Back in Canterlot, Konan dropped down to the ground from the air as Midnight Blossom followed quickly behind. The bat pony forced her wings to her side to increase her speed to close the gap between herself and her target. "Don't think you can escape from us!" She yelled out in anger.
Flipping her gaze back, Konan frowned at seeing how close her pursuer was. Her hooves made contact with the street below before kicking off again moments before the mares long claws slashed down her back. The female akatsuki member skidded to a stop and flipped around to face the guard once again. "Please listen to me, I don't want to fight you."
"You got some strange ways of trying to chat..." Midnight growled as she stood up, "Maybe you should have tried to talk before you and your friends attacked our city!"
"I can explain everything if you just listen to me." Konan wanted to try and avoid any conflict that she could at this point, but the look in the mares eyes walking her way didn't show any sign of simple talking. Deep in her bright irises, Midnight showed a pool of anger rising to the surface. The sight of her home being assaulted was causing her emotions to be ignored, and now she was reacting on instinct. To get the one that did this damage to Canterlot.
Standing on her hind legs again, Midnight scraped her blades together like earlier, reactivating the lightning power in her horseshoes. The bright bolts of electricity danced along the length of the claws, illuminating the bright eyes of the wielder. "How about you sit still and let me shove these down your throat!"
Bursting off the ground, the female guard launched at Konan with her hooves forward. She slashed at the akatsuki member over and over, who was able to evade the arcing paths of lightning. The cream colored Pegasus ducked and dipped around the incoming attacks, an internal urge to use her jutsu to fight back, but she fought back the feeling to her own choice. If she could. she was going to do whatever it took to not harm any of the ponies here. That urge was becoming difficult however as her eyes caught movement to her right.
The unicorn Flash Shot appeared through his teleportation right next to the engaged females. His horn conjured a bright ball of magic and concentrated his magic to the tip before pulsing in quick two flash intervals. Midnight grinned when she saw the glowing sphere on her comrades head, quickly breaking off from her scuffle and flying up to the air. The bat pony put her right claws and ran it along her left foreleg and tapped her other claws three times.
Konan caught note of the sign the bat pony gave her partner, making her nerves on edge to what was happening. Turning back towards the unicorn, she quickly jumped up into the air as a large ball of magic shot her direction, detonating and blowing out a section of the building behind her. Flash Shot quickly teleported to the roof of the building above Konan to give himself the higher advantage. As fast as he could, he shot two small volleys of magic beams down at Konan, who had to quickly bank upward and away from the face of the structure. Seeing his chance, Flash created another large sphere of magic above his head, this one over three feet wide.
Konan's eyes went wide as ball rushed through the air faster than she could anticipate. Unable to dodge this one, she realized she would have to counter it with her own power. Throwing her hooves to her side, her arms began to separate into her paper jutsu. As the ball came closer, she lifted her arms up to-
Poof!
The magic sphere burst outward, revealing Cloud Dasher coming out from the center. "What!?" Konan gasped in shock.
The white Pegasus brought his spear above his head and thrust it downward at Konan. Putting her arms out and forming a wall of paper above herself, stopping the tip of the spear from reaching her. Quickly spinning around, Flash jabbed the blunt end of his spear under the patch of paper to catch her in the chest. Solidifying her hoof, Konan blocked the incoming staff and pushed it down. Hitting it down however forced the tip up and above, allowing him to whip it down and slash across her cheek.
Wincing in pain, Konan kicked out against her attacker, striking him in the chest and getting away from him. The golden plated Pegasus grunted and brought his spear to his side and thrust it forward, making his staff separate again and launch down at the retreating Konan. Ducking down, she yelped out as the spear caught the end of her hair bun and ripped the the tie out, causing her hair to fly out in a wild mess. Flapping her wings, she steadied herself to catch her breath, allowing her hair to fall down to her shoulders.
