Princess Celestia has spent 1000 years waiting for Luna's return. During the years Celestia has changed. She became depressed and sank into guilt over what she had done to her younger sister. Now that she is back she will do her best to fix things....except....Luna is different. Sure her coat is a bit different and she looks a bit younger than she was before but it's the way she acts and reacts that's so...unsettling for the older Princess. It's almost like she's a new mare.
Meanwhile, Luna is left to explore a new world while doing her best to avoid her sister and her overbearing nature, while also trying to find happiness again after someone dear was taken from her.
And then there is Twilight Sparkle, she got unintentionally dragged into the whole mess and then dragged herself even further by accident. Now she has to deal with a sad overprotective desperate version of her mentor AND a living mystery of an Alicorn who might be the definition of opportunistic and selfish....for the most part.
Why isn’t there a Mane Six tag?
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Probably not the main characters, or atleast not as much as the 4 current character tags. However is this an alternate universe? Or is this something to fill in the blanks for season 1 episode 1 and 2 between Celestia and Luna?
The mane 6 are not the main characters yes. As for this being an alternate universe? Also a yes. The past between Celestia and Luna is different and so shall be the future.
So that's why there isn't a main 6 tag, now it all adds up. Hmmm.
I think the Chrysalis tag is also new, don't remember that being there.
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It is.
Your story's idea is pretty good, I just think that it could use a little more editing. you've got some grammatical errors, mostly Capitalization and punctuation. You should read Ezn's writing guide.
Handling dangerous, aggressive creatures that feel wounded or vulnerable requires a sensitive approach.
It is better to treat them like a wounded bear. You need to make sure that they never feel cornered or trapped. Keep your distance and make sure they don't feel like you're forcing her to do anything. Make sure they have a dark, safe place to retreat to, with plenty of fruit and berries.
It seems to me that Twilight entering the cave so boldly could easily provoke a battle.
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Not quite battle per say, but I can say that she will not regret her action
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Sorry, but I didn’t quite understand what you said. Did they mean that “she will regret her action” or “she will not regret her action”?
that is, if the second option, then it turns out that “running thoughtlessly forward into the gap and not thinking about the consequences is a good principle of action”?
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The final result will be good, but the process to get the result will have a close encounter with death. Twilight is by all means, considered an enemy by Luna at the moment.
bro we need another chapter
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I will provide one soon.
we're still waiting 😰😰
An interesting development, but it seems to me that Luna believed Twilight too quickly. At least if I were Luna, I wouldn’t consider the apology sincere and would give a lecture about how a destroyed stone doesn’t care about apologies and won’t recover from the words “I’m sorry.”
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Luna does not accept the apology. Not yet at least. She's an opportunistic pony and Twilight is distraught enough to give up on pleading or defending her life. Luna would consider herself a fool if she didn't use that.
Seek the signs of Luna's lack of trust in the chapter.
Well this is ridiculous, how was Twilight supposed to know!? "Oh yeah, I awaken the elements and so I totally meant to kill Nightmare Moon on purpose."
I already hate this version of Luna.
Also you made the acting of Twilight spot on, the way she just immediately accepts to becoming her loyal servant just to make up for a mistake that she didn't even mean to cause is something she would probably end up doing in the show as well if the events that lead up to this situation happened.
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Thank you! Twilight was the character I was worried about not getting right the most so this means a lot to me!
As for Luna, you'll either love or hate her across this story. She is troubled yes, but she'll do inexcusable things. But for this instance, you have to remember that she is talking with one of the killers of her closest companion (if not even more) less than 3 hours after the murder.
I can only hear the song
funny first meeting. It’s interesting that Luna, in addition to the name Cadence, noted that the cutie mark corresponds to the crystal heart, provided that a lot of time still has to pass before the appearance of the Crystal Empire?
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We're still a good way before the crystal empire. Technically this is still within the first 2 episodes considering Luna wasn't revealed to the public yet.
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Of course, we are far from the Crystal Empire, but Luna and Celestia were directly there when she disappeared. I think that the fact that someone has the main artifact of a country that technically has not existed for more than 1000 years drawn on their side should raise questions.
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We shall see
I don't think Celestia knew this, is she not going to point this out?
Also Luna is really rude to Twilight in this chapter.
This is practically Celestia's fault as well, if Celestia just told the entire story of Nightmare Moon to Twilight and about the elements of harmony and who represents the elements of harmony, this could have been avoided, Twilight may have "killed" Nightmare Moon but Celestia is practically the mastermind behind it.
And it's also Luna's fault that Nightmare Moon is gone, maybe don't make a dramatic and scary entrance to the public claiming your going to cause eternal night? You sicko.
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All the issues (except Luna being rude) can be summarized to: Things didn't go according to the plan.