Bubbles and Glitter
BANG! BANG!
The treacherous knocking met the pony occupying the bedroom's ears. Rolling over, it groaned, and put it's pillow over it's ears. The knocking grew louder, and the violet unicorn gave up. Sighing, she rolled out of bed, trotted to her dresser, and picked up her brush with magic. Brushing all the obvious tangles out of her hair, she splashed some water on her face and trotted down the stairs leading to the main library. Walking over to the door, she unlatched the lock and opened it. Looking back at her with a bright smile was a grey pegasus with a blond mane and golden eyes that pointed two different directions. Holding a stack of mail on her head, she cheerfully said, "Mail's here, Twilight!"
"Oh, thank you, Derpy." Taking the mail in her magic, she set the envelopes on one of the bookshelves. Just as she turned back to the cheerful mail mare, she heard a slight rumble from behind her. Turning back to Derpy, she smiled. "Hungry?" she asked. Now, this behavior was out of the usual for the unicorn, as Twilight Sparkle is not, under any circumstances, a morning pony, especially when she had spent the night before studying some obscure topic, such as pegasus body language, and had ended up going to bed at four o'clock in the morning. Something about this mare, though, made her smile. Maybe it was her way of grinning to everyone she delivered mail to, and then some.
Derpy smiled, embarrassed, and said, "Yeah, I had to get up early today to get a special package to the Boutique, so I didn't get any breakfast. Since you're my last stop, I was about to go get some."
"Oh, then would you like to come in for breakfast? I'm sure Spike won't mind." Twilight smiled and held the door open. Derpy grinned thankfully, and trotted through the doorway. "I'm really sorry, Derpy, I just woke up and last night I was up till four studying. I need to take a shower, if you don't mind." Derpy told her it was fine. Twilight thanked her and trod up the stairs. The violet mare trotted through the open door to the bathroom and stepped into the shower. Turning the knob, she let the warm water pour over her body, working out all aches and pains from the previous night's studying.
Grabbing a bottle off a shower shelf, she squeezed it in her magic, and with said magic, she caught the shampoo that came from the bottle. Levitating it up to her mane, she spread it out and worked it into her mane with her hooves. Rinsing the suds out, she picked up a small cloth, wet it, and squirted some coat-wash onto it. The mare proceeded to wash her coat and skin. Turning to the shampoo once more, she washed her tail, rinsed it, turned the knob, and stepped out of the shower. Pulling down a towel, she dried off, and picked up the hair dryer. Turning it on, she dried her mane and tail. Turning off the hair dryer, she took her horn-polisher and brushed it up and down her horn till the magical residue from the previous night was gone. She then brushed her teeth, mane, and tail, and headed downstairs.
Spike had already made her coffee, and had sat it on the table in front of her usual chair. Derpy was sipping from a mug. She smiled and gestured towards the other chair. Twilight sat down and picked up her mug, sipping at the hot coffee. A smile crept across her face at the taste of the wondrous liquid.
"So, Twilight, what were you studying last night?" Twilight started. Her eyes widened, and darted around. Finally, she sighed.
"You might find it a bit odd... Well, I was studying pegasus body language, as I had noticed that pegasi's wings move during conversation, much like unicorn and earth pony body language. I looked up a book in my library, and... Well, that's why I stayed up till four. Note to self, never stay up till four studying." She grinned sheepishly.
Derpy looked at her a bit strangely, but shrugged it off as Twilight being Twilight. The aforementioned Twilight sat silently, a bit awkwardly, too, until she took a breath, and said, "Well. Would you like some muffins? I just got a new recipe from Pinkie for some banana nut muffins." Derpy nodded and grinned excitedly. Twilight was nervous, though. Last time she had tried to cook... Well, she didn't really want to think about that. Trotting to her recipe binder, she turned the page to the banana-nut muffin recipe. Pulling out the ingredients, she began to bake...
