Chapter 3: Sleepless Nights
Rainbow lay in bed, not able to sleep from that night's events. She couldn't believe Applejack's sexuality, let alone her feelings for Rainbow. It was a good thing that Rainbow took the risk and kissed her. She could see it in AJ's eyes; she loved Rainbow. Rainbow didn't notice it before, and she wasn't sure about AJ even now. Maybe AJ was just confused--
Rainbow shook that thought out of her head. Though she wouldn't admit it to anypony, she had a crush on AJ ever since she could remember. And now that she kissed her...
She rolled out of her bed. How could she sget her much-needed rest with a night like tonight? Ony pony came to mind that held that answer.
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Applejack stared at the stars, in shock from the massive spark she received from Rainbow Dash's kiss. It's like Rainbow read her mind. Applejack would've gotten to it first, she was about to. But Rainbow Dash, the fastest young pony in Equestria, had to be first. Applejack was thankful for that, for once.
A crunch in the leaves nearby made Applejack spring to her hooves. "Who's there?" she yelled.
Silence.
"Ah know yer there! Show yerself!"
Seconds later, a yellowish pegasus with a pink mane came into view. She wore her mane covering one eye innocently. She wore a shy look, staring at the ground. "Hello, Applejack," she said ever so quietly.
Applejack softened up a bit. "Fluttershy, ah almost bucked you halfway to Canterlot!"
"Oh," Fluttershy replied almost silently.. "I'm sorry, Applejack. I didn't mean to startle you."
Fluttershy was such a sweet little mare. She cared for animals when they were ill or injured. So why was she here?
Applejack smiled. "S'alright, sugarcube. What are ya doin' out here?" she asked, calming down.
"Oh," Fluttershy looked at the ground, digging at the dirt with one hoof. "Well, you see, this bunny I was taking care of has a family burrow around here. I was just in the area when I heard you and Rainbow Dash talking, then when i got here--"
"Wait, you saw..." Applejack let herself trail off.
Fluttershy nodded. "Yes, I did," she anwered. "But if you want me to keep it quiet, I will," she said shyly. "That is, if you'd like."
"Well, yer good at doin' that already," Applejack wanted to say. But instead, she said, "Thank ya kindly, Fluttershy."
Fluttershy smiled sweetly. Applejack gave her a quick hug, then began walking home, knowing that she could sleep because of her oh-so-quiet friend.
Author's Note: I Pinkie Pie promise the next chapter will be longer. That's all I have to say.
Disclaimer: I don't own My Little Pony. Or Rainbow Dash. Or Applejack. Or Fluttershy. Or--forget it.
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-repeats it to myself- check and recheck....check and recheck .... OH I GET IT!!!!
oh yeah, thanks :3
:) niiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiice
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hmm? .....oh. i fix it.
good work! the chapter length is really my only complaint with this series and you said you'd take care of that issue in the next chapter so good work hope to see more soon
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Just a quick question before I attempt any constructive criticism: were these your primary considerations in bashing this out? Also, what approach did you take to writing the story? Did you just write out what came to mind? Or did you have an outline in mind first?
Still I can appreciate just posting it on FiM Fiction so an audience can see it if only I've fallen into the opposite habit of planning things and eventually doing nothing. Sometimes just getting it out there and being able to take people's criticism can be the most important step in moving forward with any artistic endeavour. (Plus I'm helping out a Brony who just got his own Apple Dash fic shot down by a reviewer. That and other things have left him feeling pretty down.)
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Oh that's a brilliant summary of these kinds of scenes. It should be a comic strip.
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i just wrote down what came to mind, really. i thought it felt like a natural progression, but then i read over it twice and realized....it wasnt what i hoped for.
good point to what kev said
new note to all readers:
im running out of ideas. go to my blog and comment on what you want to see in the story, and ill consider your ideas!
Okay, that just allows me to square away what to include in my eventual comments.