Titler Duet

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Lyra is sent an invitation to the Grand Galloping Gala by an old friend. When she goes, complications arise and she has to make a choice. Whether she knows it or not, somepony's heart is going to be broken.

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ooooo13

ooooo13 #1 · Jan 14th, 2012 · · · 2 ·

All I can think about is poor Bon Bon and how awkward it'll be for her and Lyra if Lyra comes back from Canterlot with her new GF..

CheeseDeluxe

CheeseDeluxe #2 · Jan 14th, 2012 · · · 1 ·

Your actions, dialogue, and thoughts aren't exactly seamless. Work on weaving them into the story without making them distracting.

DJ Cobalt

DJ Cobalt #3 · Jan 14th, 2012 · · · 1 ·

haha good story

129394 and it doesnt seem seamless because there is not much inspiration to write about lyra. she is in fact a background pony but i suppose he could make it more in depth and yeah could have been better but i aint going to complain good story good plot and i found a chekhov's gun(like a foreshadowing effect in the story and its only a guess) ill read on tomorrow to see if my guess is right. dont want to spoil it for others

How Far Can I Slide

How Far Can I Slide #4 · Jan 14th, 2012 · · · 2 ·

Dawww
Great story good work!
but poor bon bon!!!!!!

Tailslover13

Tailslover13 #5 · Jan 14th, 2012 · · · 2 ·

That picture alone was enough to get me to read...so freaking adorable. Lyra is beyond a doubt one of the cutest ponies that never gets any lines. We've seen her crying, we've seen her sitting like a human, we've seen her waving cutely, we've seen...everything! And it's cute stories like this that, while aren't as detailed as others, make me love that sweetie even more than I already did. Lyra rules! Oh, and sorry, Bon-Bon; try not to be such a brat next time.