There was once a young pegasus filly named Double Dare that had never dreamed of leaving her home or even Manehatten. At least, that's how it was until her father told her of her heritage and what she was destined to become; she was the daughter of Daring-Do and had to live up to her mother's legacy.
Every chapter Double Dare and her friends Crash Landing, Chipper, and Crystal Clear shall uncover new treasures, new adventures, and perhaps even love?
Very good, continue.
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Thank you!
Very interesting! I shall keep track of this story.
One little tip though, slow down. Take a littler time to add a few descriptions into the story, and think things through before you put 'em down. For example, how did she know that book was out of place? Maybe instead of out of place, she found said object on the floor.
Please, carry on! I wish to see where this goes! You're doing a fantastic job, and I don't have any complaints grammar / spelling / punctuation wise.
Crash Landing huh? It's funny because thats one of my storie' s titles.
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This was a rough draft of sorts, so I'll go back and edit (just as you suggested).
Thank you so much for the comment!
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Haha! Love the Indiana Jones reference. ^_^
Good
GobJobVery good! I like it!
Its a good story, but I think your rushing the story a little bit at the end. I think it could be improved by maybe slowing it down a little. But other then that, great story, I like where its headed
1140415 I agree, it is rushed. I love the story plot though. Sitting on the edge of my seat, waiting for the next chapter!
Yeah, I wrote this chapter whilst listening to "HEYYEYAAEYAAAEYAEYAA".
If this is what inspires me... then I shall become the saddest creature on the planet.
He was mean that Crash Landing he is so mean
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He'll only get worse, but I have something else in mind for him.
So just hang in there, because you might just come to like him as the story progresses.
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I hope so if he does not I will skip the parts with him in it
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Then that will end up being a vast majority of the story.
Trust me, he gets better over time.