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How old is he to work 8 hours? One one hand it is not like I didn't do it myself for money when I shouldn't. On the other, with all these time skips it is hard to tell and I recall him taking apprenticeship, not a full time job.
I see Evergreen is grinding even before he goes to sleep, does he ever tire? Wink, wink dear author, have him do something silly for once.
problem
1. previously
2. Discord and Sombra must use different type of magic.
I saw the ( cock ) in the sorting room
I think u mean ( Clock )
A spell check program doesn't make sure you are using the right word so many spelling/grammar errors in the story.
Honestly? This magic system is far too basic for you to be wasting any time explaining
tries*
plates*
effect*
affect is the verb and effect is the noun
I find it weird about the whole magic affinity thing, since "Elements" are really just taking Aristotle at face value. If you consider that heat is really just excited atoms, water is just atoms same with ground and air you could really have something like a Uranium element affinity, or lead element affinity. We already have the cutie marks thing, why needlessly add uncannon lore that doesn't really add much to the narrative? The gem thing was interesting, but you could have given him a different reason for wanting such things. It does sound like a interesting idea do dedicate mana to a certain mathematical equation but not utilizing it and instead putting it into a storable form if you want to easily extract it and utilize a spell. For example, store magic into a ( 3*x)^x format, where x is just how much he wants to blown something up. So instead of working on the whole thing he just changes the variable, if the magic system works how I think it does that's much easier and in accordance with the original cannon, especially since we can see people using magics they shouldn't be capable of by using artifacts, but they are able to control the artifact's output, kind as if the artifact already had a equation and magical stores and the wilder just changes simple variables, I find that much more believable than the whole elemental affinity thing.
Hm. Interesting. And I do appreciate some explanation of what magic mechanics you're operating in your story.
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Diff univer diff laws.
Or just poor writing
Interesting story so far, I like it
YEEEESSSS
Even so, shade can't have the pleasure of someone discovering his journal, that would Raise suspicions
il make my Guess, his affinity will be
Option 1: earth
option 2: water
option 3: wind
I was a bit pushed away from the first few, rough chapters admittedly, although, perhaps that was influenced by outside factors such as stress and little available time, but I have to say, the story is growing on me. Yes, it has its moments where it can be a bit hard or awkward, but I believe I have reached the point where this piece of fiction has become a light, easy-to-digest, comfort story. All in all, it's too early to say anything beyond the chapter-to-chapter basis, but I have a feeling I'll have a neat time reading this story.
Thank you for the entertainment, Dear Author.