"Mom. Let me get this straight. Twilight is, technically, adopted. On top of that, Princess Celestia, who essentially raised my wife, is her mother. Not only that, but currently, right now at this very moment, Princess Celestia is telling all of this to her, and presumably Luna as well, whom she is now dating... Did I miss anything?" Shining asked, pacing around in a circle in the library.
Velvet mutely nodded her head in reply, while Spike groaned and raised a clawed hand to his face. "Oh man, it's gonna be bad." He began to talk to himself, the attention of the ponies in the room split between Spike and Shining.
"Ah still can't believe it..." Applejack muttered, before turning her focus on to Velvet and Crescent. "Ya see, in the Apple family... we're raised to believe that family is everythin, and that you don't keep no secrets from each other either. Ah feel right bad for Twi, I truly do."
Spike lowered his hand, standing in the way of the pacing Shining to get his attention. "Yeah, I know." He said in reply to the stallion's concerned looks. "I thought when she was completely brushed off at your wedding was a bad time... That's probably going to have nothing on this, though."
Cadance noticed them talking quietly to each other and moved to get closer as everypony else quieted down and gave Spike and Shining their complete attention. I feel somewhat bad to be so happy, knowing that I'll never lose her like I will Shiny, but still... to find out in such a manner. I cannot believe any of them! Plus, poor Twi is going to lose it, I just know it...
"Do you have something in mind, Spike? I have a sinking feeling that Twily is going to completely and utterly lose it, and it's probably going to take everything we have to pull her through this. Not quite the worst case scenario, but this is pretty bad." Shining asked, speaking louder as he noticed the focus of the room had shifted to them.
"This is something a party can't fix, isn't it?" Pinkie asked sadly, her normally poofy mane straightened slightly, a slightly dejected look on her face.
"Darling, I do believe that this is indeed something a party will not be able to help with." Rarity said, shuddering slightly at the next thoughts she voiced. "I dread to imagine what sort of issues this is going to cause her... You have a plan though, Spike?"
"Yeah, I do. Everypony should go home, go somewhere else. Anywhere but here, really." He raised a hand as five mares began to speak up. "I know, you five girls are her best friends, and she's never going to forget that, but–"
A thunderous crack resonated throughout the library, shaking the very foundation of the large tree. Downstairs, books could be heard clattering to the ground in droves, and everypony and a dragon found themselves knocked to the ground as an intense wave of pressure rushed through the room. Of more concern, however, was the immediate wailing that sounded from above. Starting out at a low pitch, it quickly climbed octaves and distantly sounded like a mare in distress.
"Everypony out, now!" Spike yelled, moving to intercept Twilight's parents. "No, you two are part of the problem; this is something only I can take care of. I'm not sure if she's more my mom or a sister to me, or how she sees me, but right now she does not need to see you two!" He berated them, disappointment and sadness crossing their faces as Shining and Cadance grabbed ahold of them and began to lead them away.
"Good luck, Spike." Shining said to Spike's back, the dragon already racing for the stairs.
Spike took the stairs two and three at a time, quickly finding himself just outside the room where the distressful wails originated from. The door stood blown open, half of its hinges destroyed. Quickly walking inside, Spike took stock of the room, noticing how everything had been thrown to the walls. He found Twilight on her bed a complete mess, and quickly hopped up to hug her.
Twilight felt a warmth encompass her from nowhere as she continued crying her eyes out. Her whole world upended, she had no idea what else to do. "L-Luna?" She muttered, her cries momentarily silenced as her eyes remained closed.
"No, Twilight. It's me, Spike." He quietly replied, speaking into her ear. Oh buddy, this is awkward... C'mon, Spike, you can do it! "No matter who you are, you're still Twilight to me. Sometimes my mom, sometimes my sister... and always a bibliophile," at this he earned a choked chuckle from Twilight, "and no matter what, I'm here for you, Twi."
The only answer Spike received was more of the distressing wails coming from Twilight as he continued his awkward hug. "We were all told by your parents about Celestia and you, Twi. It doesn't change a single thing, you hear me? The girls and me all were on your side, you know? It was terrible that such a secret was hidden from you." He ran his claws through Twilight's mane, a motion that he recalled as being comforting to her.
