Mind of Pie

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Unknown to all but herself and Celestia, Pinkie has an unknown past linking her to the wonderbolts. However when that past catches up with her, Pinkie shuts her mind down to protect her friends. Her friends, unaware of the danger, dive into her mind in order to save her but the past is moving quick and her friends aren't quite ready to understand exactly what makes Pinkie Pie Pinkie Pie.

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Prologue · 18th Dec 2012 · 4,454 words
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Chapter 1 Reflections · 21st Dec 2012 · 5,974 words
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Chapter 2 Blazing Spitfire · 25th Jan 2013 · 6,793 words
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Bronyshy the Wizard

Bronyshy the Wizard #1 · Dec 18th, 2012 · · · Prologue ·

Pretty good start hope you continue the story. Can't wait for more friend

Willsons

Willsons #2 · Dec 18th, 2012 · · · Prologue ·

Interesting dear I be interested?

Clemerl

Clemerl #3 · Dec 18th, 2012 · · · Prologue ·

I should create a new flower and call it the Pinkie Pie.

Now THERE is an idea!

Icamefromfacebook

Icamefromfacebook #4 · Dec 18th, 2012 · · · Prologue ·

WOOO! MORE CHAPTERS!

Crowne Prince

Crowne Prince #5 · Dec 18th, 2012 · · · Prologue ·

Knew people would like your Pinkie Pie flower idea.

MidnightBloom

MidnightBloom #6 · Dec 19th, 2012 · · · Prologue ·

I would WORSHIP the pinkie pie flower
All Hail Pinkie!

Frankie

Frankie #7 · Dec 19th, 2012 · · · Prologue ·

Okay. I do hope that next chapter better explains what Discord is saying. How did Celestia cause this by making Pinkie the Element of Laughter?

Sun Dial

Sun Dial #8 · Dec 19th, 2012 · · · Prologue ·

1825205>>1821665>>1819847

Yes a flower that causes clouds to rain choclate whenever somebody is about to ruin a friendship..... how.... ingenious! Totally leaving that alone and never bringing it back into the story.

1825747

What? And give the big secret away so soon? Come on, I can't tease you in the prologue and not draw it out. However you have brought up something that I was unaware I needed to clarify, so I'll take care of that in Chapter 2. (No room in chapter 1 )

Sharky

Sharky #9 · Dec 19th, 2012 · · · Prologue ·

Need more more more

Rainbow87dash

Rainbow87dash #10 · Dec 21st, 2012 · 2 · · Chapter 1 Reflections ·

I thought you might not like being a small genetically modified mouse with an overly large head

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Sun Dial

Sun Dial #11 · Dec 21st, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 Reflections ·

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<- Was totally thinking of that PMV when I wrote it! Lol, I just might have to include the Tonight comment somewhere in the story now.

Rainbow87dash

Rainbow87dash #12 · Dec 21st, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 Reflections ·

1835331 tonight comment??

Frankie

Frankie #13 · Dec 21st, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 Reflections ·

So Twilight, Fluttershy, Soarin & Rainbow Dash are in Pinkie's head trying to fix what's wrong with her. I do wonder where Applejack is though.
You mentioned there was something you need to point out from the prologue and put it in this chapter. What was it?

Frankie

Frankie #14 · Dec 21st, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 Reflections ·

1834823 Love that PMV by the way.

Rainbow87dash

Rainbow87dash #15 · Dec 21st, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 Reflections ·

Who want to see the most fun teachers who'd ever have??

Comment posted by Rainbow87dash deleted Dec 22nd, 2012

Mr Stargazer

Mr Stargazer #17 · Jan 10th, 2013 · · · Chapter 1 Reflections ·

butterfield pancake

butterfield pancake #18 · Jan 25th, 2013 · · · Chapter 2 Blazing Spitfire ·

Okay I thought the story was really funny

Rainbow87dash

Rainbow87dash #19 · Jan 26th, 2013 · · · Chapter 2 Blazing Spitfire ·

It might have even been the factory that puffed out a cheerfully pink mist, or the river of magic that flowed through the town. Perhaps it was the hundreds of Pinkies that walked around or the occasional white pegasus with
“This is quite startling, Rainbow Dash.” Fluttershy said calmly, “But I suppose it’s not any worse than our own minds. Although, I would like to have more tree in mine.”

