You really should indent and/or double-space between paragraphs and new lines of dialogue. The current formatting is very wall-o'-text-ish and difficult to read.
Also, I'd strongly recommend reading up on dialogue conventions. Your punctuation and capitalization are consistently incorrect.
You NEED an editer. Your grammer isnt the best and there are parts where i camt even understand what your saying. I cant STAND bad grammer but the story is so good that it drowns that out. Fix the grammer and this will bbe my favorite story!!!!
You really should indent and/or double-space between paragraphs and new lines of dialogue. The current formatting is very wall-o'-text-ish and difficult to read.
Also, I'd strongly recommend reading up on dialogue conventions. Your punctuation and capitalization are consistently incorrect.
Just out of curiostiy, what does a symbol for a major chord look like? I didn't know they made something for that.
You NEED an editer. Your grammer isnt the best and there are parts where i camt even understand what your saying. I cant STAND bad grammer but the story is so good that it drowns that out. Fix the grammer and this will bbe my favorite story!!!!
-Michael A.