The only criticism I can give this is the same criticism I can give to my own fiction. It's a bit, I don't know, a bit like a wish that becomes fulfilled. It's just TOO perfect. It is like how we all WISH things could be, not how it ACTUALLY IS. But I have the same problem. I find it very difficult to write in the harsh reality of what is. But hey, maybe I'm just all to cynical, due to my absolutely suckish experience with all things related to romance.
Being thoughtful and saying pretty and romantic stuff is nice, showing your sensitive side is ok too, but never (please pay attention) never show too much and never let your relationship be based on cute words. Actions and deeds are what matter at the end.
My god this fic is great! I can't wait to read the next chapter.
As stated, it's a innocent and cute story though bordering on to sweet for even diabetus.
But this is kind of.... plain weird: "Spike closed his eyes and hunched his body, ready for a hard smack across the cheek"
Sooo for stating his feelings he thinks that the individ he has described with the sentence "Your personality… it’s so kind and sweet and generous; you really care for all the things around you, and I could look into your eyes for hours".
And his thoughts goes to him getting smacked for stating his affection for her and telling her she is basically the picture perfect partner..... That just seems out of place... Like really out of place for someone whom has not been in a abusive relationship at least. Hmmmm That makes me question if a certain lavender Unicorn might be more sadistic than thought and keeps him in line through more direct means of handling his dragon-nature......
The tension builds...
The only criticism I can give this is the same criticism I can give to my own fiction. It's a bit, I don't know, a bit like a wish that becomes fulfilled. It's just TOO perfect. It is like how we all WISH things could be, not how it ACTUALLY IS. But I have the same problem. I find it very difficult to write in the harsh reality of what is. But hey, maybe I'm just all to cynical, due to my absolutely suckish experience with all things related to romance.
Now let me go wallow in self pity...
NOOOOO!!!
Spike be careful!
Being thoughtful and saying pretty and romantic stuff is nice, showing your sensitive side is ok too, but never (please pay attention) never show too much and never let your relationship be based on cute words.
Actions and deeds are what matter at the end.
My god this fic is great! I can't wait to read the next chapter.
As stated, it's a innocent and cute story though bordering on to sweet for even diabetus.
But this is kind of.... plain weird: "Spike closed his eyes and hunched his body, ready for a hard smack across the cheek"
Sooo for stating his feelings he thinks that the individ he has described with the sentence "Your personality… it’s so kind and sweet and generous; you really care for all the things around you, and I could look into your eyes for hours".
And his thoughts goes to him getting smacked for stating his affection for her and telling her she is basically the picture perfect partner..... That just seems out of place... Like really out of place for someone whom has not been in a abusive relationship at least. Hmmmm That makes me question if a certain lavender Unicorn might be more sadistic than thought and keeps him in line through more direct means of handling his dragon-nature......
I think a fan-fic idea is getting sown.......
Just wanted to state this thought......
Awwww, that's so sweet. I always loved the idea of Spike and Rarity being a couple. Ya done good, Spike. Ya done good.
The moment they confessed, I I just can't help but feel proud, knowing how cute they look together
Confessions on Sweetie Belle's bed.