An unscrupulous stallion is the only one in Equestria who knows how to get Celestia back -- the whole world hinges on him. And now his perverse plan for impregnating every mare he sees is unstoppable! Or is it?
11700098 the white room is the most potent form of passive torture, lock a MF in a room where they can't sleep, get comfy, or interact with anything to stimulate the mind, they are broken in weeks, maybe days
11700098 Its a lovely little form of psych enhanced interrogation. You see, when applying torture in this method, that is to garner intel, on must think beyond simple sadism. Now you could simply start snapping limbs or rip the knowledge out with magic, but there are work around for that or the subjects tolerance and willpower could simply overwhelm.
So there are two method available for the sake of time. The first would be the Golden Thread, a Saddle Arabian method where one threads a spool of wire into the pain centers of the spinal and gives them jolts. The problem with that is both matters of sadism and control as well as physical well being of the subject, barring feeling like his entire body is getting fucked by the barb wired wrapped willy of the concept of Agony itself. Mind break, aneurism, his heart exploding like a meat hand grenade, and you more then likely still end up with bupkis.
Thus the White Room. Stick that fucker in a white room. No colors, sound, utter and complete sensory deprivation with the occassional gruel suppliment to give them the false inkling of salvation now and again. Place a few cleaning and time dilation spells on the room, wait five minutes, boom. Babydick von Forceafuck is singing Tia's location like a fucking bird just to see something blue, and all without harming a single hair on his rapist hide.
11700115 Eh... its not my cup of tea myself. I merely marvel at the concept is all and having a bit of fun contemplating other more... direct means by which Luna could learn what she wanted
11700113 Oh, that's what you were talking about? I thought you were referring to some kind of sex thing I hadn't heard of. Yeah ... I've heard of that. Seems like ponies with magic could come up with something faster than that if they were willing to be cruel about it.
11700115 To be clear, there is no torture -- white room or otherwise -- in this story. There is rape with crying and pleading, though, so I don't blame you at all if you choose not to read this one.
I think this is an interesting story, Dicey Morel is certainly a petty disgusting pony who feels he had been cheated in life and saw his chance for cosmic justice for himself, with grabbing the crown by the balls, and took it for his perceived injustice. I do find it interesting despite having the power he still humiliate himself in his attempt to mount Luna. I am looking forward to see the rest of the story, and see how it turns out.
Are celestia and luna's personalities switched? Luna's normally the rash one while celestia is more conserved due to the 1000+ years ruling bit.
The plot feels forced (yeah I get that it's not really the main part of the story but still), magic (in equestria anyway) unlike a genie tends to work on intent more than interpretation but we've got full on evil genie interpretation and a weird one at that.
"that for the first time in thousands of years, I will be the cause of new foals being birthed into Equestria!”
What does it do? Make her fertile like she wanted?, transform her into a male and drive her to impregnate several mares?, trigger a mass orgy?, make her instantly pregnant and birth several foals?
Nope! it transforms her into an inanimate orb and goes and hides out in a psychopaths house to give him leverage to impregnate whoever he likes fulfilling her desire to be the cause of new foals when realistically this shouldn't even be a possible outcome as she's a friggin demigoddess.
Ponies would be getting pregnant because of her all the time making this an invalid way to fulfill this request as it wouldn't be the first time in thousands of years since it's an ongoing thing.
11700293 Thank you! ^.^ Though I doubt it's actual bots doing the downvoting. A lot of people will downvote any clop they see, and others will downvote any non-con they see. I knew going into it that this one would be a bit of a downvote magnet, so I'm not too concerned about it.
11700208 I tried to make it a bit nuanced -- a bit more depth to it. ^.^ Looks like it's working.
11700321 Pay no attention to the plot device behind the curtain! (But yeah ... I do have to admit, the part in the beginning is kind of made with the conclusion first and then trying to get to that conclusion, rather than just setting things up and seeing what the characters do with it. Thankfully, though, that's only a small part of the story, just what kicks the story off.)
