At Ponyville
Applejack was the first one to regain her posture: “Princess Celestia, please allow me to say this.”
Celestia perked up. “What's wrong, Applejack?”
“Well, princess... I've decided…” Applejack’s voice was shaky, since she wasn’t sure about how to continue. She decided to make the upcoming revelation as short and painless as possible.
“I want to give up my Element of Harmony!” she blurted out.
All ponies in the room widened their eyes in surprise at Applejack's words.
“Are-are you joking, AJ?” Rainbow Dash stammered.
“How could I be joking, in a situation like this?” Applejacks voice deepened. “No, Rainbow, it is true. I don't want to be the carrier of the Element Of Honesty anymore, and neither do I deserve it.” Applejack had spoken in a firm voice, leaving no doubts about how serious she was.
“B-b-but why!? The Elements are the only thing that unites us all, the only thing that connects us with Twilight! They are our only chance to find and fix her, why would you give up on yours?” Rainbow Dash’s expression changed from surprised to angry. “If you abandon it, if we abandon them, then we will also abandon Twilight!” By the time she had spoken these words, Rainbow flew in front of Applejack with an angry look on her face.
“Rainbow is right, Applejack. I know you are all heartbroken, just like me. But now, only the Elements of Harmony can help us heal Twilight. They are our only hope to find her, and without them, we might never be able to free her of the curse. So we can't just give up on that hope, do you understand, Applejack?“ Princess Celestial spoke the last two sentences with a new found energy, to motivate herself and the others to not give up that easily.
“I certainly understand that, princess. But I have to say, we all know that the Elements of Harmony can't help us fix everything. And this time they can't help us fix Twilight either, because the other Elements won't work without the Element of Magic.”
“And even if they do work… I don't think they can help us cure Twilight. Because after what we know, the Elements of Harmony can only drive out the darkness born of negative emotions in a creature’s heart... But what about Twilight? If what Princess Cadence has told us is true, Twilight's heart will have gained nothing but emptiness, and certainly no negative emotions. And if it doesn't contain any negative emotions to purify, we might turn Twilight into stone, just like Discord. And is that so much better than how she currently is? If she doesn’t hurt anyone, I don’t think so,” Applejack sadly explained.
Applejack didn't really want to believe this either, but she had learned that even if the truth can bring a lot of pain, one has to accept it. Because every lie, no matter how beautiful, promising or comforting, will always be an illusionary mist and will only make you more lost.
“B-But... Even if so, we don't have to give up. Who knows, if we keep on hoping, the Elements might make an exception!” At that point Rainbow was desperate, she had lost a friend, she didn't want to lose any more friends and so she hold on to that last straw of hope.
“No, Rainbow... You have to accept the fact that the Elements won't be able to help us this time.”
“But... But...” Rainbow faltered. Deep in her heart she knew that Applejack was correct. But she could not accept that all hope of saving Twilight was disappearing, there had to be something! Some new way of using the Elements, or maybe some spell.
Applejack raised her voice: “Princesses, friends... Just like the Element of Magic is the center of the connection between the other elements, Twilight is the pony that unites us all, she's the reason we became the owners of the Elements... And now, this bond has been broken by us, the bearers themselves, causing Twilight to lose her own heart! Is there any reason to continue bearing the Elements?” Applejack looked at the ponies in the room, seeing nothing but sadness and tears in their faces.
Rainbow Dash, Rarity, Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie, no, they all frowned at Applejack's question. They all realized that because of Twilight, they became the bearers of the Elements of Harmony. And now, when Twilight had disappeared, the Element Of Magic had withered, there was not a single reason to continue to be the heroes of Equestria. How could they protect Equestria, if they could not even protect their best friend?
Finally, after a moment of silence, Rainbow Dash walked towards Princess Celestia and raised her head, with a determined expression on her face: “AJ is right! Twilight is our best friend, the pony that connects us all. If she gives up on being the owner of her Element, so will I. Because if we don’t do this together, we might as well not do this at all. If I have to choose between being a hero of Equestria and my friends, there’s only one correct answer, my friends!”
“I will also abandon the Element Of Generosity. Even if it is a shame to give up such beautiful accessoires, they aren’t as unique as my friends.” Rarity stepped up to stand with Rainbow Dash.
“Me too!” Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie spoke in unison, while walking towards Rainbow Dash and Rarity.
Applejack looked towards her friends and smiled, then she completed the line between Rainbow and Rarity.
