Donovan Crowley works as a Royal Blacksmith for the Guard. Ever since his arrival he has been ridiculed and tormented by everypony he meets. One night in his dreams, he meets an enemy once thought to be destroyed.
I really enjoyed the story! Seriously very good! The chapters seem to take a while to come out, but they are well written and with a good narrative. It's already favorited and I'll be waiting for a new chapter.
And oh boy this is going to get good when the royal retards get their asses or flanks handed to them by a human. And oh man if shining armor gets beaten then oh twilight will either be upset or very surprised or both or does what Luna did when she was beaten. Same for cadance.
Now if you’ll excuse me while I sit here and wait for the show to begin.
*sets up chair with popcorn and snacks.*
Oh anybody want some popcorn for the show? *offers popcorn*
Really want to see more of this and want to see him and umbra together, they seem like a good pair. Also for Donovan to finally show the ponies the errors of their ways treating him like shit hehehehe
11451520 I kind of question whether they’ll even learn. They already seem to lack the common sense to not shit on the guy maintaining their gear, after all.
And of course, the moment his association with Umbra comes to light, all the same idiots will immediately go “I told you so!” and feel perfectly justified in hindsight.
My man's is going to need to go monkey mode to win I wonder if this story will be more the character wins more through skill with weapons or magic and abilities it will be fun to see either way maybe he won't win but get far enough to earn respect before his future plans can't wait to see
I just had a brilliant idea! So, as powerful as Umbra is and despite the progress Donovan makes with his dark training, just the two of them won't be enough to take over Equestria, they will need an army. And I recall in The Cutie Re-Mark episode in the Sombra timeline, Sombra made the Crystal Ponies wear armor and helmets that put them under mind control, and Donovan is the one who handles the Royal Guards gear. So, what if he and Umbra place mind control runes or enchantments on the armor that are inactive at first, but when the time comes to strike, the enchantments activate, like in Middle Earth: Shadow of Mordor, enslaving at least half of the guards. And as a nice bonus, if other ponies try to remove the armor to free them, the spell crushes their mind when its lifted, instantly killing them.
11632989 If the enchantments make it where the guards don’t control their bodies, but are conscious of what their bodies are doing, then I am for the idea.
Oooo. The Elements attend the Tournament. Amazing. Also. I hope Donovan kicks their asses
It's been awhile, but you have returned. Here's to hoping for more.
I really enjoyed the story! Seriously very good! The chapters seem to take a while to come out, but they are well written and with a good narrative. It's already favorited and I'll be waiting for a new chapter.
Haven't lost the edge but it needs some sharping! So good so far keep it up!
Thanks so much for not dropping the story. It's premise is one of my personal favorites on this site.
Awesome an update! The next few chapters are gonna be great. Especially if he gets to finally vent his frustrations with violence!
I'm just wondering did you remove the Anthro tag or was that a different story
I'm looking forward to the guard's faces when Donovan demolishes them, especially Gallant's, that prick needs a hard lesson in humility.
Gotta say man, this is seriously good. This is the first time I've been into an actual story that wasn't just a quick one shot in years.
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Agreed
Oh want some popcorn
*offers some popcorn*
And now we wait for the tournament, and maybe mane6 reactions to our human, or are they even in the loop about his presence in equestria?
Yes it’s back!
And oh boy this is going to get good when the royal retards get their asses or flanks handed to them by a human. And oh man if shining armor gets beaten then oh twilight will either be upset or very surprised or both or does what Luna did when she was beaten.
Same for cadance.
Now if you’ll excuse me while I sit here and wait for the show to begin.
*sets up chair with popcorn and snacks.*
Oh anybody want some popcorn for the show?
*offers popcorn*
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With Extra Butter?
Thanks for the update!
This chapter is sharp
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HAhahah Sure. Why not pal
Really want to see more of this and want to see him and umbra together, they seem like a good pair. Also for Donovan to finally show the ponies the errors of their ways treating him like shit hehehehe
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I kind of question whether they’ll even learn. They already seem to lack the common sense to not shit on the guy maintaining their gear, after all.
And of course, the moment his association with Umbra comes to light, all the same idiots will immediately go “I told you so!” and feel perfectly justified in hindsight.
I get the feeling that shit will hit the fan during the tournament, either because someone will try and kill him or because of some other issue.
Sinking feeling that Twilight is gonna jump the Gun and do something that everyone will regret.
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Sure.
Offers butter popcorn
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Thx dips it in MORE butter
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Indeed, hopefully he kicks their shit in before that thou. For it’ll be glorious!
It was a good chapter, if albait short, hopefully these keep coming, good luck :D.
My man's is going to need to go monkey mode to win I wonder if this story will be more the character wins more through skill with weapons or magic and abilities it will be fun to see either way maybe he won't win but get far enough to earn respect before his future plans can't wait to see
Any updates so far?
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Chapter's being written, I opt to write on weekends. I have no time during the week due to work.11508097
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Ah gotcha, and understandable
Dammit im late for the party!
Can't wait for Gallant's face to be caved in. You never disrespect the one who knows your weapons better than you do.
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Agreed. Especially someone who has ranged weaponry at disposal.
Man it’s going to be good
*sets chair down*
Want some popcorn?
*offers box of popcorn* or candy *offers candy*
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Hey take a seat my friend and want some refreshments and snacks to watch the show?
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Im good my friend as I have a bag of pretzels.
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Gotcha want a chair perhaps.
Wasn’t expecting twilight and the others.
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So want a chair and some snacks to enjoy the show?
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So, update perhaps?
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Absolutely.
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*hands you a chair*
Now would you like some popcorn with or without butter?
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With butter
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Than here you go then.
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Thank you
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Your welcome, now let’s get ready for the show.
I just had a brilliant idea! So, as powerful as Umbra is and despite the progress Donovan makes with his dark training, just the two of them won't be enough to take over Equestria, they will need an army. And I recall in The Cutie Re-Mark episode in the Sombra timeline, Sombra made the Crystal Ponies wear armor and helmets that put them under mind control, and Donovan is the one who handles the Royal Guards gear. So, what if he and Umbra place mind control runes or enchantments on the armor that are inactive at first, but when the time comes to strike, the enchantments activate, like in Middle Earth: Shadow of Mordor, enslaving at least half of the guards. And as a nice bonus, if other ponies try to remove the armor to free them, the spell crushes their mind when its lifted, instantly killing them.
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If the enchantments make it where the guards don’t control their bodies, but are conscious of what their bodies are doing, then I am for the idea.