Life has been rather normal after the Friendship Games, well as normal as life in Canterlot City can be at least and with the final year of Highschool being just as stressful as anticipated the Shadow Bolts hadn't expected to have their lives uprooted like this.
When their school is suddenly under attack by strange bug-like creatures that call themselves Changelings, they are thrust into a fight that they had no idea even existed. But after their previous failings maybe this is their chance to make up for that? Whatever that is the case, they are the only ones able to push back against the swarm of monsters and save the city.
They are the light born from the shadows! They are the Power Rangers Shadow Force!
This story is set in the same universe as Kamen Rider Alchemy but requires no knowledge of that story.
Cover art drawn by Malunis
Okay, this isn't a bad start, but you really need an editor to catch some of these typos here and there. For one, it's "Principal" when talking about a person, NOT "principle".
Oh great... someone tell Scarab's Chrysalis that some of her Changelings apparently found the mirror portal.
Great, it's the Greeed looking for medals again. They must've taken a wrong turn somewhere
Here we go again. Apparently the leak from my universe caused this one to get cursed.
And no one misses her... I'm guessing there were many parties after it was announced. Lots and lots of parties. Such parties that even Pinkie Pie would stare in awe.
Well good morning to you too Sugarcoat, nice to see you so cheerful this morning.
And you're still a cheerfull ball of sunshine.
Oh no, we just got done with the Pizza themed supervillain, now we have a music-themed one!
Yeah, you go Sugarcoat!
This is why no one invited you to any of the parties.
Sounds like someone forgot to pay the premiums on their Monster Attack Insurance.
This has been your daily dose of... EPIC FORESHADOWING!
Hey Pharynx, good to see everyone's favorite grumpy bug.
How? Because someone informed Plot Convenience News of course!
Yep, definitely a good explanation.
Yeah, you should... DARN IT STOP STEPPING ON MY SNARK!
Well, that's certainly one way to put it.
In a Tokusatsu crossover universe? *falls over laughing* Oh boy, let's hope they never find out about Amanogawa High School from any of the crossovers. Or, pretty much any Power Rangers show involving High School students.
Really hope that's just one disguised as Vinyl.
Yah think? Cadance, you just got some Teenagers with attitude now.
Okay, seriously I look forward to seeing more of this.
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Thanks for the catch, that one has been fixed. And you are right, I should probably get one.
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They just heard about the better wages. They just prefer being a corporate drone than a hive drone.
That comment took a wrong turn at Albuquerque.
Oh, they were here before yours started leaking again.
Yep, Pinkie had a partygasem.
Yep, writing her is a delight!
they will unite and conquer the world!
Did I say I enjoy writing her?
One of many reasons.
Wouldn't speed up the rebuilding process though.
They also have an interesting article about an attack of the amazons.
Oh Ruin, you came to the wrong Fic.
The diplomatic way of putting it.
Welcome to the year of weirdness.
Oh, do you now?
Was just waiting for that one.
And I look forward to your snark.
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Fair point... actually does Scarab Chrysalis even pay her Drones? *makes a note to establish that*
Sorry, I forgot to finish it.
I know, but it was prime snark material.
Yep.
As is snarking on her.
Oh no!
But seriously, this is great, first chapter and I already have a new running gag.
Sounds vaguely familiar, yes.
Indeed.
True... do they even have Monster Attack insurance yet in this universe?
I wanted to use the clip of Krimson Rogue saying that but I couldn't find it.
Indeed!
I swear one of these days one of us is actually going to combine Tokusatsu with the Amazons.
Well it is.
Then what's the point in snarking on it?
Yep.
Somehow I now want them to meet Gentaro.
Yes, I like Vinyl and that would be really evil of you.
I wanted to wait until a moment like that.
Yes, I'll be much more regular with the snark here, I'll get back to the Alchemy snark later.
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Symbiosis!
But that gag was on a bus, no running involved.
Oh, it's coming. And it will be lead by Kamen Rider Zer- What do you mean I don't have the rights for that? ok, fine. And it will be lead by Kamen Rider Insurance!
Well, there is always the chance for that:
Snark born from snark is even stronger snark.
You know what I'm capable of doing...
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Yeah, I really don't think they get paid...
Uh, okay?
Heh.
I meant the mythological Amazons and you know it.
Fair point.
I swear, I will think of a way to get back at you if you do.
Love this chapter. I will wait for more.