Ya missed something

Twilight flew up next to Dash to get a better view herself. The tower was a sharp contrast to the cheerful town below them, made of a cold black metal. It looked to be about 200 hoofs and was set outside the town, at the base of the mountains that encircled Pinkieville. An intimidating burning green eye sat between two pillars over a platform on the top of the tower. Twilight shivered for a moment, then felt as if she was heating up as she felt its gaze fall directly upon her.

That's that tower out of Lord of The Rings

Rainbow87dash

Rainbow87dash #20 · Jan 26th, 2013 · · · Chapter 2 Blazing Spitfire ·

So many references

Trotter, Texas Ranger” when this was all over. After all, according to Pinkie, Applejack didn’t get wet... water got Applejacked

CHUCK NORRIS!!!
Jesus walked on water, Chuck Norris walked on Jesus

Chuck Norris can cure cancer with his tears, too bad he doesn't cry

Rainbow87dash

Rainbow87dash #21 · Jan 26th, 2013 · · · Chapter 2 Blazing Spitfire ·

Watching them go, Dash flew above Applejack. “I do not envy Twilight, Applejack. Where did you get a stupid idea like that?”
“What? No!”
“Oh, I know I would be just a bit envious.” Fluttershy cheerfully said, as she walked beside Applejack as opposed to her pegasus counterpart, who flew next to them. “Soarin seems like a very nice stallion. He’s strong and kind and honest and he seems rather loyal too. Did you know he told me once that he could never betray the Princess?”

Missed something there too

Applejack was having too much fun to comply to Dash’s request. She was on a roll and wasn’t going to relax now. “Now Dash, its alright to be scared. Stallions can be scary sometimes. You just got to mare up and calm down. You’ve practically got him in your hooves. He didn't even think twice when Pinkie chose you as his mate, and she obviously thinks he’d make a fine father.”

“Is that so? Well, it seems to me the stallion you want is currently hanging out with egghead Twilight. Twilight said that you’ve been reading more lately, and I reckon that has something to do with you trying to impress a certain wonderbolt.”

And here

Sun Dial

Sun Dial #22 · Jan 26th, 2013 · · · Chapter 2 Blazing Spitfire ·

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Many Thanks, it seems as if something went screwy with the upload, cause those parts were still in the original file. So thanks for catching that.

And Yes.... the all knowing Eye of Pinkie is watching.

Thanks for the review, and I hope to get the next chapter out sooner (Took me forever to figure out how I wanted to do the middle part of this story.

Frankie2

Frankie2 #23 · Feb 5th, 2013 · · · Chapter 2 Blazing Spitfire ·

Soarin is an archmage? When did that happen? Why did Luna break down upon hearing Pinkie was a rock farmer? And what was Blueblood's purpose in that meeting? Now for after the meeting.
When did Applejack get there? It was only Twilight, Fluttershy, Rainbow Dash and Soarin in Pinkie's head. And what is Surprise doing In this universe? Let alone, one the Wonderbolts? I didn't see an alternate universe tag. And since when can pegasi use attack magic not involving clouds?
I am utterly confused.

Sun Dial

Sun Dial #24 · Feb 5th, 2013 · · · Chapter 2 Blazing Spitfire ·

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First things first- Applejack is inside of Pinkies mind, I just didn't show her test last chapter.
And yes, Soarin is an archmage, a rather fun one too

Surprises color scheme is one of the background Wonderbolts -and I included her to have fun with some gadgets. She will not have any bearing other then being a Wonderbolt.

As for blue blood, I had a story idea I was going to use, but mostly he was there for Luna to have some one to tell piss off. Don't expect more with him.

Let's just say Spitfire has some unique qualities about her
And I'll get to the back history, you'll find plenty in the next few chapters for your questions???

Thanks for all the great questions... And I hope this was enough to tide you over.

dracoantares

dracoantares #25 · Feb 7th, 2013 · · · Chapter 2 Blazing Spitfire ·

sorry about not reviewing, but i was reading this before school and got in a bit of a rush. Your little message thing is a good idea. anyways, your story was good, but i still cant connect the story to the description in the way that the wonderbolts have a part in, and hope we get to know that soon. Also I think it should have had more information about what happened before the accident and maby a little of pinkies perspective. Over all, i like!

Frankie2