Stomping one hoof down scornfully, Princess Luna scoffed. “We will not be held hostage to the demands of a treacherous, lecherous stallion!” She marched down toward him, her eyes glowing white. “FOOL! Did you think you could hold an entire nation hostage? Did you think us so weak? Nay! You will sooner find yourself caged in Tartarus! Chained in the lowest dungeons! Your petty secrets shall be flayed from your mind with arcane spells you have not the wit to comprehend! We should feed you to the beasts of Tartarus merely for having the temerity to speak such insults to crown and to country!”
It is the first thing that anyone would do or at least some deception in the world of dreams since she is Luna she could easily do it
No! Screw it. He wasn't going to back down after coming this far! He'd call their bluff and hope against hope that they really were bluffing. He shook his head. “You won't. You wouldn't do that even to the worst villains Equestria has ever faced!”
Of course she could! She herself stated that living for more than a thousand years makes you do unpleasant things, torture may not seem so strange to her
Although I like that these stories have these errors and loopholes in the plot, they reflect that this type of reading is only for fun and That's why they don't have to make much sense since they're basically a joke.
Hmm given the kind of stories I write (Gender bender) one of my first thoughts of course is if Dicey can command Twilight to turn her brother into her sister. I can certainly see Dicey wanting to humiliate Shining like that, but I have a feeling this isn't that kind of story.
That aside, this is certainly an interesting premise for a clopfic. Not the biggest fan of 'dark fics' so that bit has me wary, but I'll be keeping an eye on this for the meantime.
11700346 Oh, I get the nuance you are trying to convey, and I could go on a long diatribe of all of it, but the long and short of is that is that he get the chance to vent his personal and sexual frustrations with himself and the rest of the world by using his leverage to hold the crown hostage to satiate is petty base urges on to the nation, instead of just doing the good thing for everyone. I find the way you describe his processes very well done in depicting his as a frustrated petty loser who gets the chance to perform his heart's desires not caring what everyone think of him, I really enjoy how you go about it.
11700552 But ... but ... why are the quotes from the story in Spanish?
11700566 Heh, yeah. Not that kind of story. Though that could be a fun direction to take things. (Or, if Dicey was bisexual, he could just do that without the gender transformation.) But yeah... Anyway, Chapter 2 is out now, and it's pretty much as dark as this story gets. So if you can handle Chapter 2, you should be good.
Seems like a well-written story, with an unexpectedly (and unsettlingly) hot scene with the mushroom guy and Luna. Let's see if I have to bail during the next chapter...
It's an interesting premise, if obviously very dark. But Morel is written well enough that it is believable someone could think like that. The sex scene with Luna was also surprisingly hot.
I couldn't help but think of another way the Wish spell could have gone about the same thing. Basically running the same way but instead of asking for what he did, spilling his insecurities out and his desire to be loved. So after handing over the orb the princesses set him up with a matchmaker who guides him through a series of dates where he learns how to respect other ponies and himself, grow as a person and eventually actually find love (bonus cliché points if it's the matchmaker), which eventually leads to said foals.
That being said I'm interested how the rest of this is going to play out. If I can stomach it.
Ok first rule of casting a wish, YOU WRITE IT DOWN. Then you read it fifty times trying to find ALL the possible ways that it could go wrong. Then you get an ARMY of lawyers to cross check it. THEN you redo all the above ten times. After that you start reciting it while drunk, with a potato in your mouth, while looking at comedy. That until you can recite it PERFECTLY without error EVERY time. So... here we have a conundrum... What if some one is firmly set on NOT conceding and would go for suicide before getting raped? He would be the cause of the death and so he would need to relent. Third thing... Luna... LOOK IN HIS DREAMS. Organize search parties for his house. That said... I really hope he WILL get his just dessert...
What if some one is firmly set on NOT conceding and would go for suicide before getting raped? He would be the cause of the death and so he would need to relent.
Well, I'm glad I didn't take the story that dark.
Third thing... Luna... LOOK IN HIS DREAMS. Organize search parties for his house. That said... I really hope he WILL get his just dessert...
Are you familar with the concept of the White Room?