The sobs finally came down from being a keening wail to more of a broken sound, both the volume and intensity decreasing. Two hooves wrapped around Spike, silently returning the embrace. "I'll always be here for you... sister."
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Luna recovered from the shockwave of Twilight's uncontrolled teleportation first, shaking her head as her hearing returned to her. "Ye gods, may I never piss her off..." Luna muttered to herself, quickly taking stock as Celestia approached her.
"Celestia." The curt address stopped her in her tracks, causing her to look at Luna in apprehension.
"What is it, Luna?" Celestia cautiously asked Luna, caught off guard by how she was addressed.
"If I had the time, I would tear stripes from your hide for this day. However, you are still my sister, and out of respect for Twilight I will do nothing today." Celestia relaxed slightly, her shoulders slumping. "But, do not think this is the end of this matter. I do not know how long I will have words for you about this, but I imagine at least a few years. I would love to begin now, but Twilight needs me. Goodbye, sister. You should attend to business in Canterlot."
Without another word, Luna teleported away, not even waiting for a reply from Celestia. She finally let her nerves get to her as she collapsed to the floor, shaking her head from side to side.
"One day, I may hope for their forgiveness. Until then, measures need to be taken to see to her happiness. It's the least I can do."
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Luna appeared in the library's bottom floor, cringing at the sight of the books thrown about the floor. She carefully listened, and after a few seconds only a small sob reached her ears, accompanied with a voice she knew well. Thank you, Spike. Luna carefully made her way through the piles of books, climbing the stairs and bringing herself to Twilight's room.
Her target was on the bed in a heap of hooves and fur, with Spike standing guard over her, hugging her tightly and speaking softly into her ears as Twilight began to drift off. "Spike." Luna spoke softly, not wanting to startle Twilight.
He looked up and gave a smile filled with relief at seeing Luna standing in the wrecked doorframe. "Come on in, Luna. She's mostly cried herself to sleep now; I did all that I could."
Luna quietly walked across the room, nodding her head at Spike. "I see, thank you very much for that, Spike. You mean the world to her, I am glad that she has found some peace in your presence. I fear that there will be many more days like this ahead of her, I have a small idea of just how hard her world has been shaken." Luna leaned down and kissed Twilight on the forehead, then pulled back and charged a spell as she brought her horn to Twilight's. "Sleep well, My Star..."
Luna got in the bed, bringing herself alongside Twilight. "Spike, I have aided her sleep. She should have a nice, dreamless few hours ahead of her now. I will stay and look over her, as much as I am loathe to ask it, her arrival seems to have utterly destroyed any semblance of organization downstairs. Plus, we could use someone downstairs to ensure Twilight isn't disrupted. She needs this sleep."
Spike longingly looked at Twilight, a serene smile now across her muzzle, her breaths deeps and long. "You know, Luna. You're not half bad. I'm glad she has you there too, you know?" He deftly leaped down from the bed, and then turned to look at Luna. "I'd want to stick around, but when she wakes up you'll probably get all mushy and whatnot, so I'll leave Twi to you. Take care of my sis, would you?"
Luna widely smiled. "I shall, Spike. Does that make you my future brother-in-law, then? I've always wanted a dragon in the family."
All that could be heard from Luna as she laid her head down and draped a wing across Twilight's back was a single word. "Mares..."
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Twilight once more found herself within the comforting grasp of unconsciousness, sleep bringing her back to the limitless confines of space. Unlike prior dreams, though, this one was bright and radiant. Stars filled the canvas of the sky, each with its own unique luminosity and size. They bathed her in a light that she felt, a lingering warmth washing over her coat.
"Twilight." A distinctly feminine voice rang out, crystal clear to her ears. "It is good to be able to talk with you at last. Your bond seems to finally be complete."
Twilight's ears swiveled around in an attempt to locate the position of the speaker. Her voice seemed to come from everywhere at once, much like her prior dreams. A tittering laugh reached her ears as she vainly attempted to find the speaker.
"I'm over here, little one. Look towards the moon." Twilight turned her attention towards the moon, the blue of her own star just barely peeking over the edge of it. The mare that entered her sights scared Twilight at first glance.
