Cadance is off to an important meeting with the other princesses, but she's seen to it that Shining Armor won't miss her much. She's instructed every mare in the Crystal Palace staff to "entertain" him while she's gone.
“Alright, troops!” the Commander shouted. “You remember Princess Cadance's orders – any mare who gets the Prince's cum inside her gets a commendation bonus. Have at him!”
Shining: Caddy, look what you did, now we have to find a budget to pay all these bonus. Cadance: Don't worry, I already thought of it. Plus, your workout result worth every bits we paid.
9760821 Depends on the story -- I’ve used it as a plot device (heh) in some stories. But in this story, it works better if there’s always a risk of pregnancy.
“Sir,” she said, giving him a snappy salute that she managed to work into a way to brush her stark-red mane out of her face. “May I request your presence with the Mare Corps today?”
The chapter barely started and I already like where this is going...
He struggled to keep his cock from slipping out of his sheath as he climbed the stairs behind her. It wouldn't do to show up in front of the entire Mare Corps with his pride swinging out for all of them to see, now would it?
Actually, I'm sure they would appreciate.
“Of course, Sir. You haven't gathered enough information to make a real choice yet. How can you determine which is the best when you're only experiencing the outermost parts of each? To really make any decision, you'd need to experience what it's like to be inside each of us.”
...
They moved so efficiently ... had they actually drilled and practiced this?
Maybe they convinced some of the crystal stallions to help them with that. Probably wouldn't be too hard after explaining what kind of help they need.
Great chapter! I enjoyed reading it.
Making comments like this (quoting good parts and adding some thoughts) isn't too annoying, is it? By the way, there were so many good parts I struggled to decide which are the best ones. The ending is probably the single best part, but putting than in the comments would be rude torwards other readers who didn't read the story yet.
He could only nod as he picked himself up off the floor. That was going to be quite a bit of paperwork ... and he hoped that Cadance had thought ahead about how to phrase the commendations, because he had no idea how to both adequately thank these mares for the irreplaceable experience they'd just given him and prevent that experience from being public knowledge.
I think the bigger issue will be keeping the lot of them from bragging. Given that they're in what I assume to be the planet's arctic circle, it shouldn't be too hard to make up a definition for Snow-Balling.
Enough for all 13? And Ruby managed to take all of it?! Oh...
Well, I do love it gooey!
And to think, Shining also still needs to write exhaustive reports on his findings regarding the best personal qualities of each mare he... encountered. I'm sure Amethyst can help with the paperwork.
9771312 When I read that line, I assumed Armor was behind her (that's certainly where I would want to be), which would mean the wall was in front of both of them.
He'd have to play along with it and always let them make the first move. He couldn't risk the damage to the troops' morale that might come if he overstepped his bounds with the Mare Corps.
I would think it would be the opposite. That he has to make sure that they never get to make the first move as to not erode their awe for him.
She didn't seem to mind. “The Mare Corps is due for an immediate inspection, Sir.”
Oh please tell me when Shining Armor says, “Present Arms,” the mares all bend over and lift their tails and present their pussies. That’s what I would expect them to do in this story.
“No Sir. The inspection order came directly from Princess Cadance before her departure. She insisted that you perform the inspection yourself.”
“She requested that this inspection be extremelythorough.” Ruby Blaze turned to the twelve mares in her command. “Attention! ... About face!”
All twelve mares snapped back upright, then turned around smartly. Shining Armor's eyes went wide as he was suddenly presented with twelve gorgeous and well-built rumps. He gulped, and he couldn't help the way his cock began to bulge out of his sheath a little bit.
“Tails up!”
Ha I knew it!!
“Which mare in the Corps has the best pussy?”
Ruby Blaze stomped her hoof once, and in unison, all thirteen mares swallowed. Shining Armor's eyes bugged out a little as he watched his cum – quite visible through their crystal bodies – slide down thirteen throats at once.
I had kinda hoped Shining would be a little bit more into his commander persona. Like teasing the mares yet strictly demanding they give no hints of arousal.
10795120 Or maybe have also dirty talk like. "Hmm........quite a bit of fat here.." "Nice and strong but a tad too small". Also physically touching them while inspecting. Just kind of do a little more with the whole 'inspection' roleplay.
Shining: Caddy, look what you did, now we have to find a budget to pay all these bonus.
Cadance: Don't worry, I already thought of it. Plus, your workout result worth every bits we paid.
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... it involves sex, doesn’t it?
i am sorry xD i could not keep myself from loufthing when commander ruby orderd them "tails up" xD
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very good explanation there, i never actually thought about it
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^.^ That was really fun to write.
Lucky bastard. Nuff said.
" He had one more mare, and as much as both of their bodies wanted it, getting this mare pregnant was not a good idea."
So I take it you don't go by the whole heat cycle thing?
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Depends on the story -- I’ve used it as a plot device (heh) in some stories. But in this story, it works better if there’s always a risk of pregnancy.
The chapter barely started and I already like where this is going...
Actually, I'm sure they would appreciate.
...
Maybe they convinced some of the crystal stallions to help them with that. Probably wouldn't be too hard after explaining what kind of help they need.
Great chapter!
I enjoyed reading it.
Making comments like this (quoting good parts and adding some thoughts) isn't too annoying, is it?
By the way, there were so many good parts I struggled to decide which are the best ones.
The ending is probably the single best part, but putting than in the comments would be rude torwards other readers who didn't read the story yet.
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No, that’s great! ^.^ It’s always good to see how readers react to different parts of the story.
I think the bigger issue will be keeping the lot of them from bragging. Given that they're in what I assume to be the planet's arctic circle, it shouldn't be too hard to make up a definition for Snow-Balling.
Enough for all 13? And Ruby managed to take all of it?! Oh...
Well, I do love it gooey!
And to think, Shining also still needs to write exhaustive reports on his findings regarding the best personal qualities of each mare he... encountered. I'm sure Amethyst can help with the paperwork.
The wall behind her? I should think the ponies would have their eyes locked forward.
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Well, behind her from Shining Armor’s perspective. It’s a bit complicated, I guess, and not the best phrasing.
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When I read that line, I assumed Armor was behind her (that's certainly where I would want to be), which would mean the wall was in front of both of them.
But eh, whatever.
This was like the ultimate experience for a male. Shining must feel like the king of the world.
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It is pretty fun. ^.^
I would think it would be the opposite. That he has to make sure that they never get to make the first move as to not erode their awe for him.
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I guess that’s another way to see it.
Oh please tell me when Shining Armor says, “Present Arms,” the mares all bend over and lift their tails and present their pussies. That’s what I would expect them to do in this story.
Ha I knew it!!
Oh my gosh!!!
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Yeah, this was a fun one. ^.^
I had kinda hoped Shining would be a little bit more into his commander persona. Like teasing the mares yet strictly demanding they give no hints of arousal.
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Hm, yeah ... that would have been fun. ^.^
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Or maybe have also dirty talk like. "Hmm........quite a bit of fat here.." "Nice and strong but a tad too small". Also physically touching them while inspecting. Just kind of do a little more with the whole 'inspection' roleplay.