dear diary
the world i now knew
has been replaced with a castle full of secrets
that have all been built around Youi sleep in the rooms many floors below yours
and You promised me one day
that i would have
a wonderful library tower
in the shadow
of towers that are Yours
when i am old enoughin that one is a telescope
to count all the stars
as if anypony has the timeyour friend
sunset shimmer
dear diary
i wish on those stars sometimes
just so that the Princess knows
i will be more than
Her faithful student
i want to be
somepony She never forgetsi hope She can't hear me
from all Her windows above mine
and not just because it would ruin my wish
to have it spoiled by the wind
or because She told me
not to open my window
when i am so high above
this sleeping citymy sleeping city
She doesn't know
that i want my own secrets
if only just sometimes
and i will keep them like lanterns
to light the dark
i sometimes feel
instead of the lighthouse beacon
they would be
if She ever knew how scary it was
to feel like a candle in Her light
and only Her huge shadow over me
as another reminder
She is a Goddess
an Other
to a pony like mei would hate for every lesson i could ever learn
to end before they even began
because a great Goddess brighter than stars
(and probably way older too)
thinks i might fall out a window
(again)your friend
sunset shimmer
p.s.
i do not think
i will feel this way
around Her
too much
longer
10240705 I’m not sure about the ethics of comment section wagers but...
I certainly would like forty dollars.
Just finished reading it.
Not sure if it's because I have a taste for books writen in the first person, but LOVED IT. Sunset trying to put her emotions about her life and towards Celestia into words it's a nice good idea, and the chapters being short means it never overstays it's welcome.
Good Job.
Also, having Raven at the end it's a nice little bonus to me since I love Raven Inkwell. Thank you for remembering her~
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I understand first person isn’t for everyone, but knowing you enjoyed it is awesome. I have a couple other stories that feature Raven too.
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Which ones?!
gimme gimme gimme
Edit:
Wait... I think I have read them all already.
"So maybe" and "Sweet Sleepy Sunshine", right?
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Some don't have her tagged if she's not a main character, but I always add the stories to this group if they feature her.
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I'll get to them evetually then.
I plan to (try to) read everything in that group! Eventually...
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Good luck with that!
I’m excited for you to come back after the hiatus I love the cliffhanger ending! It leaves off with a bit of anticipation but the anticipation isn’t so great that knowing the ending is all consuming. Very well written
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Thanks! It'll come off hiatus after I've made progress on my main project, Enemy of Mine. I already have some of the future poems written and the rest of the story is outlined, so it's not 'hiatus as a euphemism for canceled' I just can't focus on so many stories at once when one is long overdue for TLC. It will likely take a few months, but this will be back on track with a buffer of updates eventually.
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That makes sense. Good luck with your project!