Looking forward, Konan watched as Cloud Dasher whipped his spear up and reformed his spear. Flying up behind him was Midnight Blossom, the bat pony flicking her wrists several times which caused her claws to jingle. Directly below them was the final member of their triple unit, his horn glowing and lighting up the street. The akatsuki member sighed as she brought a hoof up to wipe away blood that leaked from the cut on her cheek. 'This is becoming too difficult to handle like this...' She mumbled to herself, 'how am I supposed to get through this without trying to hurt them?'
The entire time since she met the Trifecta, Konan couldn't really consider it a fight. The entire time she was on the defensive because she didn't want to hurt them. It was still a confusion to her... Why was she so concerned with the lives of these ponies? They didn't mean anything to her, and yet she couldn't bring herself to take them down. She had taken down dozens of shinobi in her world with no concern for their lives, but now this squad was causing her heart to turn over on itself.
What was amazing to Konan was the unit she was fighting was... Almost identical to a squad in her world. Two males and a female, just like this one. The way they fought with each other, the coordinated attacks and techniques they used together in such a fluid way that they had to be close. The use of signals to plan out strikes like Flash Shot teleporting Cloud Dasher in the mix of his blasts to catch her off guard. It was something that truly amazed the akatsuki member... Reminding her back when she was younger, training alongside her two comrades. One with orange spiked hair, and the other with straight red hair, his rinnegan showing under his bangs. "Yahiko... Nagato." She whispered to herself.
Cloud Dasher stared at Konan in curiosity, noting the spaced out look on her face. Looking back to Midnight, he shifted his head back towards their target, signaling her to cut off an exit. Nodding, she flapped her wings and positioned herself to the backside of Konan. "Hey, how about you just quit this act of yours and just roll on over like a good dog you are." Midnight snapped.
"Enough..." Cloud Dasher ordered, shooting a stern glare her direction before looking back at Konan. "I will give you one last warning. Surrender and give yourself up to the royal guard, or we will bring you down."
Snapping out of her thoughts, Konan floated her gaze back up to the leader. "Do you not have any intention of allowing me to speak to explain my reasoning?"
"If you want to talk in any way, give yourself up and let us take you into custody." Cloud Dasher spun his spear in his grip. "If you don't, you won't be speaking pretty soon."
After a moment, Konan's gaze lowered to her usual calm yet blank look she had when arriving in this world. Her body began shifting in a mass of paper, increasing the size of her wings to over ten feet across. The shape changed as well, moving from normal Pegasus wings to what appeared to be... Angel wings. She looked around to the confused looks of the guards around her, her hooves rising up to head level preparing for battle. "I am sorry to say, but I don't think I can do that."
Midnight bared her teeth and raised her claws up. "I guess I won't have to bring the cuffs out then!"
As the bat pony took off through the air, Cloud Dasher noticed the small flick in Konan's wrist, releasing several pieces of paper into the air. His eyes went wide realizing exactly what she was doing. "Midnight, fall back! She's setting you up!" His warning went on deaf ears as she continued forward, her claws ready to strike.
Spinning her body around, Konan threw her hooves forward and released a large wave of paper at the now shocked bat pony. The jutsu rushed towards Midnight at unreal speed, almost making her stumble her flight pattern before she steadied herself. Slicing down, Midnight cut right through the wave, but was caught off guard as Konan charged her through the opening, a paper spear floating by her head. Not having time to dodge it, she could only gasp in shock as the weapon thrust forward at her head, until a sudden mass slamming into her side pushed her out of the way.
Wincing from the sudden force at her body, Midnight turned her head to see Cloud Dasher gripping her around the waist as he flew. "She was waiting for you to strike, Midnight. Don't be so eager to fight." He grunted as he let go of her.
Midnight sighed, but before she could respond Konan charged them again, her large wings pushing her faster than she moved before.
Preparing themselves, Cloud took his spear out and held onto the end of it while spinning it, the staff separated once again and whipped around in a long chain to hit the incoming Pegasus. Flipping forward, Konan's wings knocked the incoming spear tip away and shot another blast of paper at the two guards. Pulling his staff back, Cloud tucked his wings in and dropped below the incoming stream, but from beneath him another large patch of paper wrapped around his lower body and wrapped him like a mummy and restricting his flight.
