An old chest lies locked away deep within the Castle of the Royal Sisters. Dusty and forgotten, neglected and abused... They should have left it that way.
Apologies, good sir, but your narrative is simply too exciting to warrant any lesser response. I don't think you realize just how utterly astounding this story is so far, so let me assure you: this is incredible.
Your grammar is impeccable throughout both chapters thus far, so I'll start with that and see if I can praise everything in a timely manner. With what humble grammatical knowledge I possess, I was entirely unable to detect any issue worthy of note. This is a wondrous feat that is admirable in its own right, but you did not stop there.
One thing that really stood out to me was the superlative formatting. This is always a challenge for fanfictions everywhere, but you display a mastery of FimFiction's various options for formatting, in particular with the Mane Six disappearing into the chest last chapter. A simple italicized onomatopoeia would have aptly sufficed, but you chose to present their screams of terror in a much more pleasing way. (Er, with regards to the form of the letters--be assured that I find no joy in screams of terror...)
I must also compliment the concept you chose to write about. While I am not familiar with the Binding Of Isaac game, I still feel that there is a plentiful host of options and directions this story can take. Many of those are very original and would be valuable additions to this site. I eagerly await finding out what direction you choose, and from what I've seen thus far, I am reasonably sure that it will be stunning in its presentation while utterly enthralling in nature.
Finally, I must express my ecstasy for the premise! From what little I do know of Isaac, he is definitely someone who could use some help. My favorite stories are of victims getting the treatment they need, so this is right up my alley. The Mane Six--Fluttershy in particular--seem like exactly what this poor child requires and deserves.
Now all that's left to see is if they can live long enough to get to him.
It's a fun scene to imagine where they're cornered with no hope of escaping as enemies draw near, but Isaac comes in at the last possible second to deus ex machina them out of there. It would then become a duel rescue: Isaac saves the ponies from the monsters and they save him from his terrible situation.
Maybe that's not even close to the direction you're going with this, horror tag considered, but it's still food for thought.
In any case, I thank you for releasing such an absolute gem to us. Rest assured that you have one reader who eagerly awaits future updates and prays you not discontinue this narrative.
I hope to be able to deliver on your lofty expectations with the rest of the story. And rest assured, I have no intentions of discontinuing this. My current planned schedule is one chapter at least every two weeks until my editor and I can catch up with the remaining chapters I've yet to write, but if I do end up missing that goal, I will try to get a chapter out as soon as possible after.
that's interesting, I hope many more chapters of this fanfic!
"MANE 6"
HAS APPEARED IN THE BASEMENT
WOOOOOOOO!!!
YES! YES YES YES!
*Ahem*
Apologies, good sir, but your narrative is simply too exciting to warrant any lesser response. I don't think you realize just how utterly astounding this story is so far, so let me assure you: this is incredible.
Your grammar is impeccable throughout both chapters thus far, so I'll start with that and see if I can praise everything in a timely manner. With what humble grammatical knowledge I possess, I was entirely unable to detect any issue worthy of note. This is a wondrous feat that is admirable in its own right, but you did not stop there.
One thing that really stood out to me was the superlative formatting. This is always a challenge for fanfictions everywhere, but you display a mastery of FimFiction's various options for formatting, in particular with the Mane Six disappearing into the chest last chapter. A simple italicized onomatopoeia would have aptly sufficed, but you chose to present their screams of terror in a much more pleasing way. (Er, with regards to the form of the letters--be assured that I find no joy in screams of terror...)
I must also compliment the concept you chose to write about. While I am not familiar with the Binding Of Isaac game, I still feel that there is a plentiful host of options and directions this story can take. Many of those are very original and would be valuable additions to this site. I eagerly await finding out what direction you choose, and from what I've seen thus far, I am reasonably sure that it will be stunning in its presentation while utterly enthralling in nature.
Finally, I must express my ecstasy for the premise! From what little I do know of Isaac, he is definitely someone who could use some help. My favorite stories are of victims getting the treatment they need, so this is right up my alley. The Mane Six--Fluttershy in particular--seem like exactly what this poor child requires and deserves.
Now all that's left to see is if they can live long enough to get to him.
It's a fun scene to imagine where they're cornered with no hope of escaping as enemies draw near, but Isaac comes in at the last possible second to deus ex machina them out of there. It would then become a duel rescue: Isaac saves the ponies from the monsters and they save him from his terrible situation.
Maybe that's not even close to the direction you're going with this, horror tag considered, but it's still food for thought.
In any case, I thank you for releasing such an absolute gem to us. Rest assured that you have one reader who eagerly awaits future updates and prays you not discontinue this narrative.
I hope to see more of this later!
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Wow. Thanks for the glowing review
I hope to be able to deliver on your lofty expectations with the rest of the story. And rest assured, I have no intentions of discontinuing this. My current planned schedule is one chapter at least every two weeks until my editor and I can catch up with the remaining chapters I've yet to write, but if I do end up missing that goal, I will try to get a chapter out as soon as possible after.