This was fun reading. Especially to see the Rangers' colors and special powers.
That said, needs some editing. Caught some typos here and there ("vial" when it's meant to be "vile," and "goon" for "gone" at one point). Still, this was a lot of fun!
Solid work once again. Pretty basic lesson for the new Rangers to learn, but then again they *are* starting out. XD
Interesting cliffhanger!
And also, good to see Lemon go to Cadence to ask for advice. The question of "what next?" after high school (or college for that matter) can be a very frightening one. And that's not counting what Lemon has going on with her "side career" so to speak.
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Thank you very much and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Yeah, can't really take credit for that, I took the idea from
- Equestria Girls
- Kamen Rider
- Romance
- Adventure
- Mystery
Items of power thought destroyed have found their way to a parallel world. And the only one who can stop the coming danger, is a masked rider.I always just liked how the colores give the fight scenes a bit of something special.
And yeah, I really need to get an editor at one point.
Yeah, basic, but given the characters, I chose to work with necessary I would say. I just thought get it out of the way sooner rather than later.
Yeah, playing around with Lemon will be very fun. But I'll divert from her after the next chapter for a while, I need to establish the rest of our Rangers as well after all.
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I've been meaning to read that Kamen Rider Unicorn story. Just another reason to get into it! XD
Well, if you really need one, I can offer my services. I've done it before with some other stories, just drop me a PM and we can talk further about it. ^_^
Of course, I understand about the lesson. And I look forward to seeing further focus on the other Shadowbolts in future as well!
Always fun to see what other writers do to flesh them out.
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Do it, it's good. Was the thing that got me into Kamen Rider and writing at the same time.
I'll think about it. Thanks for the offer.
Well, they are more or less blank canvases after all. Definitely fun to play with them.
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All right then. I'll try to get started on it ASAP then. ^_^
No problem. Take all the time you need.
True enough. There's just enough there to establish them (especially with Sour Sweet and Sugarcoat) but plenty of blank canvas to take in some very interesting directions if you're so inclined. XD
I'm glad I finally caught up with this chapter, I quite enjoyed it!
Again, as I said before, I caught some typos - most regularly, that "Centipede" is misspelled. And a few little others here and there (Cadence's name is at one point written "Candace") but still, I had fun with reading this. In particular I got a kick out of the joke involving the explosion behind the Rangers and the "what what that?!" response that it would naturally get.
Nice work with this chapter, though again there's a good number of minor typos here and there ("rev" not "reeve," for one, "intern post" and not "intern-posit")… biggest one I think needs fixing though is one paragraph mentions Indigo when it should be Lightning Dust there.
That said, I still really enjoyed this. Awesome seeing some development for Indigo Zap, and also the Rangers have motorcycles now!
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Yeah, personally had a big dumb grin on my lips as I wrote that one.
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Oh for the love of... God damn it! I thought I caught all of them! Apparently not. Yeah, for some reason I confuse those two constantly, even if they aren't in the same chapter... I hope that get's better or that will get a bit awkward later on...
Yeah, I must admit, I had way too much fun with motorcycle stuff in my Kamen Rider story and didn't want to stop writing bike stuff, so I just gave them bikes, not like that is something new for Rangers.
Not bad, though in some ways the real hook for me was the confrontation between Thorax and Pharynx. I'm really interested by the portrayal of Thorax in this, he's still affable but also much more on Chrysalis' side, which is a real fascinating twist.
That being said... dude, seriously, you should invest in an editor. Still more typos in this chapter (a real big one is one time "Precious" Needle is misspelled as "Precouse"), and also some turns of phrase that aren't used right (like say, Pharynx saying "crushed between our feet". It should be "beneath".) The last section of the story needs some cleanup too, since there's missing punctuation here and there plus one time where Sunny's name isn't capitalized.
Still, all in all, I did like this. I liked that Sunny's meetup with Rarity was just them hanging out and not a date. That was nice.
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Well, that's good to hear. I tried to involve them more compared to my last story so they don't drift too much in the background.
Yeah, I'll probably start searching for one soon, at this point I'm really noticing it...
Yeah, I really enjoy all this slice of life stuff right now, before everything goes to shit.
Good work for a Sour-focused chapter. I liked the idea of her choking up in a dangerous scene and then getting the requisite "die or fly" training from Monster to shape up.
