Its hard to make friends, especially when everyone thinks you're a loser. My name's Seethe.(Ya, I know that's already one reason why I don't have friends. I got used to it though since my parents never changed it.) I have light brown hair, lighter brown eyes, and am essentially a normal kid...well to me at least. Eveyone else thinks im a freak. Seriously, I'm not bad, I just suck at everything. Sports: horrible. Schoolwork: awful (Dont get me wrong. I'm smart, just lazy). Trying to make friends: forget about it.
You think thats bad, wait till you hear what happened next. When people found out I was a brony, it was if I was a lab experiment gone wrong to them. "What? You watch that little girls show?!" "You Freak!" The list goes on and on. The sad thing is, I never told them. I never went out, saying 'Hey im a brony lets all be firends!' I tried to keep it a secret. Unfortunatly, Steve wasnt very helpful. I thought he was the closest thing to a friend that I had, and I even told him about it because I trusted him so much. Turns out, he was just there so he can make my life a living hell. It's sad to see so many people going out of their way just to bully me now. I can't get any help from people. Teachers just say "Seethe, they're just getting used to you. Give it time." Ya, time to find a way to kill me when your not looking. Parents? They've gone on a long holiday, as in the whole school year. They said it was to get a vacation from work, but I really think it's to get away from me.
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Whats that? You want to know more about my brony side? In short form, I found it while surfing the web, thought it be funny, and it turns out it's actually pretty good. Enough of that right now, this story is about to get weird.
After the daily spit wads and other unmetionables thrown at me during a normal school day, and the talks with teachers for missing work, I get home one Thursday to just relax and get away from all that noise. I looked at my watch to see the time, 3:46pm. "Damn, nothing good on T.V. right now...guess I'll go clean up and get this junk off me." Right when I got to the top of the stairs and go into my room for the rest of the day, my door bell rings. "What's that? Nothing normally comes at this hour...I really hope its not a prank from the guys at school. I am not in the mood right now." It's happened before, sad to say. The usual insults or eggs thrown at me. However, what I was not expecting was a girl standing there looking really confused. I was even surprised to see that she was there, ringing my door bell.
"Um...Hi." She said in a very nervous voice, like I was some type of intimidating bodyguard.
I cocked an eyebrow, gazing down upon her. "Sup....you looking for someone, or something?" She stood there for a minute, as if trying to think what to say and how to say it. I waited patiently. Normally, I would've closed the door and said good day, but she seemed familiar.
Finally, she spoke. "I seem to be a bit lost. One moment I was with my friends, and the next I was here. I'm starting to get a little worried."
Maybe it was me trying to be a nice guy, but I somehow bought that story. "You want to use my phone? Call someone you know?"
She shook her head. "N-no its just, I dont know if it will reach them."
"They live far?"
"No, no,no,no!" She stamped her foot into the ground in frustration. "It's just to complicated to explain!"
I nearly jumped back. Never had I seen someone so frustrated over a phone. "Jeez, if your going to be like that then forget about it, ok?"
I was a few seconds away from closing the door on her and forgetting the whole thing, when she quickly called out. "I need your help!"
I stopped the door inches from her face.
"Oh, thank Celestia!"
I opened the door so fast, it slammed into the wall. "What did you just say?"
"Um....thank Celestia? Do you know her?" She raised an eyebrow.
I narrowed my eyes, glaring at her. "Listen, I'm sick and tired of you people making fun of me! I dont care if its fun, or good. or whatever! Just stop right now or I swear I will-" In my moment of rage and venting, I saw her fearful reaction. Her eyes were wide, pupils were small, her knees looked like they were going to buckle, and I thought I saw a tear forming in the corner of her eye. I stopped myself, feeling horrible that I actually was about to go crazy on this person who I clearly didn't know. "Hey, I'm sorry. Im not usually like this...I've been having a bad day."
She seemed to calm down a bit, but still looked as if she was going to run any second.
"If you dont mind me asking, why did you say that?" I asked
"It's a saying. Im sorry if it upset you."
"It's fine. Would you like to come inside? We can talk about this trouble that you're in."
She managed a small smile. "Thank you."
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Now your probly wondering why I'm letting a complete stranger into my house, blah blah blah. Well, she seemed innocent enough to not steal anything or kill me, and she looked scared. That's good enough for me. I got her to sit in the kitchen and went into my fridge. "You want something to drink?"
"Water would be nice." I poured her a glass and went to sit down. Passing it, I managed to get a better look at her. She had long purple hair with a pink hi-light running down the middle. She had a backpack with some books inside, so I just assumed she was a student at my highschool. What caught my attention was her earrings. They were some type of star, but it looked so familiar.
"So, my name is Seethe." I told her my name to see if she would know me, expecting some sort of reaction. I do have a reputaion at school, as I've already mentioned.
Fortunatly, she didnt. She looked right at me with what could only be described as kindness. "Hey Seethe, I'm Twilight. Twilight Sparkle."