“Princess, we will give up the Elements of Harmony. However, we are never going to give up on Twilight, even without the Elements of Harmony helping, we won’t let her down. We promise, we will definitely find Twilight, ” they said.
Princess Celestia, Shining Armor and Princess Cadence were surprised by the drastic change of behavior of the Main Five. 5 minutes ago they had been weeping, now their voices were full of determination and strength.
“I understand and respect your decision, and I myself will not give up, I will not rest until I find my faithful student!”
Inside the ancient ruins
Twilight was sleeping on the grass beside the lake in nearly complete silence. There was no noise except the wind. This was her first peaceful sleep, because now that her emotions had disappeared and her heart became empty, her dreams vanished with them.
Inside Twilight's dream
Twilight was standing in the middle of an empty, dark void, surrounded by nothing but endless darkness. “What is this place?”
A dark gray flame appeared in front of her and suddenly spoke: “We are inside your heart, my master.”
Twilight looked at the gray flames floating in front of her: “Is that you, Death?”
“Yes and no. This is my soul form. Since you and I have become one, you can see my soul as well as I can appear inside your heart. ”
“Hum... So this is my heart after I became the Lord Of Death? A void, filled with endless darkness?” Twilight asked, with an expression of curiosity on her face.
“Yes, my master. The heart of every creature in the universe is its own space and all their personalities, dreams and emotions are expressed within it, so you could say this is a reflection of your soul. However, now that you are Lord Of Death, all your emotions have disappeared, so now your heart has nothing in it and became empty”
“Um... I get it. But won’t Princess Luna find me? She has the ability to go into everypony's dreams and locate them. ” Twilight asked.
“I understand your concerns, my lord. But I can assure you that this is not going to happen. Things like dreams or ambitions come from the heart, so the so-called dream space is actually the space of the heart, and every heart space has a door to it. These doors are linked to a place called the ‘corridor of dreams’. And there are also some creatures capable of entering the dream corridor and with that the heart spaces of other creatures. Princess Luna is a pony with such an ability. ”
Twilight wasn’t convinced by these words at all, but then Death began speaking again.
“However, this ability has its limits, the dream corridor is endless, and Luna can only find the dream doors of creatures within her reach. So if you are beyond her limit, she will not be able to find your dream. And because you're now in an relic space and thus completely separate from the real world, she won't be able to find your dream. And even if she sees it, she can't go inside your heart space without your permission. ”
“Thank you, now I get it. So when will I start training with my new power? ” Twilight asked.
“As soon as you wake up, my master,” Death answered.
Inside the ancient ruins (again)
Twilight eyes slowly opened, glowing icy blue. Twilight stood up, the power of Death radiating from her body. A dark gray flame enveloped her, and when the flame disappeared, her body was covered with a black armor, and her mane and tail sparkled like a galaxy.
She wore a gray helmet with black paddings, covering the space from the top of her head to her neck, a black chestplate encased her chest and abdomen, three sharp black spines growing in the middle of it, with two longer and pointed spines curving backwards. Small spikes sprouted behind her heels and at her front legs’ joints were two long, slightly pointed back spines. Her curved and black horn didn’t change, but now she was enveloped in her dark gray magic aura. She grinned.
“Let’s get the show on the road.”
Up to this point, it seems finding Twilight will be more of a challenge for her friends, even Luna.
I absolutely love the story, especially because they pretty much see Death as the villain, but he technically isn't as he is more a responsibility that comes with a burden. It sets the story up to have good possibilities. Not to mention they don't seem to know that the "curse" can't be undone.
Something else I have been thinking about though is that what if this goes on to discord's second return and when that happens, what if discord is old enough to know about and recognize the power of death in Twilight. I actually wouldn't be surprised if he was the Eternal Master of either Destruction or of Space-Time. Equestria's very peaceful so what if he was just trying to do his job and create some chaos to counteract that so it becomes more balanced.
When is the next chapter coming?
10271040 I'm not trying to be a troll here but my personal take on the C.W is this.
All they did was not believe that the princess of love and Celestia's niece was evil. Twilight didn't even make a good case for herself.
That's all Twilight was saying, "She's evil" it sounded more like she was hurling insults and being overprotective of her brother. At the time it just looked like she was being paranoid, especially considering that not long ago she put an entire town at risk just because she was worried about a late assignment.
Considering their history together it seemed more like she was in the wrong by harassing her.