As Cloud fell through the sky, Flash Shot quickly used his magic to catch his captain from hitting the ground. Settling him down, The unicorn knelt down by the confined Pegasus. "Captain, you alright?"
The white Pegasus thrashed several times to wiggle free, but the paper around him held tight. " I can't get free."
Using his magic, Flash attempted to rip off the paper, but to his shock it was resisting his power, as if it was infused with its own type of magic. "What is this stuff?"
Crashing down on the ground next to them, Midnight kicked off the ground to get out of the way of the incoming Konan. Gritting her teeth, she slashed forward again and created an arc of lightning from her claws and launched it at the akatsuki member, but it was useless as Konan hit her hoof into the ground and summoned a ball of paper to form around her and block the lightning from striking her. In a blast, the jutsu launched out and struck Midnight, striking her against a wall with enough force to knock her helmet off. As she yelped out in pain, her forelimbs were wrapped in paper and stuck to her sides against the brick.
Flash Shot watched in shock as his other comrade was incapacitated in a matter of seconds by this strange pony. His blood boiled in anger as he watched Konan casually use her hoof to brush out some of her hair out of her face. His horn glowed bright, illuminating the designs on his helmet. "You think you can get away with this? You already attacked the city and now have resisted arrest."
"I asked you to give me a chance to explain myself and you simply attacked." Konan mumbled as her jutsu wrapped her hair back up into a bun. "And about you claiming that I am a truly dangerous being, yet I haven't harmed any of you."
"Really? How about that spear or whatever the heck that was you made and tried to stab me!?" Midnight yelled out from her spot on the wall. "Get her Flash. Fry her up like a piece of toast!"
Flash was hesitant at trying to fight this strange pony, but as he saw her clasp her hooves together as a current of paper passed around herself, he panicked and shot out a blast of magic and struck her in the chest. To his shock Konan burst into mass of papers, the pieces of parchment floating to the ground. Before he could even contemplate, he felt a hoof to the back of his head, causing his breath to catch in his throat. "H-how?" He whispered, turning his head to see Konan staring right at him.
"If I really was a threat, why have I held back this entire time?" Konan whispered in a stern , yet almost blank tone. "I never tried to strike a single fatal blow to you or your friends." She turned her gaze to the two trapped ponies. "You fight well with each other, all of you look after one another in your squad."
Swallowing the lump in his throat, Flash wanted to try and catch her off guard, but there was a part of him thinking back to what he saw; This pony did have the skill to take them out at anytime, never actually fighting back until they were in a position to be rescued by each other. She was keeping them in positions to not hurt them, and he wanted to know for what reason.
Deactivating his magic, Flash took a deep breath and nodded. "Alright then, you want to talk? Let's talk then."
Seeing she was finally in the clear, Konan stepped back from him and followed that by waving her hoof. The paper that was holding down both Cloud Dasher and Midnight began breaking apart, freeing them from their restraints. The captain crawled up from his spot, perplexed with what was happening. "You are just going to let us go like that?" His eyes looked over to Midnight as she crouched her legs to charge again. "Midnight, stand down!" He ordered.
The bat pony shot a glare to her captain. "Sir, after everything she has done, you are going to-
"What she has done is let us live. If she wanted us dead she would have just killed us." Cloud retorted as he stood up and faced the akatsuki member. "Who are you?"
Nodding, the cream Pegasus sat down to seem as least threatening as possible. "My name is Konan."
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Levitating a large boulder off the ground, Celestia launched it towards Pain with all her strength. The stone rushed through the air directly at the pale unicorn, but he simply sat still as the giant rock came within touching distance before the boulder collided with his jutsu. The stone shattered from the force of the shockwave, the chunks of stone falling to the ground in a heaping pile of rubble. The pierced unicorn lifted his cold eyes up to look at the princess. "Your attempts to stop me are futile, princess. Just give me the beast Discord now."