Her coat was as dark as the night's void itself, with pupils that were teal in color. A lighter splotch of black dotted her flank, centered on a cutie mark comprising countless stars. This last observation calmed Twilight down slightly, but she was on edge. "Who are you? You look very similar to Nightmare Moon, but you can't be her."
The mare in question looked over herself quickly, and then turned to look back towards Twilight. "Yes, I suppose the resemblance is uncanny. She did rip her power straight from me essentially." She warmly smiled at Twilight, bright white teeth sharply contrasting against her coat. "It truly is nice to meet you at last, little one. We have much to discuss."
Although seemingly floating in space, Twilight managed to sit down, her mind quickly at work. "Rip her power from you?" Twilight spoke to herself, puzzle pieces slowly falling into place. "Are you... Luna and Celestia's mom?"
A gentle nod of confirmation came from the mare in question. "Indeed, you may call me Astralia, young Twilight Sparkle. I had hoped to one day meet those who would capture the hearts of my daughters, but not in this fashion I fear." A sad smile graced Astralia's face as she looked at Twilight with love. "Our time will most likely be short, so I shall get to the point. You, Twilight Sparkle, are the new Alicorn of the Stars. Little Luna has been guiding them from afar, but it was never her duty to truly interact with them to the degree you'll be able to."
Twilight was flabbergasted, words failing her. "I, you, stars, what?!" She stammered out, unable to form a coherent sentence.
"Indeed, the very stars themselves. Much as I was their steward before you, it's now up to you to bring life back to the stars. There is so much you will be able to do, given time. I have tried quite a few times to talk to you before, but your connection was muted, barely there. If not for your growing proximity to Luna, I'm uncertain if I would've even been able to enter your dreams." Astralia giggled, a mischievous look crossing her face. "It was quite humorous to see that you thought I was Luna, I'm most gladdened that you are there to warm her heart."
"I don't think I can do this, though. Just yesterday, the biggest concern I had was how everypony was going to take me dating Luna, and now this? I can't control the stars, there's just no way. I'd be terrible at it!" Twilight stammered, backpedaling in the empty space.
"Don't worry, dear. I know you'll do just fine. You just need some time and practice. Now, our time is nearly ended for now, and it will be a bit longer before I have the magic to reach out to you again. Please, I know it will go against everything your mind is telling you right now, but you need to forgive your mother, even if her actions were completely misguided, never forgot that she is family. And family is the most important thing in life.
"Never forget that fact..."
Twilight awoke to a warmth at her side as she lay within her bed, a dark blue wing draped over her in place of a blanket. "You're finally awake, My Star. How are you doing?" Luna quietly asked, tenderly nuzzling Twilight's cheek and kissing her on her forehead.
Twilight couldn't help it; she began to laugh out loud, causing Luna to look at her in concern. She continued her laughter until tears ran from her eyes, her hooves wrapping around Luna. "Your nickname! Didn't even know it at the time, but oh, Luna, it's apparently perfect! Hah!" Her laughter continued, and Luna did the only thing she could think of, sinking into Twilight's embrace and returning it in kind.
The laughter finally came to a halting stop as sobs intermingled with her voice. "Luna, I'm... not so hot, I think. Oh, I'm also 'Alicorn of the Stars,' at least according to somepony claiming to be your mother."
Luna's eyes widened as she began wiping away the tear trails left behind on Twilight's face. "Alicorn of the Stars you say? What did she call herself?" Luna hesitantly asked, disbelief etched across her face.
"Astralia. That's what she said her name was. She didn't say too much, although she did mention how happy she was to know that you had someone, Luna. She also..." Twilight trailed off, her internal thoughts waging a war within her mind. "She told me to forgive Celestia, but... how can I when she kept something like that from me. My whole life, it's–" Her thoughts were derailed when Luna encased her in a bone crushing hug.
"That truly was my mother, Twilight. I am so glad you got to meet her, even if it is just what's left of her among her– no, your stars now." Luna brought her mouth to Twilight's lips, her tongue seeking entrance as the two came together in a quick but passionate kiss. "What else did she say?" Luna breathlessly asked, excited.
