You know, that you mighty improved your writing?

You gained my interest...

Also... FIRST!

I really enjoy seeing your story progress. With such a great intro as this, I hope (am certain) that this story will recieve as much positive feedback as the last. But going back to yesterday, I do still advise you to re-write / elaborate on Twilight's death. I feel it's rushed and if you need any help or suggestions, you can find me whooping flank on Halo: Reach.

Lalalalalalalalalalalala

who was zephyr talking to before dash showed up?

I can't wait for the next chapter

>>119802119802 u

>>119841119841 i thought so. its just that you didnt put a name, so i had to assume it was me

>>119853119853 Fixed

FIRST and this is very good

>>122059122059 Nice to see your still reading.

....power of the sun...as a pin point weapon...they are sooo screwed

>>122256122256 My god sir you doubt my pow......shit your right.

>>122265122265

(puts on sunglasses)

get outa the kitchen, or yer ganna get burned

>>122277122277 (takes them then puts them on) dude I'm Ice cold

            YYYYYYYYYHHHHHHHHHEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH

WUT!!!???

amazing but still wut

TROLLESTIA RULES, EQUESTRIA FAILS

If you live too long, you go mad eventually...

And it's just worse if you can't die.

>>123968123968 I'm stealing that.

>>123974123974

>>123981123981 You'll get credit

Tyrant Celestia?

Bitch, please... Lunar Republic!

>>124067124067 Who said anything about a tyrant?

LOL!

Creditz for meh!

"Get him kitty" for some reason it made me laugh hard

Ice, don't say you actually do that...

>>126056126056

NEEED.... PROOFREADERS!!!!!

A LOT!!!!!!

>>126399126399 ....u mad bro? I think it makes perfect sense

>>126404126404

Ice... Seriously, you need a pre- and proofreader, I was just barely able to read some parts.

Grammatical problems, wrong word uses, repeated word uses...

At least you should check it 3 times before you publish it.

>>126411126411 Okay 1.Fair enough 2.No 3.Those where on purpose.

DAMN YOU ICE!

One more guy stole my prank!

Good side: That's third story, I'm in...

>>126437126437 hehehehehehe

again with the couple thing? damn you ice! you drive me to frustration!

he slammed a CREAM PIE in his face...does anyone else see something wrong with that?

*shudders*

>>126843126843 you my friend undestand my way of thinking.

>>128053128053 You REALLY want to be dead, right?

>>128080128080 try me.

*reads title*

Nope, not important...

...

>>128604128604 It's your fault

>>128606128606 *Sings Trololo song*

U MAD?

>>128611128611 Nope but my sister is

>>128613128613 Tell her, that I troll'd her...

*sings Winter Wrap Up*

Now U MAD?

>>128618128618 No she's mad because she had an exam to study for and her information was on our laptop so now that's it's broken there is a high chance she'll fail her highers.

>>128618128618

I think both of them are mad.

*brohoof to Blaze*

Well done!

>>128640128640 Neh I'm not mad but I think it's pathetic that you two think it's funny that something that important to her is going badly.

>>128640128640 Quest complete!

*brohoof*

>>128653128653 Your both pricks

>>128644128644

Ice. Look.

You punched and broked that monitor.

Me and Blaze were kidding with you and you took it too seriously.

Oh, and why would anyone sane punch the monitor if something is written on it?

Just askin'....

>>128654128654 Nope, just trolls...

*sings Nothing Else Matters*