"Never." Celestia grunted in anger. Her magic travelled behind to the broken wall, ripping off a section over forty feet wide and lifting it up. Ponies all around gasped at the sight of power, knowing that must have weighed over three hundred tons. Clenching her teeth, she through the giant mass forward at the akatsuki member. "Your power must have a limit to it. I will figure it out." Celestia whispered to herself .
While Celestia was hoping to succeed with her idea, Pain didn't even budge as the wall came closer towards him. "Hmph, foolish." He mumbled.
His shockwave rushed out from his body, striking the incoming stone like a freight train and shattering it to pieces. Celestia's jaw dropped slightly from the sight. "How... How can he be so powerful?"
When she took note that Pains ability had a small window of time until it could be used again, she couldn't set up an attack that could correctly tell the exact length of the duration. He was constantly changing up the types of attacks he was throwing at her, whether it be a shockwave or a boulder thrown at her. Having to remember about his black rods he threw at her was another problem to keep in mind as well. He could tell she was attempting to solve his power, so Pain was making sure that she could not analyze his technique properly.
Another problem she was facing was the repulse technique he had itself. No matter what she was using, magic, stone or perhaps an entire building, there didn't seem to be any limit to what was reflected by his power. Not only that, but the range of his technique seemed as if it did not have an end to how much it could be used. Most power still drains a ponies body, and must be stopped to allow the user to rest , and yet Pain continued without visible stress onto his body. "I can't fight much longer in the city like this. He will destroy the entire area if we keep this this up."
Stepping towards the princess, Pain's rinnegan pierced her soul and causing her to shudder. "You fight to protect your kind from a world of pain. It is foolish of you. Pain will always exist."
"I do not understand your reasonings..." Celestia said, "how can you justify your actions by saying we are suffering? Our home was at peace until you came here."
"No world is at peace until it knows the true meaning of pain. Your world is no exception to this. Love breeds jealousy, jealousy breeds-
"None of this is relevant to our home!" Celestia snapped, "We do not kill for jealousy, or for whatever ideas of hatred you think we possess. It is because we do not have that."
Pain tilted his head in annoyance to her rambling, reminding him of that yellow haired boy from the Hidden Leaf. The jinjuriki he had captured which happened to be another student of his fallen master. Like him, this child continued to ramble about finding peace through kindness, something that had proven time and time again was impossible in the shinobi world. 'Naruto Uzimaki.' He mumbled to himself.
"Whatever you think you are trying to prove through this attack of yours, it is completely useless. I do not know of the world you came from, but however violent or cruel it was, I assure you this place is nothing like it. Just stop this and-
"Shut up."
Celestia gasped as the ground in front of Pain ripped up from the ground and launched at her. Flapping her wings, she quickly flew up above the incoming debris moments before it struck the remaining wall behind her. Panting from panic, she looked back towards Pain as he watched her every move. "So you choose to fight instead of negotiate." She frowned at his display of action. "You truly are not one for peace."
"Words are useless when it comes to peace." Pain blankly said, "No matter what one says for peace, they use it for their advantage. I was betrayed into joining with another, one who claimed his goal was to bring balance to our world. His words were all lies however , setting us up to remove us from his path. He forced me to kill my best friend or the death of my other friend would come."
Celestia sat quiet while hovering in the air, listening to his past. While she was hesitant to believe him, she did however sense he was telling the truth. She didn't know why , but she could just sense it. "You were put into a situation of choice. One life or the other."
"In the end, the life of my friend was taken from me, and I had to save my other after we were betrayed once again. Once I experienced the true meaning of Pain, I discovered the way to peace." Slipping from his sleeve was another black rod clutched in his hoof. "No matter what you believe, peace is only obtained through pain."
Glaring, Celestia conjured her sword once again. "Whatever ideals you think are for peace, they will not be used in my home!"