"She said never to forget that family is everything, and that I should forgive Celestia... I just don't know if I can so easily get over that everything I've known has been a lie, Luna. I just don't know where to go from here." Twilight's voice was soft at first, then frantically grew in volume as her fears and frustration reared its ugly head.
"Shh, Twilight. Do not worry about that for now, please. Simply enjoy the here and now with me, just the two of us. And I suppose Spike as well, but he left shortly before you woke up, muttering about how it would most likely be too sappy for his liking."
Twilight laughed again, the sound music to Luna's ears. "He would say something like that, wouldn't he. I'm very lucky to have someone like Spike, no matter what I know I can always depend on him. And you too." She paused, horror coming over her face. "Oh, no! What will the girls think?"
Luna cut her off before Twilight could bring her thoughts down that path. "They're still your friends, Twilight. You all came together facing me down when I was Nightmare Moon. You all overcame Discord, Chrysalis and Sombra. Do not think so lightly of your close friends, you should know that they will not simply abandon you. Some things may change, but do not forget. They are still themselves, and you are still you." Luna spoke with some force, attempting to keep Twilight from spiraling downwards.
"I'm still scared though... I'm just Twilight, nopony else." Focusing her magic, she levitated the medallion from the floor and brought it up to rest right in front of her, the warmth of the magic flowing into her intensifying to a point that she believed she could reach out with a hoof and touch it. "This, though. It will change how everypony sees me, and I don't want that. Not at all." Twilight sunk into Luna, seeking comfort in her warmth.
Luna sighed, the melancholy outlook of Twilight momentarily affecting her. "Don't forget though, I'll be there to help you through whatever difficulties lay ahead of us. I have a saying that I think fits this situation perfectly." Luna paused, giving Twilight time to lift her head, locking eyes with each other. She smiled wide, stars dancing in their vision.
"So long as the moon and stars are together, they can handle anything.”
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FIN
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NIce ending
Over all too soon...
Loved it.
ah, this was good.
Definitely one of the best TwiLuna fics on Fimf, good job.
Really enjoyed it. I do think this animosity between Celestia and the rest is a little much honestly, but otherwise a good read.
Really good finish, to say the least. Absolutely awesome!
One of the best I ever seen on this website. :) Next stop the Sequel! :)
Thank You soooo much!
Thank you.
That was a very good ride!
Eagerly awaiting sequeeel!
SQUEEE!!! new chapter . But now the stories over .
Love the ending
Very good ending..... I give you
5/5 Raritys
Also quick question.... would you be thinking about a Sequel Maybe? I would love to see something like that
Let me know once you read this and I'll take the editing parts out of the comment.
Watch that repetition
Looks like a comma splice there.
This section was pretty confusing.
I assume Luna has plans for a marriage that Twi doesn't know about.
Just think, "Yeah, so now that you just found out Celestia is actually your mother and that you're now the Alicorn of the Stars. Will you marry me?"
Poor Twilight would just shutdown.
Regarding your characterizations, I think you normally hit Celestia and Luna spot on each time. Twilight's pretty good as well. Spike however, at least in this chapter is not one of your strengths though. Some of the words and phrasing just didn't seem to fit at different times.
As for concepts, I think having a bedside chat was a great setting for the final talks. However, I did find Twilight's reaction to being told she was an Alicorn to be a little too accepting (when she was laughing and telling Luna about it). I think over all, things could have been drawn out more and that end section was a little rushed, but hey at least it's over. I know, sequel and such, blah blah blah...
Alright, as for chapters go, I don't really think this one was one of the better ones. Maybe it was due to a few errors that kept drawing my attention, or because of the time it took to this update, but this chapter just felt a little lacking. To say that it was bad, or not good would be lying, because this chapter and the story as a whole is definitely good, but I think there's a few areas that could be improved on to make this story great. I'm glad to see that things have finally come to a close in a sense.
Just realized that you indent with spaces.
I approve.
I'm still trying repar my brain after the last chapter. But I loved the story ether way!
I this story was beautiful. Why does it have to be over? any chance of a sequel?
why do i get the feeling that "Ye gods, may I never piss her off..." is exactly what luna and celestia would say if they pissed off twilight in the show
earlier chapters call it red. Although we were never given any information on it's companion star that Luna added ... so would that be two stars of hers?
