Sweetie Belle has joined her older sister and father on their bi-annual cruise ship vacation! She'll get to participate in a great father-daughter bonding experience! But there's strange 'plapping' sounds coming from her father's cabin...?
there was even the time she’d accidentally walked in on him when their bathroom door was broken: he’d been standing to urinate into the toilet.
When do we get to hear that story?
Jokes aside, this was great as always. I Love how you take your time describing the events in detail and don’t rush anything, even thought it’s sometimes hard to tell which positions the characters are in.
Holy shit, this is art. I mean, wow! If only I could write like this.
We as an audience already knew where this was going, you as an author already knew that we knew, but watching it all unfold for Sweetiebell, delicious! And the discriptions! So fluid and detailed! They say paint a picture with your descriptions, well I wouldn't be surprised to find this one hanging next to Van Gogh or Davinchi, where most authors descriptions are paint by number (my discriptions are more like a Jackson Pollock painting just splatters of multi coloured paint at best)
Hope you don't mind that I'm taking notes, because this is how it's supposed to be done.
yes
Fucking perfection![:raritystarry:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritystarry.png)
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Soon it be her turrrn...
Dun DUN DUUUN!
Yes I love those plaps~!
Oh no's-
Sound effects works for me! Great start. Ya know, I feel sorry for the house keepers. Your ponies are always making a huge mess!
Buck*
Sweet Damn Luna that was descriptive, could practically see it from Sweeties perspective like I was in her hooves
Actually. Her mane alone is worth more than that... !
- Rarity, mlp movie
Re-reading for a delightful familie experience![:trollestia:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trollestia.png)
When do we get to hear that story?![:ajsmug:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajsmug.png)
Jokes aside, this was great as always. I Love how you take your time describing the events in detail and don’t rush anything, even thought it’s sometimes hard to tell which positions the characters are in.![:derpyderp1:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/derpyderp1.png)
Juicy hmmm..
![:unsuresweetie:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/unsuresweetie.png)
Holy shit, this is art. I mean, wow! If only I could write like this.
We as an audience already knew where this was going, you as an author already knew that we knew, but watching it all unfold for Sweetiebell, delicious! And the discriptions! So fluid and detailed! They say paint a picture with your descriptions, well I wouldn't be surprised to find this one hanging next to Van Gogh or Davinchi, where most authors descriptions are paint by number (my discriptions are more like a Jackson Pollock painting just splatters of multi coloured paint at best)
Hope you don't mind that I'm taking notes, because this is how it's supposed to be done.
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You're way too kind, reader. Thank you though, I appreciate it and you!
Great start to a family experience![:raritywink:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritywink.png)
![:unsuresweetie:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/unsuresweetie.png)