Charging through the air, the princess swung were sword at Pain with all her strength. The akatsuki member raised his hoof up and countered with his own weapon, clashing against hers with a bright flash. The two struck at each other several times before Celestia shot a blast of magic forward, which once again was repelled by his jutsu. Kicking off the ground, he rushed at Celestia with his weapon thrusting at her chest. Quickly dipping to the side, the princess swung her wing forward to strike him off guard, but he was already prepared with a second rod in his other hoof. Shocked, she tried to focus her magic to make a shield, but was already too late.
The steel pierced the top of her swinging wing, easily cutting through her flesh. Screaming out, she tried to jump back, but Pain had quickly put his hoof to her chest, followed by another repulse push at point blank range. Celestia was catapulted through the air and slammed into the crushed wall behind, her body having enough force to break through the stone. Before she could even fall to the ground, a thrown rod pierced through her right wing and pinning her to the wall.
"Princess!" Rarity and the others screamed out in fear.
Celestia gasped for air as she sat against the stone. Blood dripped from her mouth from her teeth tearing the inside of her lips. Her breathing caused her pain, several broken ribs from the impact of his attack so close to her. Not to mention the weapon that was sticking her to the stone that was causing agonizing pain to her wing. She tried to move up, but the pressure to her wing made her yell out. She looked up in fright to Pain as he made his way towards her.
"You had no chance against me, Princess. Now, you will experience the true meaning of Pain." Before he came any closer though, a purple blast of magic shot by his face, almost catching him if it weren't for a quick dodge backwards. He turned to see something he did not expect. "So , you wish to fight as well."
Confused , Celestia forced herself up to see who was the one that helped her, but when she did, she wished they hadn't. "No..."
Her horn glowing bright, Twilight was crouched down, her eyes burning with anger towards Pain. "You will not hurt the princess anymore!"
...I'm happy when ponies are getting their asses handed to them...
Twilight vs Pain?...That's not a fight, that's humiliation (guess for who...it's obvious).
And yet I still can't wait for the next installment...(so long as no bullshit is pulled...you've kept this whole thing grounded for the most part, which I love, I'm hoping it stays that way)
Keep it up man, this is great stuff.
then SHINRA TENSEI.......canterlot is gone
Well Pain it's time for you to teach Twilight about pain....
Twilight vs Pain? Is this SERIOUSLY a fight?
Wait Naruto lost in this universe? Well they are screwed if pein was stronger than naruto.
So long as the ponies don't pull some bullcrap dues ex machina the Akatsuki are definitely going to win. I have to say, we don't have enough stories like this, so it's refreshing when I do read one.
I just finished Naruto: Book 33 and I looked up and this popped up I'm like, "WTH?!"
Paaaain~, without love
Paaaain~, can't get enough
Paaaain~, I like it rough, cuz I'd rather feel pain than nothing at aaaall~...
But seriously, Twilight's screwed
thx you for not going super man on the ponies becasue than the sotry will suck ass, but i want the to win
Im guessing Pain puts twilight into a coma because she isnt worth killing. Also cant wait to see luna get wrecked!!!
Okay. Before I begin reading this fic, I just want to express how sad it is seeing a bunch of whining babies filling up this guys comments section with your pointless bickering and complaing, and when I say, "your," those who see this know whom I'm talking about.
If you don't like how something another person, who has his own visions on how to write his own story, wrote, get your shit and take your inadequate behaviors somewhere else. Maybe a place where you can actually be productive or where your arguments are actually wanted.
Grow the fuck up a bit, get that self-employed "respect" for the Naruto fandom out of your asses and quit trying to fit it in with your MLP:FIM obsessions as well.
Facts:
Realisticly, the Akatsuki have everypony beat. Get over it, hardcore mlp fans.
The Rinnegan can't do shit to the celestial bodies unless someone like Madara uses it(the guy can bring down a meteor for Christ's sake).
Luna, since she has both the power and experience in visual/illusion like abilities, she could stalemate with Itachi.
Hidan and Kakuzu are immortal, not invicible or their asses wouldn't have been killed(canon).
Sasori, Dediera, and Zetzu are the weakest of the Akatsuki. Each relies on either tools or deception to win(Sasori is literally a tool, himself).