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Okay an honest review now that I've finished this story.
Knowing that a future rewrite is in order. I have high hopes for it. The shipping all in all wasn't that bad, although the PinkieShy could have stood to be a side story / stand alone. It was good enough that we knew they were together, throwing it in the story itself while cute didn't realy add to the story itself. Neither did the Cutie Mark Crusaders, seing as how it was a throw away ship that didn't play any part of the story other than a throw away line.
The biggest errors you face are your paragraph structure when doing dialog. I stated it in an earlier comment. But never use closing quote marks as long as a speaker is still talking. Start new paragraphs with opening " marks though. To show a continuation of that speaker talking. The other problem is choose Ah or I when doing AJ. I was glad to see that you at least capped Ah and treated it as you would I. Not a lot of writers do that it seems.
Other than that its mostly checking that the right word is used, but that concludes the bad part of the review. Now onto the good.
He character interactions were wonderful to read, and there were tons of interesing interactions between characters. I'd personally love seeing side fics of the ships in this. Such as the plot thread of Rarity working on the farm, and AJ's pampering. I think that little fic would be down right adorable. As well as the hinted at possible Dashie X Tia ship. That has many wonderful possibilities that I'd love to see happen. Although such ships not being central to the story would be best explored in their own fics.
Will you ever do those? I'd love to read them if they are, I've never read any DashieXTia fics before, and your RariJack looks interestingly done. TwiLuna was done rather splendidly, and the romance was both tame, and tasteful. Yet wasn't boring nor contrived. It was rather pleasant to read. All in all for your first fic on fimfic, it was rather well done.
Loved this chapter, loved this book, loved this story.
But a little thing comes to my attention, if Celestia is Twilight's mom and Luna's adopted sister
Awkward.
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Try speaking in not all quote tags when making comments to others.
And Blue Dwarfs and Red Dwarfs are totally different things. One [Blue] being what happens when the other can no longer exist [Red].
...interesting...
I remember finding this a long ago but I dropped it when I hit the pinkie/fluttershy shipping. Flutterdash is best! Second only to Twiluna of course.
But, having finally decided to ignore fluttershy and pinke pie in this, I gotta say the rest is great. I only found it again because of the second story which I may also have red when on holiday last week.... I don't normally read things around the wrong way. But for a open sort of ending, this is good :)
not quite? THIS IS THE FUCKING WORST CASE SCENARIO!!!
6156035 She explicitly stated that her spell swapped colours, multiple times, and I was quoting those. I figured the people reading my comment would put two and two together, but since you only paid attention to the fact that I was quoting rather than the contents of those quotes, I'll spell it out for you:
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I was more talking about the fact that the entire comment you made was in Quotes. So of course I wouldn't put it together, since the bit above, you you did an error fix in Quote tags. Rather than the normal people way of Bolding the text that's wrong, and under the quote box putting the quote. Then right afterwards you have several lines of Quotes.
So if as you just showed you were capable of. You simply stated, she states her spell swaps colors. Then pointed out, a single quote, like you just did. That would have been a proper response.
As you can see.
And then she will defeat Tyrek, reform discord, defeat Trixie, defeat Starlight Glimmer, defeat Sunset Shimmer, Defeat Starlight Glimmer again, reform Starlight Glimmer, Reform Sunset Shimmer, defeat Cozy Glow, defeat Sombra again, defeat the combination of Cozy Glow, Chrysalis, and Tyrek all at once, defeat the Sorm King and Tempest, and reform Tempest but not in that exact order obviously, anything else I'm missing? Oh yeah are there are a few minor events where Twilight defeated a few smaller events before they became to big to deal with.
Ya I'd say Twilight is far from normal, and apparently she was born an Allicorn in this story, although I do have 1 quastion, Celestia is powerful because of 1 star, the sun, but if Twilight will control the stars than.....is she more powerful than Celestia and Luna? And can she become more powerful by simply creating more stars?
What I imagine Twilight looking like in the future within this story:
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I can't convert images to an sfw link so I have to send a link instead, deal with it.