He bellowed. “QUEEN CHRYSALIS’S EGGHOLE LET GO!”

II can't breathe xD this is great.

Chapter 2 review: me likey

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the lack of the comma makes it even better

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It's the little touches ;)

Probably the only thing keeping him sober and rational was a lucky balance of adrenaline. With blood pumping hot it would be literally impossible to back down in that position anyways.
Glad she realized and consented.

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That's one thing I wanted to be careful to make clear, silly as the situation was from the start. :)

Scorpions are arachnids, not insects.
I’ve never seen a fight scene combined with a sex scene before. This is amazing.

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Corrections will be made immediately! Also I'm glad the combat humps worked for ypu ;p

The last thing he wanted was for some scavenger to pry open their armor years later only to find the inspiration for a bawdy bar story that would last generations.

Heh.
(Is that how you found inspiration for this story?)

At this rate a herd of deathclaws were due to come charging out of some new hold in the ground. Or raiders. Definitely raiders.

Nah. It's merely a raider Deathclaw.