-HALF AN HOUR LATER-
Twilight desperately caught water from the tap in her magic and tried to put out the burning muffins on her stovetop. Finally deciding to just dunk them in the sink, she picked them up and tossed them into the sink, water running over them and putting out the flames. Grinning awkwardly, she turned to Derpy. "...Sorry?"
Derpy sighed, smiled, and asked, "Need some help?" Cleaning up the mess Twilight had made, they began again...
-FIFTEEN MINUTES LATER-
Twilight and Derpy dashed out of the flaming library, Twilight levitating Spike behind them. Fireponies surrounded the fiery tree, spraying water on the flames. Slowing down, Twilight turned around and stared at her tree, a tear dripping down her face."My books..." she whispered. Having heard her, a very disgruntled Spike rolled his eyes and informed her that her books were safe, having cast multiple protection spells, including fireproofing, on all of them a week ago. Breathing a sigh of great relief, Twilight realized something.
She didn't have a place to stay.
Her eyes widened and she gasped. Frowning at the ground, she gave an order to Spike. "Spike, get my personal funds. We're going to need a place to stay, and we don't have enough bits without it." Derpy looked at Twilight.
"Oh, that's okay Twilight, you can stay with Dinky and I."
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AUTHOR'S NOTE:
And thus, the S.S. TwiDerp set sail. Anyway, this is my first fic, so please don't bash me too hard. Constructive criticism is awesome, and a like is even awesomer. Course if you don't like it, you don't have to thumb up it. But it would be appreciated! Thanks for taking the time to read this fic. Adios till chapter 2!
EDIT NOTE: Yes you guys! I edited some spaces in! Happy? Good. Chapter 2 is nearing conpletion.
Looks promising so far, it did seem a little fast paced in some parts but nothing to bad it was still a good read and I shall be looking forward to the next chapter.
Also here's a Scootaloo
for luck
Well, this is a fairly promising start.
1117483 Thanks :3 This being my first fic I didn't really expect much good responses. I'll work on the pacing, and thanks for the chicken :3
1117766 Just wait till Dinky comes into the equation :3
Looks good and this is my favorite pairing. My only critique would be to space out the paragraphs and make better distinction through spacing of which character is speaking.
Anyhoof, I look forward to more.
one word: spaces. don't put all the words into one long jumbled paragraph.
spread them out. use more sentences and 'enters'.
you know, this comment would be a good example.
YES! TWI-DERP! only 2nd in my heart, Flutterderp is still the best rare ship. BUT THIS IS AWSOME! hurry with the next chapter!
sorry i mean if you can, sorry
1118232>>1120647 Kay, I'll work on that.
1123638 In progress currently! Also tons of thanks to Star-killer89 for helping me out of writer's block. I'll format this up and work on the second chapter ASAP. Also, the second chapter's name will be Mistrust Of Glitter. Any guesses on what it might mean?
1124620 hmm...not sure
1118232>>1120647 Please understand that I wrote this on an iPad. I can't use my laptop cuz its broke. I'm commenting from my iPhone. So.
1124620
Oh shucks, you didn't have to say that, pally.
1131184 Oh please, when I didnt have the slightest idea how to push Derpy and Twilight together in an awkward and shipping-prone way you TOTALLY didn't give me the idea of BAKING...
:3 still your my TNT to asplode writers block walls.
Hokay! It has spaces now!
Heh. Not bad at all, for a first fic. AND it's my second favorite ship, too. One thing though,i think you should put in more dialogue where possible; it just seems like it has less emotion. Like the bits where Spike reassures Twilight about her books. Also, I recommend adding more detail to the background/surroundings. Maybe you could have described the reactions of bystanders, perhaps added more detail to the severity of the blaze. I believe that would be all. Derpy, Twilight, and Spike all seem to be not OOC. All in all, pretty good, but could be better. Just trying to help here.
Actually,i found your comment on Mood Wings(after reading it), and noticed you were making a twiderp. What luck I have!
Twilight/Derpy, yay! So rare.
Grammar error at the end there:
Should be 'Dinky and me'. Unless it was an intentional error.