Vinyl Scratch wakes up on a metal floor, shivering from cold, inside of a small windowless room. With no recollection on how she got there, or who put her here, she has to learn to survive in a chilling and alienated enviorrnment. But how long can she stay alive? An even better question would be, how long can she keep her sanity?
~NOTE~ This story may have a dark theme, but will not be a graphic or overly-violent fic.
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Hm. Interesting. I'll be keeping an eye on this.
hey pretty good keep it up i quite like it
I don't like stories where Vinyl is portrayed as being some kind of addict. (Drug, alcohol, whatever.) This is in no way a condemnation of your writing style, as although I do not particularly like the subject matter, I did enjoy reading it, in the sense that I always enjoy reading people's works who can actually string together coherent sentences in a non-grammar error-filled fashion.
No downvote, no upvote, no favorite. Just a compliment saying, keep up the good work.
I like!
And to her Sanity...
I'll try to stay with her as long as I can.
Well, you have the basics of grammar down, and props for you on actually putting each person speaking on a new line. The only problem I see is some of the paragraphs seem too long. This might just be me though.
Meh.
It's an interesting concept, so I'm faving for future chapters.
See you then!
Wow, thank you so much to everyone who liked it!
I'll try to improve in the next chapters, and I will take all of ya'lls suggestions, to hopefully please everybody 
1733958 I'm sorry for making my paragraphs too long, I noticed that myself too 
1733701 thank you for the compliment, I really appreciate it 
and I actually didn't intend on making Vinyl an addict at first, I just rolled with it as I saw it blending well with the story 
thanks again to everybody, and have a great day! 
- The Gentle Colt, crusader of pure love and tolerance.
Hmmmm vinyl on alchol then her being a dj. Trouble ahead
P.s. Maybe you can read my story called my day in ponyville
1734154 yes, trouble does lie ahead
I hope you liked it! If you didn't, please tell me what I can do to improve! 
and I shall read your story, and I'll comment on it when I'm done 
Just want to let you know, the eye color is wrong.
1734425 I was patiently waiting for someone to say that
I know it is, but I just like them this color, it is a fanfiction after all 
overall, what did you think of the fic? 
1734474 Oh sorry I didn't read it. I was on the main page and saw the red eyes... I could, although sad and dark stuff really isn't my type. I'll take a look.
1734507 Thank you!
as long as you don't downvote without reading it, then I'm fine 
1734519 What kind of sick, twisted person would do that?
The description has solicited my interest... Read later, when there are a few more chapters.
You sir, know how to make a description.
I'll put this on my read later, and check it out tonight.
Expect a comment when I read it!
1734531 A lot, actually
1734556 Thanks! I won't rush the chapters, though, because I like to put quality and time into my fics
1734606 I'll certainly be looking forward to it!
and thank you, hoepfully you like it! 
It's a great beginning; sounds like it's going to be a good story. Just a couple of errors: grammatical mostly. Something that I would suggest is to review your sentence structures, some seemed too wordy and run on's. Also you had a lot of repetition. Saying a word and then using the same word for the same thing in the next sentence. Although this isn't bad on occasion, after it happens a couple times in a row it begins to sound monotonous. Try to very your diction and be descriptive, it helps. Well, that's all for the bad stuff. I thought it was a pleasant introduction. I might read more when it arrives, keep up the good work.
1734655 Thank you so much!
I love it when people critisise my work, that means I can improve! 
I will try not to be so repetitive in the coming chapters, and I'll admit, I like to rant, even in my fics 
Thanks again. You sir, have a wondeful night!
So far, so good.
Looking forward to seeing where this is going.
1734860 awww, thank you
1734202
Like it...LIKE IT... I LOVE IT
Pretty good so far. The narrative is done well and the characters (Scratch, for now) are well written. A few small instances where you forgot a letter or the grammar was slightly awkward, but in general it read well and was enjoyable.
I could pre-read/proofread for you, if you'd like.
well im just gonna like and fave because i want to see where you go with this
1775850 Agreed
I'm eager to see what you do with the Octavia part of the story.
You have an interesting story lined up here. But you still repeat a lot of phrase. I would suggest a thesaurus, I find it helps me a lot. You have improved in this short time and I would encourage you to continue. I'll definitely keep up with the new chapters.
A note to anyone who actually can see this:
Desolation is on Hiatus now, because of being bombarded with stress in real life, I am unable to continue it right now. It pains me to say this, but I hate to put it on incomplete so ya'll wait for something that might not come for a long time.
I apologize for any spelling mistakes in this comment, I am not writing on my computer, so it's very difficult and laggy to proofread.
For anything related to Desolation, or future stories, please feel free to send me a PM, I will get back to you as soon as I can. Have a great day, everybody.
- The Gentle Colt, crusader of pure love and tolerance.
the end sounds like a rape just sayen
1945870
Oh dear god..
no, I am not that sick, I would NEVER put that in my story ;-; You'll just have to find out what happens 
1955652 In that case a test subject for a crazy science experiment which will cause an epic chase sequence where Octavia will become a badass and save vinyl
I like it thus far.... though I have an uneasy feeling (based on your brief description and the hammer and nail cutie mark on the stallion) that this could go into very dark "Saw" like territory... Gotta check out Part 2!