Poof this will be technically celestia fault
11700072
that bad huh? he did emphasize the 'Dark' tag in the description. if there's crying and pleading it definitely ain't for me
11700072
I don't think so...
11700095
Well, you're not wrong...
But there's plenty of blame to go around.
11700097
lol, I'm sure there will be crying in these comments at some point!
11700095
There's a nonzero chance that the stallion is Celestia. Or at least the thing you meant, where she set this whole thing up on purpose.
11700098
the white room is the most potent form of passive torture, lock a MF in a room where they can't sleep, get comfy, or interact with anything to stimulate the mind, they are broken in weeks, maybe days
11700097
11700098
Its a lovely little form of psych enhanced interrogation. You see, when applying torture in this method, that is to garner intel, on must think beyond simple sadism. Now you could simply start snapping limbs or rip the knowledge out with magic, but there are work around for that or the subjects tolerance and willpower could simply overwhelm.
So there are two method available for the sake of time. The first would be the Golden Thread, a Saddle Arabian method where one threads a spool of wire into the pain centers of the spinal and gives them jolts. The problem with that is both matters of sadism and control as well as physical well being of the subject, barring feeling like his entire body is getting fucked by the barb wired wrapped willy of the concept of Agony itself. Mind break, aneurism, his heart exploding like a meat hand grenade, and you more then likely still end up with bupkis.
Thus the White Room. Stick that fucker in a white room. No colors, sound, utter and complete sensory deprivation with the occassional gruel suppliment to give them the false inkling of salvation now and again. Place a few cleaning and time dilation spells on the room, wait five minutes, boom. Babydick von Forceafuck is singing Tia's location like a fucking bird just to see something blue, and all without harming a single hair on his rapist hide.
Then you can kill him
11700113
I think my explanation was more concise,
but cheers for making me even more averse to reading the story
11700115
Eh... its not my cup of tea myself. I merely marvel at the concept is all and having a bit of fun contemplating other more... direct means by which Luna could learn what she wanted
11700107
More of the phrasing of the wish she wish to be that cause a new foals. If it wasn't for the wish morale would be repairing his cottage
11700113
Oh, that's what you were talking about? I thought you were referring to some kind of sex thing I hadn't heard of.
Yeah ... I've heard of that. Seems like ponies with magic could come up with something faster than that if they were willing to be cruel about it.
11700115
To be clear, there is no torture -- white room or otherwise -- in this story.
There is rape with crying and pleading, though, so I don't blame you at all if you choose not to read this one.
11700107
Well, I wouldn't go that far...
11700125
Huh... Is it already that obvious? I'd meant for it to be a bit more subtle than that.
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11700113
Or as one character used as a threat in Doctor Who:
I think this is an interesting story, Dicey Morel is certainly a petty disgusting pony who feels he had been cheated in life and saw his chance for cosmic justice for himself, with grabbing the crown by the balls, and took it for his perceived injustice. I do find it interesting despite having the power he still humiliate himself in his attempt to mount Luna. I am looking forward to see the rest of the story, and see how it turns out.
After all this time following you on Fimfiction and Inkbunny, why have i not subbed to you xD
I might just go fix that <3 (Edit) You've got that sub
(Edit) Also yeah there are bots that just auto thumb down comments and stories. Just like this xD
Are celestia and luna's personalities switched? Luna's normally the rash one while celestia is more conserved due to the 1000+ years ruling bit.
The plot feels forced (yeah I get that it's not really the main part of the story but still), magic (in equestria anyway) unlike a genie tends to work on intent more than interpretation but we've got full on evil genie interpretation and a weird one at that.
"that for the first time in thousands of years, I will be the cause of new foals being birthed into Equestria!”
What does it do?
Make her fertile like she wanted?, transform her into a male and drive her to impregnate several mares?, trigger a mass orgy?, make her instantly pregnant and birth several foals?
Nope! it transforms her into an inanimate orb and goes and hides out in a psychopaths house to give him leverage to impregnate whoever he likes fulfilling her desire to be the cause of new foals when realistically this shouldn't even be a possible outcome as she's a friggin demigoddess.