That said... once more, look again for typos. ("coked her head" when it should be "cocked") The first paragraph in particular has a few, the very first word is missing the first letter!
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Thanks, I had a lot of fun with this chapter, especially the location for the fight just reminded me of a few fights in Toku.
And now since I finished up almost all characters at least once I have a good idea where they will go from here.
Yeah, actually in the process of looking for an editor now, so let's hope this turns out well so I can get rid of the stuff my gramma checker doesn't catch. And thanks for catching that first-word thing, it's fixed now.
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No problem. As always, I look forward to seeing where this story goes next!
And also, best wishes with finding an editor.
No snark yet, but this chapter in a nutshell:
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I... What?
9912988 Just a joke about all the cursing.
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Ah. I don't know where you live, but here this amount of cursing is pretty much normal.
9912997 It was a joke, geez.
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I know
This was a sweet installment. Poor Sugarcoat - my sister's terrified of sharks, which made a visit our family once took to the aquarium *quite* interesting, so I was pretty empathetic to Sugar's response to the fish there. I didn't expect the 'spot the impostor' type exchange near the climax, but that worked nicely enough.
Usual reminder to check this over for typos. A few I caught were "sook" when it should be "sock," you also misspelled "steak" as "stake" a few times, and "limitate" which should be "limited".
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Huh, interesting. I can also somewhat related since I'm afraid of dogs for no apparent reason. It has gotten better, but still... But it definitely made for a good premise for breaking Sugar's calm exterior down a bit.
And now that I properly established everyone, time to throw a new wrench into their gears.
And yeah, had to do that eventually and after 9 chapters it was about time I would say.
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Indeed. One thing that I liked about this chapter was that there was no "traumatic" explanation for Sugarcoat's fear. Because sometimes, there is none. You're just *scared* of that, or by, that particular thing. Fear can (and often IS) irrational, which is what makes confronting it so challenging.
Ooh boy. Well as always, I look forward to whatever comes next!
Solid work, I must say! I really like the way you've characterized Thorax throughout all of this. And it was a real treat to see him meet with the Shadowbolts about some kind of truce or alliance, that was nice to see. XD
I did catch a few big typos here and there. Namely, Lemon feeling like her "thowt" (throat?) was stitched shut.
And also, this sentence--
I think it's supposed to be "Easy there, Lemon,"
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Yeah, that chapter was a lot of fun to write, especially since I could show a bit more of Thorax's and Pharynx's powers. And thank you.
Yeah, both fixed. The Lemon one was a bit embarrassing really...
Can I ask you something? Was the stuff related to Alchemy in this chapter too much and not understandable for someone who hasn't read that story? I try to keep it more in the background for the most part, but since this takes only a few months later and in the same city that sometimes is a bit hard. So, too much or not distracting?
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Eh... tbh I really didn't think it was a real problem. I didn't know all of what was going on with the Rainbooms and Alchemy but it wasn't like it took me completely out of the story or broke my engagement.
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Good to hear. That gives me hope about this. I always tried to explain the basics when it comes to stuff like this anyway so no one is completely lost. Thanks for your answer.
Okay... interesting. Granted, I don't know quite yet if I'm fully sold on the argument between Cadance and Lemon. On the one hand, I like the concept behind it (and also too, that it's good that the girls have opinions and questions of their own, they're thinking for themselves) but on the other hand I think Cadance's attitude about the Changelings feels kind of out-of-character. Yes, I know this is a different universe and all, but I also think back to the first Thorax episode - Shining Armor was the really vocally angry one about the idea of a "nice Changeling." I *can* totally see Cadance being suspicious of this story's Thorax and his proposal, but how angry she got about it just didn't quite ring true to me. (On the other hand though, I really liked her bit with Shining and his advice to her. Nicely done.)
That being said, I *really* liked Lemon's confrontation with Thorax and how that turned out. Could definitely use an editing pass though. But I really did like the way you were able to handle Thorax's gradual shift from reasonable to frustrated and ultimately angry. Goes to show that he's ultimately a villain in this story, even if he's done a better job of dressing it up than, say, Pharynx. XD
Also, Timber Spruce the Kamen Rider. hehe. Didn't expect that, or that he and Sugarcoat and Lemon would learn the truth. Oh boy...
And once more... dude, you need an editor. There's plenty of little typos throughout this (most egregious of the bunch is "header" when it was "heard," though there's plenty more bits to weed out, "Lemone," and such) that mess with the flow or impact of some of the sentences, in particular with some bits of dialogue. I would be perfectly happy to offer my services as a proofreader if you're willing.
