No thank you. Good to see a new writer though. I hope you keep improving.

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Tank u frind.
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yez nex chapt cum suun...
soonnnnnnnnn as I has tim to wrk on it.

It's a good story but it to fast past .

For example .he's my work of your first para graph .its a good story but slow down ,ok.

.button walked through the everfree forest, his mind was clouded with statements from his mother. statements that didn't sit to well with the colt .as he traced through the ever forest he flicked a rock that sat in the centre of the grey path with his hooves .an angry snout formed on his lips .Just because I play games doesn't mean I'm obsessed with them ,he yelled.his voice echoed ,bouncing off the ancient hard oak wood trees of the forest .the outburst broke his rage induced walk and he soon realised that he was somewhere in a place he wasn't meant to be .I'm not in white woods he said . A nervous sweat broke through button and cold tingerly feeling grew in his back .

I'm in Everest. He said, dread oozing from his voice. As he stared into the darkness of the woods that surround him ,suddenly a growled appeared behind the colt

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HOLY
FUCKING
SHIT.
You're a genius!
Unfortunately, I am stupid, and can't write with such skill...
BUT I WILL TRY!

i have to say my friend .your pretty good with Zecora's speech and you do have skills

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Thanz uo !D

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For some odd reason, I can never make ANYTHING rhyme unless I'm making the rhyme for Zecora.