10421272 Will fix thank you, the next chapter is going to take place closer to the shows actual time but still before it so this will be (for now) the last chapter with old Equish, until Celestia/Daybreaker returns
10421269 And when your toys lie broken and turned to ashes, Krampus, what will you do then? For you truly are Harmonies' Shadow. Whereas I am it's Nightmare.
10421311 Less of a story, more of a being. Pinkamena. But not just Cupcakes. Smile HD is in there too. She's an anti-hero now. Either way, try 'The Super Duper Awesome Life of the Party Pony"; 'The Black Moon Howls'; and 'DisHarmony: Genesis.'
A bit rushed in my opinion. It could use some work. Perhaps slow down the pace a bit and stretch the chapters out. You could have done something where Celestia is initially open to inviting Krampus in to her castle and then you could use a few servants and other characters to establish both the character of Krampus and use Celestia viewing things from an outside perspective where she doesn't get the whole story to drive her to that final daybreaker moment. What I'm saying is this felt rushed and I think there were a few ways to fix it.
10421445 This is why I'm writing this story, to help me get better with writing and I always look forward to hearing what people think or how I could do better so this way I can learn
10421451 That's great. Anyways I hope to see your writing improve with future chapters. I am enjoying this story despite my criticism. Criticism I will continue to throw at you as the story goes on.
10422523 Will do, I plan the next can to be out tomorrow but I feel it's a little rushed right now so I'm going to tweak it a bit more and see if I can get it paces correctly
I really really like this
I figured I'd put a spin on things I'm tired of the cliché nightmare moon, it's supposed to be an alternate universe, why can't Celestia be the one to be banished? So we get this
Well done my friend! You've made yet another amazing chapter for an amazing story!
Amazing I wander what abilities this krampus will have.
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Well high and long jumps and being able to control toys and ribbons are three for now, I plan to give more if his powers away next chapter.
`Thy name is Krampus,` should be mine name or my name, im not sure
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Will fix thank you, the next chapter is going to take place closer to the shows actual time but still before it so this will be (for now) the last chapter with old Equish, until Celestia/Daybreaker returns
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And when your toys lie broken and turned to ashes, Krampus, what will you do then? For you truly are Harmonies' Shadow. Whereas I am it's Nightmare.
I want to do a crossover now, XD
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XD I plan to have Krampus make his token next chapter, what is your story, because I am very intrigued
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Less of a story, more of a being. Pinkamena. But not just Cupcakes. Smile HD is in there too. She's an anti-hero now. Either way, try 'The Super Duper Awesome Life of the Party Pony"; 'The Black Moon Howls'; and 'DisHarmony: Genesis.'
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Will do and I look forward to doing a crossover when I can
A bit rushed in my opinion. It could use some work. Perhaps slow down the pace a bit and stretch the chapters out. You could have done something where Celestia is initially open to inviting Krampus in to her castle and then you could use a few servants and other characters to establish both the character of Krampus and use Celestia viewing things from an outside perspective where she doesn't get the whole story to drive her to that final daybreaker moment. What I'm saying is this felt rushed and I think there were a few ways to fix it.
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This is why I'm writing this story, to help me get better with writing and I always look forward to hearing what people think or how I could do better so this way I can learn
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That's great. Anyways I hope to see your writing improve with future chapters. I am enjoying this story despite my criticism. Criticism I will continue to throw at you as the story goes on.
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I expect nothing less, if I don't receive criticism how am I supposed to grow? Hopefully you continue to enjoy the story
Love it
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Good good
Great work keep it up
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Will do, I plan the next can to be out tomorrow but I feel it's a little rushed right now so I'm going to tweak it a bit more and see if I can get it paces correctly
Ok, was not expecting that! Looking forward to see where this is going.