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I can see the point. It's mostly a mix of that particulate episode/scene and the adjustments I made to her backstory, making her logically even more negative towards Changelings than canon Cadance. I was defiantly trying to find the balance, which was infinitely harder since I pretty much went on break in the middle of that conversation.
That's good to hear. It was an interesting section to write defiantly.
Yeah, that kinda just happened. I had to think of a two-parter in Alchemy that involved Twilight and since I don't dislike the guy I thought, hey, why not use him and that kinda grew a bit, even if he wasn't in the story a lot to the point where I made him into a Rider in the final chapters.
Yeah... While I asked around before I went on break that never went anywhere... Right now I'm mostly worried about bringing anything to paper. But if I actually manage to finish the next two chapters in a timeframe I'm happy with I might come back to that proposal of yours. The offer is defiantly appreciated.
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Ahh, I see. That would be a complicating factor then.
Works for me. Never had much of a problem with him *either* so it's good to see someone do something with him.
My door is always open. :pinkiesmile; Best wishes with those upcoming installments!
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Yeah. And it was kinda born from a desire to not seem him utterly mischaracterized so often... I kinda wanted him to have a win for once.
I'll keep that in mind and thank you.
What the hell is a rove? Did you mean "roof," because that's really the only word I can think of that somewhat fits to what was going on in that scene.
That was the most distracting typo in this chapter, although you misspell Cadance's name a few times here and there as well.
Anyway, there *was* good stuff in here all the same. I really liked the character interactions between Timber, Sugarcoat and Lemon Zest. That was funny and had some good development and insight into Timber Spruce as a character for this story, which I approve of. I also liked his scene with Twilight at the conclusion of this chapter as well, solid work there too.
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Excuse me while I bang my head against the wall... repeatedly!
Well, that is good to hear, especially with the ending bit. Thought it might come off as a bit weird when I said last time I wanted him to have a win for once since the end can hardly be called one. And, honestly, this was honestly supposed to be his only appearance till way later into the story, part of the reason I came up with the break up in the first place was to get him out of the city on a more permanent basis. But, the way I managed to squeeze characterization and character development for others out of him, I'm probably gonna use him more instead. Not really as a core character, but a few times maybe. He is fun to write.
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Free reminder that I have, time and again, offered my services as an editor...
And that's fair. Sometimes the way a story turns out can be different from what you had originally envisioned in it. And hey, if nothing else, you had fun writing the character, so that counts as a win right?
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As I said, wanted to be happy with my speed fist again. This chapter was alright and if I can keep this up with the next chapter I'm defiantly coming back to that offer.
Definitely. And change isn't a bad thing. Just have to be careful to account for changes. But right now, I'm not too worried about that.
Sorry it took me a few days to get to this.
I really enjoyed reading this! The Changeling in this chapter had a very interesting power/effect to inflict on its target here - given the title and all, I was really curious about what the effect was gonna be. Given the Changeling's grumping about teenagers and elders, I really started to wonder if Sunny was going to start aging rapidly or something like that. 
Not bad stuff on the writing front, I did catch one or two typos but they're pretty minor ones. Like "fiery" instead of "firey". I also quite enjoyed the conclusion of this chapter on Sunny's end, it was really nice to see how she finished things with the play and in regard to Coco as well.
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Well, glad you enjoyed it. It was also very fun to write, same with the next three chapters as well. I really managed to get back into the grove I think, since 14 till 16 are all finished already and I'm working on 17 right now. Let's hope I can keep that up.
Oh my. Shining KNOWS!!!
I think I see where this is going...
First off, sorry it took me so damned long to catch up on this. I meant to binge-read the new chapters sooner, but the start of October was NOT a good time for me.
Second of all, I enjoyed this chapter and the plot developments we got. Especially fun to see this iteration of Griffonstone, Gallus, and also a bit more expansion on Cadence's character or family.
...And yet again, buddy, you need an editor. There's a ton of minor errors through this chapter - "heroes don't still" when it should should be "heroes don't steal", "reached traitor" / "wretched traitor," and more. I'm more than willing to do a full sweep of these chapters for you. Just ask and I'll send it along, I really do not mind one bit.
Do any of the female characters in this story give out any No-Holds-Barred Beatdowns?