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Please keep in mind, I know I can be overly critical and negative at times. I can always find something to nitpick, even in the greatest works of literature ever written. Please don't take it personally!
-Some really great, juicy descriptions.
-A bit heavy on the details while vague on the big picture in the beginning. We don't get to know them very much before the groping starts, and then we're on to a ton of details about the groping ... but less about who they are and what their relationships are like.
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own arms around the taller stallions neck-- needs an apostrophe.-Highly recommended if gay (psuedo)bestiality tickles your fancy.
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To clarify what these scores mean, check my judging rubric.
Cloppability: 92/100
Allure: 79/100
Enticement: 80/100
Immersion: 89/100
Prose Quality: 89/100
Total Score: 429/500
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10252802
Not much to say about this one. Except, ‘wow, that’s a high cloppability score.’ I’m not really sure what else I could’ve/should’ve said about them and their relationship.
Also, the steadily decreasing prose and total scores are mildly concerning, but it’s a slow decrease, so only mildly.
10252953
For prose, it’s simple -- if there are any grammar errors whatsoever, it has to be under 90, and any story completely without grammar errors (that I notice after two passes) gets 90 or higher. This story probably would be well above 90 ... if it weren’t for that one missing apostrophe.
10252995
One stupid, little mistake!
Oh well, like I said, it’s no big deal. I’m more surprised there’s only the one. That you caught, at least. It’s still way better than I expected. All of my scores are, so far.
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Fetish Fuel: Cum-Swapping
Why should that cumshot only get one use when you can share? Your clopfic had the best scene where a character gets jizzed on/in, then shares that gift with someone else.
OK so firstly I don't usually like Pinkie in clop. You've managed a fantastic portrayal here that balances porn with the silliness I'd expect, so well done for that.
Secondly I like the use of the word prince where we would say queen. I'm a sucker for implied worldbuilding like that even in this context.