10919435 Thank you. And yes, in fact, the story was written before the seventh chapter, so new chapters are already on the way, I will try to translate them not very long and monitor the quality.
10919415 Thanks, I will be glad for any help and if everything goes well, I will definitely indicate you as my editor. It's just that in Russian there is a slightly different structure for constructing phrases and sentences, and I sometimes forget this and write the English text, as I would have done it in Russian. If you want to help me, could you please check the text itself and point me to such moments, if any. If you need to, I can send you a Word document with a chapter.
But despite all attempts to stop the wedding, it still took place and at the appointed time all the guests and Twilight’s friends came to the ceremony solemnly dressed and happy without her. They thought she could not come to terms with defeat, and preferred to spend the day in her room, and could only guess what made her dislike Cadance so much. Maybe she was envious? Or even jealous?
10943875 There is a fine line between comedy and failure of suspension of disbelief, not everyone can pass a plot or story detail they believe makes no sense. As long as they are not rude about it or attack the author, they are perfectly allowed to state their opinions about the story, at least to allow other people to comment on it or counterargument it.
Run Shining Armor ruuuuunnnn you did absolutely perfect
This is absolutely amazing, and not bad for a guy whos first language isnt english. KEEP IT UP!
I am not a native English speaker but I'm willing to help at least. I've had experience talking/communicating with Russian artists at the very least.
This has potential.
But the first part is unnecessary exposition that doesn't add much to the story.
Remember: show don't tell.
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Thank you. And yes, in fact, the story was written before the seventh chapter, so new chapters are already on the way, I will try to translate them not very long and monitor the quality.
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Thanks, I will be glad for any help and if everything goes well, I will definitely indicate you as my editor. It's just that in Russian there is a slightly different structure for constructing phrases and sentences, and I sometimes forget this and write the English text, as I would have done it in Russian. If you want to help me, could you please check the text itself and point me to such moments, if any. If you need to, I can send you a Word document with a chapter.
Go on….
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I'm here and in Discord if you need me.
Just “help me..” as Shining’s signature.. LMAO
actually Celestia could do something. Legally she married Shining and Cadance, not Shining and Chryisalis. so the marriage is not valid
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dude its a comedy
I gave you my heart, and then you turned around
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There is a fine line between comedy and failure of suspension of disbelief, not everyone can pass a plot or story detail they believe makes no sense. As long as they are not rude about it or attack the author, they are perfectly allowed to state their opinions about the story, at least to allow other people to comment on it or counterargument it.