The only major threat is Obito(can travel through dimensions and space and took Naruto to be beaten or Konan(she almost beat him)) and Pain(the guy uses planetary devastation and anything caught in its gravitational pull is getting sucked in and has little chance of escaping).
Itachi can't be using Amaterasu unless he wants to go blind, rendering himself useless. Strategically, he's better off using the Sasoono, which, may I remind, can eternally seal whatever gets caught on its sword in a realm of a never-ending genjutsu.
Now that's all out of the way, Chaos, I'm sorry you had to deal with this surprising amount of overzelous drama. Its time I gave this a read.
Let's see the third Rinnegan jutsu, let's see how the elements fare when they're faced with a f*cken planet! Great chapter, keep goin and stay golden^^
3250352 thank you. But uhh... You should read the fic before comments, or you may get spoilers
3249686>>3249690>>3249710>>3249734>>3249756>>3249976>>3250028>>3250096>>3250100>>3250190>>3250420 thank you all for enjoying this chapter. Next one, which is already being written due to my own excitement, I hope it leaves you speechless,
And while normally I like to answer comments individually, I'm sick so, meh. Nope
3249686 Thank you! The damn ponies can't beat everything! I swear, I actually read a story where Celestia beats VEGITO for hell's sake! And, great chapter Chaos!
3250450
Oh, don't worry about it. I usually like to see what people think of a fic before I read it. To me, its not all about what's ahead, but getting there myself. Besides, I'm already three chapters in and I'm liking what I'm reading so far. You're in character with everyone thus far and Hidan and Diedera are best Akatsuki pony.
3250549
I've read the same fic once. It was horrible. The guy supposedly wrote it to write off Celestia with a god-mode. Like she actually has a god-mode. No one in the show has been labeled as a god or posses god-like powers(look it up bronies. Its headcanon bullshit and you know it).
Just because you can move a celestial body and have unnatural longevity, it doesn't make you either immortal or a god. Powerful? Most definitely. Invincible or capable of defeating everyone thrown at you? That's a shitty Superman plot device and DC rewrote him because of it.
Ah shoot, my favourite main six gal' is in trouble. Wellhere's to you, dear. Pain is about to bring the house down! OH YEAHHHHH
Hope you feel well dude.
Well, I want twilight to get her wings ripped off so bad now, I'm rooting for the akatsuki here, and the trifecta apart from one just seems like a slimy bunch of average fighters with fancy looking but not very effective techniques.
3250549 ARE YOU FUCKING SERIOUS? CELESTIA BEATING VEGITO?! IS THAT PERSON FUCKING DENSE?
3250589 YOU MEAN IT ACTUALLY EXISTS? CELESTIA IS NOT GOD POWERFULL, HELL! SHE'S NOT EVEN IMMORTAL! SHE'S JUST AN ALICORN! IMMORTAL TO TIME! NOT GETTING HER FUCKING HEAD SMASHED IN!
3250352 You know what? I love you. Seriously, our messiah has arrived, Joking, but in all honestly, wow, you are a friggin godsend, I agree with you completely, and I may be personally biased in this fight, but the akatsuki have the ponies hanging already, and Obito (Tobi) is my favorite character c: But, seriously? Celestia beating VEGITO? FUCKING VEGITO!? I guarantee you that person had no idea what the hell they were even writing. God, so hard to find a DBZ fan these days that actually knows how powerful someone is.
3250686 Yeah, it's true...
3250589 And thank you, that's exactly how I see Celestia.
Also, it doesn't exist anymore, and Chaos can vouch for me, but I remember getting into a debate on this very story about Celestia not being a god, using information from the show to support my statements.
3250703 yeah, let's not bring that back up again.
3250737 But I wanna!
3250549 Vegito.... VEGITO?! I hope the internet gave that guy a swift knee in the nuts...
3250589What was the fic? And how bad/good is it? Like, I'm reading your comments about Vegito getting beaten by Celestia. That's a turn off, but not a deal breaker. Is the rest of the story any good? If so, what's the title?
