I may grow old but I'm not growing up
Tempest had left Equestria to spread the word of friendship. She decides to return after hearing of many dark rumors about her homeland.
What she finds is worse than she could have ever imagined.
Where is everyone? Why does the smell of smoke hang so strongly in the air?
What happened?
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I was a bit torn on this one, I'm afraid. You've got a pair of really intriguing ideas (Tempest returning to a ravaged Equestria & Celestia going nuts and killing everyone), but you don't really go anywhere with them—they're just kinda "there". It winds up giving off a bit of a "rocks fall, everyone dies" vibe, you know what I mean?
Even so, this was definitely an interesting little story—not bad for a debut, I must say! And so, in spite of my misgivings, I shall give you a thumbs up.
Best of luck with your future endeavors!
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Wow! Thank you for your feedback, I can definitely see where you're coming from. I'm glad you could find something to like about this!
Do you have any thoughts about this story that you'd like to share? It would help me with my future writings a lot!