Rainbow Dash tells the pegasi to make it snow. But its the middle of summer! Why would she ask us this?
Ty No Name 13 for editing this story.
why EqG sunset and rainbow lowkey bad 😨⁉️
Rainbow Dash tells the pegasi to make it snow. But its the middle of summer! Why would she ask us this?
Ty No Name 13 for editing this story.
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The story has a very ridiculous plot hole that distracts from the interesting idea you put forward: out of season weather in Equestria.
You had a really cool idea, but I feel the execution was not good.
Please don't let that discourage you. Take my criticism as a guide for any future stories.
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Alright. Thanks
Don't give up on it. It may need a lot of changes... When I write I got terrible at first, but that doesn't mean I can go back, and make it better. Like making finishing touches...
I noticed that you have big enter gap... try to make 1 enter gap for each paragraph... I started to notice this on most of your fictions.
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^ to much enter...