Another nerve was struck. "What? Twilight?" She nodded, looking sad. "Yep. I guess its weird to you, huh? Everypony else here laughed when I told them, thinking it was made up or something."
"Well, it's not what I had in mind." I said trying not to get upset.
Before I could ask her about where she came from, she began asking questions of her own. "Seethe? You know you have stuff in your ma-...hair, right?"
Embaresed, I start scratching my head, trying to get all the stuff off me. "Damn" I wispered to myself. How could I forget that?
She gave me an innocent smile, like this was something she saw but waited to see if I'd notice. I smirked back. "So, where is everyone else? Are they out?" Twilight said, looking around to see if someone else was standing around.
"That's none of your buisness." I said a little to harshly. That subject was always touchy for me. Who wanted to know their parents left because you were too annoying to be around.
She nodded looking away. "I see that I've caught you while your in a bad mood..."
I started to laugh. "Actually, this is my good side..."
We sat there in silence for a few minutes. Finally, I spoke. "Twilight, where are you from? Out of town? In town? Some made up universe?"
That last question took her by surprise."Made up? What are you taking about? I'm from Equestria! To be more precise, Ponyville!" I facepalmed.
Trying to look at her between my fingers, I asked another question. "Why are you here?"
"Well...something happened back at home...something bad..." She looked lost in though, trying to rememeber something. "I...I'm not..sure what..."
Sudenly tears began streaming down her cheeks. Taking my hand away from my head, I was surprised. "Hey, are you alright?"
She nodded, but she was still crying. "I'm sorry, I'm just really worried about my friends. Dash and A.J. would probly be alright, but the others...I can't imagine them lost in this world by themselves." She put her head in her hands, crying harder. "This world is so diffrent then my world, with so many mean people. Before I got here, there were people saying such harsh words. The teasing and everything else is so bad! I feel so out of place and, worse of all, I'm not....me. I look like you....why did this happen? What's going on?!"
I felt really bad for her. Someone else that felt out of place, made fun of, and completly lost. I kinda saw myself in her. I got up, and walked beside her. Putting my hand on her shoulder, I tried to comfort her. "Hey, its ok. Listen, if you want, I'll help."
She looked up at me, tears still flowing down her face. "Really? Even though you just met me today, you're willing to help?"
I smiled. "Ya, why not. You look like you need some help right now."
I don't know if she was relieved, or just needed something to hold, but she hugged me. Surprised and blushing, I patted her back.
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A few minutes later, we were back sitting down at the kitchen table. "Where do you think we should look?" Twilight said.
"Well, this town isnt that big. Assuming you guys stayed in the same general place, it won't be long until we find them."
She smiled. "That's good to hear. Why don't we go now?"
I gazed down at my watch which read 7:59pm. "Its too late to go out now. Hopefully we'll find them tommorow."
Twilight looked at the sun setting outside. "What moves your sun and moon? Magic?"
I looked at the sun. "Well, actually our planet is in orbit around the sun. With its axis turning, it looks like the sun is moving when actually its the earth that's spinning." When I looked back, I cracked a smile. She had the most quizical look I've ever seen. She was trying to process everything I said. "Um..yes its magic." I quickly added. Rememebring what I had said earlier, I looked over to her. "Hey Twilight, you have a place to stay?"
She shook her head. "I haven't looked yet. Should probly go and find one, right?"
"Well..." I looked at the stairs leading to the upper floor. "I have some free space, and no one else is here. If you want you can stay here till you find a way back home..."
A look of relief washed over her face upon the mention of shelter. "Really? I dont want to be a bother."
"Aw, c'mon. If anything your going to be the only thing not bothering me."
"Ok then, I'll stay here."
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When the moon came up and everything was dark outside, I showed her where she would be sleeping. "This used to be a guest room, whenever company came over, or some family. Then some stuff happened."
Twilight started feeling the bed to see if it was comfortable. Satisfied, she jumped onto the bed and relaxed. "This will be perfect. Thank you, Seethe." I nodded.
"Well, if your all set, we should probly get some rest. I'm going to check the school tommorow to see if any of your friends are there." She looked at me with concern. "Why are you going by yourself? Can't I come along?"
"Well, I didn't know if you wanted to go to the school. There are some...interesting charactrers there."
She gave me a stare. "Im coming tommorow. Besides, I get to see all of your friends while were looking for mine."
I looked away, feeling a bit pained. I hadn't mention to her that I had no friends, no one for any type of support at all. She noticed that I wasn't feeling good. "Seethe?"
"We should get some rest. Sleep well." I closed the light in her room, and walked into mine. I hadn't felt this bad since Steve betrayed my trust. Lying there in my bed, I was beginning to think that this all might've been a dream. Maybe I've gone delusional, or insane. Perhaps I was actually dead, and now I have a chance to make friends after all. I closed my eyes and prepared for the worst.
this has a interesting start to and i really enjoy this kind of story so hope to see more of what happens next
Cannot wait for the next chapter!
the backstory for Seethe reminds me of the story of me, and my friend ty before we had become friends. We both didn't have any real friends then we started hanging out. we're also both bronies.When we got into college we made ton of friends, many of them are also bronies life is good
Comon make more chapters, I love this story
You good sir brony must make *Clears throat*MOAR CHAPTERS!!