Ponies would be getting pregnant because of her all the time making this an invalid way to fulfill this request as it wouldn't be the first time in thousands of years since it's an ongoing thing.
11700293
Thank you! ^.^
Though I doubt it's actual bots doing the downvoting. A lot of people will downvote any clop they see, and others will downvote any non-con they see. I knew going into it that this one would be a bit of a downvote magnet, so I'm not too concerned about it.
11700208
I tried to make it a bit nuanced -- a bit more depth to it. ^.^ Looks like it's working.
11700321
Pay no attention to the plot device behind the curtain!
(But yeah ... I do have to admit, the part in the beginning is kind of made with the conclusion first and then trying to get to that conclusion, rather than just setting things up and seeing what the characters do with it. Thankfully, though, that's only a small part of the story, just what kicks the story off.)
It is the first thing that anyone would do or at least some deception in the world of dreams since she is Luna she could easily do it
Of course she could! She herself stated that living for more than a thousand years makes you do unpleasant things, torture may not seem so strange to her
Although I like that these stories have these errors and loopholes in the plot, they reflect that this type of reading is only for fun and That's why they don't have to make much sense since they're basically a joke.
Hmm given the kind of stories I write (Gender bender) one of my first thoughts of course is if Dicey can command Twilight to turn her brother into her sister. I can certainly see Dicey wanting to humiliate Shining like that, but I have a feeling this isn't that kind of story.
That aside, this is certainly an interesting premise for a clopfic. Not the biggest fan of 'dark fics' so that bit has me wary, but I'll be keeping an eye on this for the meantime.
11700346
Oh, I get the nuance you are trying to convey, and I could go on a long diatribe of all of it, but the long and short of is that is that he get the chance to vent his personal and sexual frustrations with himself and the rest of the world by using his leverage to hold the crown hostage to satiate is petty base urges on to the nation, instead of just doing the good thing for everyone. I find the way you describe his processes very well done in depicting his as a frustrated petty loser who gets the chance to perform his heart's desires not caring what everyone think of him, I really enjoy how you go about it.
11700552
But ... but ... why are the quotes from the story in Spanish?
11700566
Heh, yeah. Not that kind of story. Though that could be a fun direction to take things.
(Or, if Dicey was bisexual, he could just do that without the gender transformation.)
But yeah... Anyway, Chapter 2 is out now, and it's pretty much as dark as this story gets. So if you can handle Chapter 2, you should be good.
Seems like a well-written story, with an unexpectedly (and unsettlingly) hot scene with the mushroom guy and Luna. Let's see if I have to bail during the next chapter...
11701537
You might ... Chapter 2 is probably the darkest.
It's an interesting premise, if obviously very dark. But Morel is written well enough that it is believable someone could think like that. The sex scene with Luna was also surprisingly hot.
I couldn't help but think of another way the Wish spell could have gone about the same thing. Basically running the same way but instead of asking for what he did, spilling his insecurities out and his desire to be loved.
So after handing over the orb the princesses set him up with a matchmaker who guides him through a series of dates where he learns how to respect other ponies and himself, grow as a person and eventually actually find love (bonus cliché points if it's the matchmaker), which eventually leads to said foals.
That being said I'm interested how the rest of this is going to play out. If I can stomach it.
11711799
lol, yeah ... that alternate version would be if the Wish spell was benevolent and also wanted to make Dicey a better pony.
Ok first rule of casting a wish, YOU WRITE IT DOWN. Then you read it fifty times trying to find ALL the possible ways that it could go wrong. Then you get an ARMY of lawyers to cross check it. THEN you redo all the above ten times. After that you start reciting it while drunk, with a potato in your mouth, while looking at comedy. That until you can recite it PERFECTLY without error EVERY time.
So... here we have a conundrum... What if some one is firmly set on NOT conceding and would go for suicide before getting raped? He would be the cause of the death and so he would need to relent.
Third thing... Luna... LOOK IN HIS DREAMS. Organize search parties for his house.
That said... I really hope he WILL get his just dessert...
11827597
Well, I'm glad I didn't take the story that dark.
Oh, we'll get there.