Well... This familie cant grow any closer
Its the reaction to getting her first load pumped into her womb to mild? Sounds... Anticlimactic

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I am not sure myself.

This requires a lot of editing. As it is, it's really sloppy. You should show more and tell less, give the reader fine, juicy details. Some emotional content would be much appreciated as well. Less of 'tool A into slot B', more about characters and their feelings. Also, proofread and edit your text.

where Foals come from

they are born, Foals grow

That's one random capitalisation.

there.” She tells you and to your surprise, she points at your belly. “But

FiMFic writing guide has some good advice on proper punctuation. I strongly advise you to look it up.

She paus for a moment, obviciusly thinking about, how to explain it the best, before she continues

"Pause" and "obviously". Also, it's a lot more commas than needed in English (in some other languages those might be warranted).

To my disappointment she takes break for a moment, where she looks at dad for a short moment before she continues and I listen

Jump to 1st person. Repeat of 'moment'. 'Where' is not the word you se looking for, I believe.

really wired

Weird.

then he already was

Than.

You want to no

Know.

she handled that movie better, then most mares I know

'Than'. Also, misplaced comma. Also, mother of the year right there. I'm now inspired to have a story (or a subplot in a bigger story) about a bad pony parent.

You sure Princes,

Really now?

sounding unsure if this is idea

What?

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Honestly i have agree with everything you pointed out. It just feels sloppy and the errors really just... makes it hard to read the story all together. Its not a bad story, just hard to read with all the spelling errors and issues happening in it.