Its getting good
Thank you everyone for your support. Since this is my first story, i was very nervous about what people would think.
Cool story bro, add some chapters.
Interesting story, and not badly handled. Your punctuation, spelling and whatnot certainly need a tidy up, and I'd seriously recommend double-spacing your paragraphs so that the story looks a whole lot less daunting. Overall needs some work, but it's a fun little read. What I'd recommend next is that you slow your pace right down, giving more detail to your story so that your narrative has some more substance. Keep going, nothing helps improving your writing style than more writing!
This story has extreme potential and can be unique to it's own (which is rare for 1st time fics), but if you keep up the creativity, I can see this evolving into something that I will check my email for updates on. My only question is: If he's made fun of being a brony so much to explode with rage at a person, why would he suddenly flip and help this mysterious person look for her so called friends (knowing that it's the Mane 6). Just seems so odd.
@Beige Monkfish Thank you for the feedback. I know that my punctuation, spelling, and "whatnot" need a tidy up. I had a friend edit it, and he helped alot (Trust me it would look alot worse) and again thank you!
this thing is great!
@FrostBite Thank you for the comment. Yes he had this rage from when he was getting picked on, but he is still a good guy. He felt bad for snapping. And he wanted to help her because she was lost and confused, no idea what this world is like, and he felt bad for her. hope that helped
I'm agreeing with everyone else on this.
Me... at this very moment ->
Epical. Tracking!~
Although short, I liked this story. The fact that te Mane 6 finds their way to human earth. I cannot wait for the nest installment. Keep it up!
120015 dont worry, the other stories will be longer
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120063 (thought process)......... Thats awsome!
This is really a good start for your first fic (I'm under the impression that it is). I've always felt like there was a bit to few of these "Ponies -> Human"-stories and I can't wait for the next chapter. Just remember: there's no need to rush. Take your time, and upload it when you're satisfied. I had trouble with that myself when I uploaded my chapter 2
Keep up the good work Jossie!
-Glassed
120261 jossie huh....going to have to get used to that, it sounds pretty good . And thanks, its very tempting to try and write one as soon as possible, but i need to calm down and make it really good before i put it up.
I really don't need another story on my tracked list... Damn you Jos, Why did you have to make such an interesting story?!
Nice start to what will hopefully be a great story. Keep up the great work.
this story is so good. I am so bucking excited for the next chapter you don't even know. but don't rush. I remember from writing my stories that I got so excited to put more up for my readers that I just was uploading it as soon as I got to a good stopping place and without any editing, and even though I still got good reviews I wasn't nearly as satisfied with it as I could have been. So take your time, and know that we're all super excited for the next update because this story is SO AWESOME
120063 that looks like a gun
120609 ya sorry, didnt think it would be popular.
yeah. don't ever type "Ya" in your story. Thats more of an 'internet speak' kind of thing. I don't know, just sounds weird.
Tracking because I like what I see. Please to be cleaning up punctuation, spacing, format, all that, and you'll be A-OK
Oh, and thanks for putting Best Pony first. Hope we see some more char development in chapter 2, you've done a good job of it so far!
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What's up? How's life? Has it been treating you well?
You have now just gone through my introductory segment, feel free to answer them or not, that's just me being me
Anyway, I was sent here by a mutual friend, I'll let you figure out who though. In the end, I was glad he sent me, you have a new tracker. Now, I'm going to be honest and say that these kinds of stories I tend to avoid, for no reason really, I just do. For this story exceptions are being made - it is really rather good, and you have a solid beginning going so far. My interest has been grabbed, and I look forward to more.
Onto some other things now though. You could stand to change the format, like double spacing between new paragraphs. It makes the story look more clean, and it gives off a more lengthy look. It just seems to compact the way you have it now. You also have some punctuation errors here and there but those aren't too important right now. You seem to have the narration going pretty well, and the dialog is good, so you have a pretty firm grasp on the story in general - especially for a first time. Just touch up the format and watch those pesky punctuations and you'll be set.
This story is interesting, and I do await more
127331 Im good, life is pretty good i guess, its been treating me aw well as everyone else. (wanted to answer those questions) Thanks for the comment, i'll be picking at my brain to see who sent you, LOL. I used to write stiories before, and they sucked, but i learned from them. Working on the new chapter, I am trying to make it look more 'readable' as this chapter has clumps of words here and there. Also, my friend (Skwoogle) is helping me with punctuation, and grammer and all that. You have a good day!
127490 LOL, you mean that horrible thing i sent you, ya.
120884 Thank you for the feed back. Looking back on it, The 'Ya' word doesnt seem as good as 'Yeah' and now im making sure its put into my stories (Although i might've missed some ) Not only that, but im starting to see when im typing to my friends that im typing 'Yeah' instead of 'Ya'. So thank you,
Until you said purple hair, I thought it was fluttershy
my thoughts:meh