Finished second chapter. It's very well-written. Personally, I did feel like Twilight's characterization slipped toward the end, where she quite suddenly abandoned virtue. Though that's one possible way things can go I suppose, and I respect that this is your story and you make the rules. Personally, if I were writing it, I would have kept Twilight (as the POV character) as the last bastion of virtue in a rapidly decaying world, dismayed as she watches things fall apart around her. The depravity could be something that starts with a few and then spreads out, but to begin it with the story's protagonist threw me off balance, personally.
Overall, still very impressive and highly introspective. I like your concepts and style, but I'm not confident that I will continue to enjoy the content itself. I might pick this up later and see how chapter three goes. But I've been recommending the story to my community with the hopes of striking up conversation about the meta aspects of things. Thanks again for your contribution.
Umm... are we the viewers of the show the gods of creation? I'm getting that vibe from twilight's thoughts, here, and I've never been comfortable with that idea, to be honest.
11741262 It's quite obvious to me that the "gods of creations" are actually...the creators of the show. At some point, it even says in the story that they don't have "funding" anymore, and it's even hinted that the "gods probably wanted to crate something more contemporary" aka the new mlp gen 5.
Finished second chapter. It's very well-written. Personally, I did feel like Twilight's characterization slipped toward the end, where she quite suddenly abandoned virtue. Though that's one possible way things can go I suppose, and I respect that this is your story and you make the rules. Personally, if I were writing it, I would have kept Twilight (as the POV character) as the last bastion of virtue in a rapidly decaying world, dismayed as she watches things fall apart around her. The depravity could be something that starts with a few and then spreads out, but to begin it with the story's protagonist threw me off balance, personally.
Overall, still very impressive and highly introspective. I like your concepts and style, but I'm not confident that I will continue to enjoy the content itself. I might pick this up later and see how chapter three goes. But I've been recommending the story to my community with the hopes of striking up conversation about the meta aspects of things. Thanks again for your contribution.
Umm... are we the viewers of the show the gods of creation? I'm getting that vibe from twilight's thoughts, here, and I've never been comfortable with that idea, to be honest.
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It's quite obvious to me that the "gods of creations" are actually...the creators of the show. At some point, it even says in the story that they don't have "funding" anymore, and it's even hinted that the "gods probably wanted to crate something more contemporary" aka the new mlp gen 5.