Why does everyone want the ponies to get maimed? Sweet Cadance, I know Akatsuki is stronger and that the ponies don't have a chance in HFIL at the moment, but cut em some slack! They're trying...
3250753
I never said that. It was the other dood.
Twilight vs Pain? ouch! Twilight is going to get smeared across the floor
YES!!! MORE!!
Kill them all pain!!!
fuck them sideways
"Alright chums, let's do this! TWILIIIIIIIIIIGHT...SPAARKLLLE!!!"
"...Oh God, she just ran in..."
Some very troubled individuals in these comments. Children, the ponies are exactly as powerful as the writer wants them to be, nothing more, nothing less. This is fanfiction, not canon stories, after all
The rampant fanboying is starting to become grating.
3251023
Its called Vegito in Equestria or something close.
Here's the layout:
Vegito ends up in Equestria.
Freinds up with the Mane 6 off the bat.
Gets brought to Celestia, who just so happens to know what a Sayain is.
Fights Vegito for some unexplained reason.
Vegito goes SS
Celestia goes golden armor god-mode and kicks Vegitos ass easily.
Analysis: No plot whatsoever with no imagineable aim.
3250755
Do it. I can be your back-up.
Yes.
3252586So Celestia knew what a Saiyan was, and the Mane 6 had no troubles befriending him right off the bat... nope, that's a deal breaker.
Hmm, kind of hard to think that some mere pony guard could even TOUCH Konan....
Other than that, good job on making sure the RIGHT person won the fight against Celestia. Hopefully, she'll at least be paralyzed in that wing for the rest of her evil, corrupt life! >:)
Luna and Cadence are next! (Hopefully....)
For your excellent work, take one of these:
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3252986
Pretty much.
Chaos, I finally caught up and I'm still witholding my original statement. I'm definitely enjoying this story of yours. People still need to back off a bit with the Naruto fandom pride that they're mixing in with this story of yours. Your story. Your rules. Your plot. And your words. Everything else, that we, as the viewers say, is irrelevent. This goes for everyone who's being critical and judgemental about what you consider being done "RIGHT" or wrong. I'm both a Naruto and MLP: FIM fan, and I at least know when to not speculate one fandom as being flawed in some way to where it doesn't work with another.
Great work overall. A few grammatical errors and missing letters, but still great.
3251379 It was late. I was tired, but you see my point, I wasn't meaning anything bad.
3251134 Never said I wanted to maim them, I just want them to lose a bit.
3253891 thanks for your enjoyment. I've done my best to create a story where they blend well. And as a tip, the next four or so chapters will truly demonstrate power I have been holding back. Haha
Just curious, what has been your favorite chapter or fight so far?
3254882
You probably didn't ask me but..i'll answer it anyway. *shrug*
Deidara vs The Wonderbolts!
3254882
Deidara vs The Wonderbolts was done pretty good.
Kakuzu vs Luna was short, yet expected.
Itachi vs Luna is going pretty smoothly.
I guess I'm enjoying the Itachi fight more than the others so far.
I guess I don't have a favorite chapter yet. All the characters are well, in chracter, and the action scenes are detailed enough to where I can visualize it. Its all good to me. Keep doing what you're doing.
Pain vs. Twilight
....
Yeah, we got another Hinata vs. Pain here now...
3250096 Hell bucking yes!!!! Three Days Grace FTW!!!!!
3250450 It heartens me to see that Konan might actually join the ponies side. I want the ponies to actually have a chance, not be mercilessly slaughtered! But other then that...
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Twilight vs Pain, you might aswell throw Sakura in there, so they can last at least 5 more seconds against him.
good bye twilight, you were an idiot
3209498 Excuse me, but I'd like to take a moment to point out the utter bullshit that is your comment.
One, his story has a far superior rating when compared to yours, so clearly, the so-called "cop-out bullshit" didn't matter to most of the readers.
Two, never advertise your own story on someone else's. That is asshattery at it the highest level.