What would you have done if a sibling you graciously invited to be an important part of a wedding seemed to be determined to derail everything with poorly worded arguments? I'd be pretty irate, I don't really blame Shining Armor for being upset with her. [although cutting her from the wedding was pretty harsh it was probably said out of frustration, we all do that.]
Sure she was right in the end but the situation wasn't cut and dry.
I don't want to start an argument, these are just my opinions.
Wan is the next chapter coming out
When will the next chapter be out?
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I don't disagree but the entire premise is so wrong. Celestia knows Cadance. How she is, what she is like. Chrysalis should not have been able to last to the wedding acting like she was (depending on when she replaced Cadence she would of been the new centerpiece lawn ornament for the weeding before the mane six arrived). Shining Armor was mind controlled, what's her excuse? Her friends would lack context but I felt they were really over the top. The episode would have been so much different if a competent writer was writing it who understood the background of the characters.
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Well you gotta agree that calling Cadance evil was a bit more insulting than proof giving. Celestia was probably just offended that Twilight would say that about her niece Cadance.
Please continue writing this stories as it's definitely one of my favorite stories and I still consider some other stories from the beginning of this website to be on that list so it definitely says something about this story
First paragraph and I'm already in pain, this book is written very poorly.
In fact, writing chapter names from small letter is a sign already. Coupled with completely unoriginal idea, and structure of a school drama, and ridiculous forcing of facts over logic, i simply cannot read it.
Just look at this awful word combination: "she started pretending". Jeez.
You say that it's your first book, but no one even speaks like that.
any idea when we can expect an update and new chapter?
Please continue this story. The plot is great and actually incredibly unique. If you are slowing down because of the haters talking about the grammar, simply get a grammar correction software like Grammarly for example, or an editor to help out. You said this was your first story, but for the first story it is incredibly good with creativity and plot so please don't stop.
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Not for a while given that the author has been missing since June.
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im keeping a watch on this ... love the story so far ... please continue your great work
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It's very important to get someone who is fluent in a language to do the final editing if we are going to translate from another language. The strange grammatical formatting issues just makes it difficult to read. On top of that, much of the drama is contrived, over the top, nonsensical, and to be honest, the dark pit it was spiraling down into turned me off to the point I literally rage quit. This seriously needs a better description. And I'll be honest, I was hoping for a story that presented the wedding and after in a more realistic light. Twilight's friends and her brother literally betrayed her. Celestia betrayed her. Sure I can see the ponies from Ponyville getting star truck and dismissing the bridezilla's behavior, but not a one tried to talk it out with Twilight. I can excuse her brother because he was being controlled, but how did Celestia not see that Cadance was behaving way out of character? How is it she never tried to reign in Cadanc's behaviour? How could Spike not see it? Spike is practically Twilight's daughter and he turned his back on her too. Spike should have stayed by her side. A story about how Twilight deals with her feelings about how she was treated after finding the real Cadance and somehow manages to reconcile - or not - is all the story I needed. Relying on contrivances to make for a super dramatic dark Twilight turned into a Red and Black OC just tells me the writer is just being lazy. Granted that the original canon material is a victim of lazy writing in that Twilight was way out of character too. Twilight analyzes everything and believes in imperial evidence. Calling the fake Cadance Evil without presenting a fully thought out case was just lazy on the part of the original writers.
Hi, Dark1777.
Tried to read some chapters that you posted but I must say you need someone to proofread your stories for you and make some changes, your grammar, I don't know how I should say this but it sucks honestly and you need someone to read it beforehand and make changes before you post any new chapters.
I read up to chapter 8 and i don't know if it will get better i hope so but so far i cannot and will not read any more unless you rewrite your chapters.
Honestly i like the idea, thats why i am here and gave your story a shot. I am not a writer so maybe i don't know how hard it is to put what you think down on paper but still please take in what i have written to you and search for someone i think there is a group here on fimfiction that can help you find a proofreader/betareader.
//zolloz
Interesting story. I hope you will come back to it.
i like this story so far
this is really good for a first
Enjoying this so far. Lots of grammar errors, but I'm guessing english isn't your native language the way its written. Can't wait to see more.
very poggers but seems kinda dead
when will there be a sequel
They are still naive fools, they still don't know of who/what she is truly is?
is this fan fiction dead ?
I'm so sorry that the extra time is not along, I'll continue my story and the latest chapter will be released in a few days because I need more grammatical corrections. Again, I'm really sorry that you could wait for my story and thank you for supporting and commenting on it, I hope you will further support my later chapters
Great story