Highly recommended by the very generous PresentPerfect! Review here.
When a child is young enough to believe in truth and old enough to not have found it, fluid enough to need no foundation and rigid enough to want one, cynic enough to mislike the world and romantic enough to love it, then may they go wandering on dusty hooves through wood and plain and mountain, hungry for the warmth of other hearths and the caress of novel tongues and customs. And when their ears and eyes and heart and hooves are filled to overflowing, they must hope that the road has worn them to fit a door passed along the way.
A fairytale bildungsroman sort of thing, grown several times too large.
Death and violence are not frequent or terribly explicit, but they do appear.
That is the most badass description of King Sombra's defeat I could ever ask for.
Heartbreaking.
oh my god, that's perfect
Beautiful work!
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Thank you! Sorry for the long, long delay.
and oof, love how efficiently these first paragraphs introduce this adolescent’s search for understanding of his world. of course this initial answer would be unsatisfying to him now
ooh, love this line
and thus illustrating the previous line, as well as how the old justify keeping everything the same as it always was, very nice!
and what a great start for this most bildungsroman of bildungsromans! really nailing the feel of it
and oof! love these different, self-serving interpretations of the same event. really makes you think. the cruelty of Felsite’s domination over these three species is horrifying, and the deer show how cruelty flows downward in turn.
and yet even he must find ways to justify what he is doing, even with his stated philosophy
there are a lot of joules in those lightning strikes! pegasi are not to be messed with
and oof, the pony version of paradoxical undressing.
hoowee, a very understandable and unfortunate assumption for Tumbling Leaf to make!
absolutely love this poetic description of Sombra’s rise
this really does capture his perspective so well
and ooh, i love this as the origin of the Changelings! it is just so perfect! really casts the whole Chrysalis story in a new and far more interesting light
absolute perfection, i love it all. augh
and augh, sorry i’m quoting everything but all of this is really great imagery
love his use of agricultural metaphors throughout, though considering how Chrysalis turned out…
and our heroes who have braved dragons and tyrants finally face a challenge that cannot be overcome: bureaucracy
love how you somehow keep Discord being Discord, straining against the boundaries of this fairytale bildungsroman while still remaining firmly a character within it
and, oof. love the poignance from a most unexpected source. but that is somehow expected, isn’t it?
and it was all building up to this, Celestia's presence felt but not seen in the actions and mindsets and souls of every character in the story so far. and i must say, this really lived up to it. she truly feels like the Celestia that she should be
and full circle with the beginning. absolute perfection!
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Let me offer my very belated thanks for all your kind words about this story! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
I am left, here, crying. I don't know any words to praise this more than those.