible situation for clop.

I bet a lot of the dislikes was because people were pissed that what is possibly the only Captain
Buggy cross-over wound up being totally out of character, honestly, all I wanted him for was his ability.

Okay. I'ma do a review thingy. Haven't done one before but for the Girlfriend of ImJustAnotherBrony I think now would be a good time to start.

The idea of this story was pretty freaking cool. I've read a few fics that has the older sibling convince the younger take it, but I haven't seen the younger have the tool in which to do the taking so that was a nice change of pace. The simpcity in which Sweetie Belle managed to cast the spell is a little off putting, but that could be because in many a fic where Twilight casts a "Here have a penis!" spell she is depicted struggling to cast it.

Rarity's eagerness to bang her much younger sister is also a little hard to swallow take in understand. For somepony who's biggest concern is being the most popular seamstress in Canterlot something like this would be something she would give a second, third, and maybe even a fourth thought to. Eventually the though of such a large dick plunging in and out of her would overwhelm her reservations, but just up and fucking as soon as she see's the erect penis her sister managed to cast on herself? Little far fetched. I expected her to worry about the fact weather or not is was irreversible or not.

The actual clop was pretty good. Could've described things a little more, but that's just me liking long clop fics. Some of the above issue's I mentioned leave some plot holes story continuity issues that I would like to see resovled.

Over all? Good story for what appears to be your first fiction. I'm going to place it in the RagingSemi Style section of clop. Good story, but has a few issue's with it. You done did good, RagingSemi isn't a bad rating for your first clop fic. It's much better then the alternative. I look forward to more.

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That was pretty punny.

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Thanks for all of your feedback guys, I'll keep it in mind when writing the next chapter. I had a lot of fun writing this so I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I have gone back and added a couple sections to make Rarity fucking her sister more believable.

... I knew somebody was going to write something like this. I just knew it.

I just noticed something in the end.
Sweetie belle summoned a kock on herself, yet in the end (after they had one it) rarity give her a thongue job
So the spell makes her a transveste (or what the ... it's called whan you got genitalias form both sexes)?
Or did the spell fade at some point between the penetrational sex and the thongue job?

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Yeah. I know. I'm awesome. *Rubs fingernails on shirt then looks at them with a smug grin on his face.*

1826582 Hermaphrodite has both male and female sexual organs

Well...commence read.

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I welcome you to hell, do you have any reservations?
(Great story btw)

1826641 ok, fine. stil, it is a flaw in the plotline...

I'm reading it because of IJAB

(Joke) Alt. Title: Senseless With Rarity
...I promised myself I'd stop doing these (Joke) Alt. Titles, but, c'mon, I had to.

My interests. This is relevent to them.

that was nice good work man!

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Me Gusta

wtf??
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I' like to see where this goes, but it didn't really do much for me; it's a tad sterile for a clopfic.

Damn you.... having me read clop...

And I cant break out the effin shame sock right now!

A bit curious to check it out. Got hesitant even at the start with the mention of a "new spell", and checked comments to be sure. And while I was right in one part, it doesn't seem like you made it bland or generic like I so often see when it comes to this topic/subject. So by just that alone it'd be worth checking out. But at the same time, it threads on terrain of one of my most disliked and in general badly used porn things out there. But then again, as just said: It doesn't sound like you took that path going with the comments. But yeah. I think I'll actually place this in one of my tabs for now and give it a look later. Feels like you can have done this "properly", which would be really neat (and sorry if rambling somewhat, just recovering from a norovirus)

Weeeee! Foalcon! The only thing that could make this better is the promise of no stallions. And futa. No stallions/colts + futa and this will be the best thing ever.

I love this type of thing. Nicley written.

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Ah, good ol' PWP.

I guess this story is decent. However, I'm afraid I'm gonna have to give this story a dislike. The fact that Rarity just simply gave herself to Sweetie Belle so easily without thinking how the living crap she got penis is a little far fetched. This is also kinda coupled with the fact I'm not a big fan of folacon or futa. But I gave this story a chance.

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pressed her horn to the member, using her own magic to disperse the spell.

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I just remember why i made that mental note to NEVER criticise stories i read after 23.00

The whole thing feels really stilted and kind of bland. Unfortunate, because this seems like it could go somewhere with a little more emotion and attention to detail. It's a clopfic, but one without much to it outside the initial concept. I hope it goes well, though.

why are good stories like this never continued? moar!!

10 bucks says Sweetie's cutie mark is gonna be a dick

A little fast- paced but otherwise good tracking

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Hot!

great work

1833371 were is that pic from i want that on my bio can you give me code

1826046 wat da faq

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Meh, not bad.

A moment, what Twillight do did with that book in thle library??????????

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Wut

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Why that nerd (Twilight) have a "maho futanary"?!

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