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THEJamiboi


I write in my spare time, as a hobby and I would appriciate some feedback on any stories I write here on fimfiction.

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Crust Toppings is a pizza deliverer and he hates his work, as fortune would have it however, one of his deliveries takes him close to Shady Grove, the town of lamias and it just so happens that the mare he's delivering too is in need of somepony to care for her house and it's not like he can say no considering what he has to go back to.

A short story I did between some huge commission I've been working on for a fair while, hopefully it'll be done soon, for now though, enjoy this!

Features; lamias, coiling, hypnosis, consensual brainwashing, soft vore and a blind lamia

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 6 )

Goddamn, you always make the best lamia/hypno fics around, Jami!

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Hehe, thank you ^.^ Glad you enjoyed it.

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Indeed it was, thank you :)

Hum really nice story, I thought it was interesting how you blurred the line between the guy wanting to help an old woman. The epilogue was a lot of fun, even excellent, and liked that it was long draw out mind alteration, before finally crushing it. The only thing that I would have liked to see how his behavior changed over time more, as in his mannorision and his out view in his life, with a little peek on a while down the road, but you already an excellent work as is. Looking for ward to see more of you stuff again. I wish I could trade art with you over a story.

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Well I do sometimes do short description stories for art pieces.
Also, Night is the same age as Crust it was an accident she's not old XD But yeah, his sweet heart got him entranced (not that he's complaining at this point) and I do agree, I enjoy the slow shift in mentality caused by hypnosis but I didn't have time to show it on a stretched out scale so yeah. Thanks for the feedback, glad you enjoyed :)

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