Trixie let out a sharp meep as she wheeled around, her ears instantly going down as the doors banged open with Celestia standing in the middle of the doorway to her bedroom, flanked by royal guards. Trixie had obviously misstepped, she was hoping that Celestia would come back to talk to her but she obviously had taken Trixie's statement the wrong way. Whimpering gently Trixie was about to try and salvage it with a quick explanation, but Celestia walked in first, the doors shutting behind her. Trixie blinked, looking up at her nervously. Imperiously, more akin to Luna's 'royal voice' Celestia said one word. "Explain."
For some reason, this cold demanding Celestia was more frightening than the one flanked by royal guards. Trixie squirmed under the Alicorn's gaze, blushing gently. "Uh... Princess... T-Trixie... Uh..." Trixie pawed at the lush carpet nervously. "Trixie was hoping that she could go back to our conversation earlier..."
Celestia shook her head. "You can't go back on anything Trixie. Once something is done it's done."
Trixie nodded, shifting nervously. "Y-You're right of course... But... Uh... Trixie would like to..."
"To stay in the castle and enjoy its luxuries."
Trixie shook her head vigorously, then paused and hesitantly nodded. "Well... Yes... But... But Trixie would more like to... To be your... Consort Princess."
Princess Celestia raised one elegant eyebrow. "And you didn't say this before because...?" Celestial had been through ponies admitting to the first part, though insulting, their honesty was refreshing. The ones who claimed to be truly interested but weren’t were far worse.
Trixie flushed a bit but this point wasn't actually her fault! "You didn't give Trixie a chance to respond! It wasn't her fault you ambushed her with the idea then went off in a huff! We didn't talk ab..." Trixie's brain caught up with her mind and she petered off, looking to the side. "M-My apologies princess..."
The fact that Trixie was looking away caused her to miss Celestia's smile, it had been a long time since anyone besides Luna had talked to her like that. That was the most honest a pony had been with her in a while. Trixie let out a small yelp as magic dragged her over to the princess, but Celestia was only pulling Trixie over to her to nestle her back between her forelegs. Seemed to be Celestia's favorite place for her new consort. "You are right there precious." She leaned in and nuzzled her new consort. "My apologies precious I shouldn't have jumped to that conclusion. But it has happened so many times before I just assumed. They're here for the prestige or the privilege, but you are different aren't you precious?"
Trixie flushed but nodded, looking to the side, but those gentle coaxing lips from the princess... Trixie never would have guessed that Princess Celestia was so very affectionate. She would assume she was noble, and she was, usually in public, but in private she was more touchy than Trixie was used to, not that she was about to complain about it. "W-Well Princess... You know, you and Trixie talked about it last night..."
Celestia nodded but said quietly. "I know, but I want to hear you say it again. You need to admit your problems to solve them precious." Trixie whined gently and squirmed, looking away from the princess only to feel a hoof gently guide her gave back to the princess'. "And tell me when you're looking me in the eyes precious, you can't pretend, you need to admit it, or I can't help you. And I can't have a consort that won't tell me the truth."
Trixie whimpered again but nodded. "Trixie... Would very much like to be your consort princess... She's never had someone she could tell... About her issues."
"Your issues precious."
Trixie blinked in surprise then giggled. "Trixie isn't avoiding her issues princess. It's how a show pony talks!"
Celestia smiled faintly. "Very well, but humor me precious."
Trixie nodded, though she squirmed she was unable and unwilling to look away from the princess. "Well princess... Trixie... I. I haven't ever told others about... My issues."
"You've had friends precious, why not tell Starlight Glimmer, or Twilight?"
Trixie nervously pawed at the ground, she couldn't really tell the princess that she wasn't friends with Twilight Sparkle. "Uh... Well, I just... It's not their issues and I don't want to give them more issues than they have to deal with..."
Celestia chuckled. "But it was ok to unload them on a princess?"
Trixie swallowed nervously. "Trixie was tipsy..."
"You were tipsy."
"I was tipsy... It was... A less than good idea I admit."
"I think it was an excellent idea. We likely wouldn't have gotten here without it." Trixie nodded, smiling shyly up at the princess. She hadn't often met another pony that could make her feel timid but it was the princess after all! Nothing to be ashamed of there. "But that's not what I meant." Trixie tilted her head in confusion as the princess let her have control back. "Why do you want my attention so much precious?"
Trixie blushed brightly but couldn't do much besides answer... Or leave, and she didn't want to leave. "Because you were so kind to Tri... Me last night. You were so... Affectionate. You let me... Uh... Express myself..." Trixie wasn't going to admit she wept on the princess' shoulder and...
"By express yourself you mean cry precious." Trixie whimpered as a hoof came up to gently press against Trixie's cheek. "You have to be honest precious, even with yourself. Have you ever cried in front of another pony before?"
"Not since I was a foal..."
"You've built yourself quite the little fortress haven't you?" Trixie mumbled a non-response and Celestia smiled gently at her. "Honest and on an audible level precious."
"You mean I don't let people in...?"
"Yes precious."
Trixie nodded, looking off to the side for a moment but bringing her gaze back to look at Celestia without prompting, causing the princess to smile encouragingly at her consort. "Well, it never worked before..."
"Precious one..."
"He betrayed me!"
"You were foals precious. He was no wiser than you."
"I know... But... But it still hurts..."
"And that's when you decided to never get close to another pony? So young." Trixie nodded again, unwilling to speak. "But you're letting me in precious? Quite the honor." Trixie nodded again, sniffling quietly. "Aww, precious, you don't need to hide from me." Celestia pulled Trixie out of her little niche and wrapped her in a warm hug, bringing her wings around to shield the two from view, though there wasn't anyone else around. "There precious, you're safe now." Trixie sniffled one last time before she began to ball, burying her face in Celestia's shoulder. Celestia simply held the young mare to her and let her cry.
Eventually, Trixie pushed away from the princess, smiling sheepishly up at her. "S-Sorry about that princess..." Sniffling and wiping her muzzle on her foreleg Celestia smiled and produced a hankey from a nearby drawer, wiping Trixie's face off.
"That's alright precious, I'm happy you were honest with me. You can stay and be my consort if you still wish."
Trixie nodded, blushing a bit brighter. "B... Uh... By consort you mean we..."
Celestia nuzzled the younger mare. "Only if and when you wish precious. I'm not going to demand anything of you precious."
Trixie nodded, blushing faintly, but smiling. "We do need to talk about... Trixie’s...?" Celestia nodded. "Trixie's other duties, if she has any?"
Celestia smiled. "Of course we will precious."
"Though one other question first?"
"Yes precious?"
"Why do you keep calling Trixie precious?"
Celestia laughed and pulled Trixie back into the space between her forelegs. "I thought that would be obvious because you are precious to me." Trixie flushed a bit brighter, even more than the prospect of her nightly opportunities did. No one had ever said that to her before. Trixie smiled and leaned up, kissing her princess gently... Only to find that Celestia was slightly less gentle, pressing Trixie down slightly as she deepened the kiss.
Hehe, another one people aren't fans of. Go me! Always interesting when you have like, a 1/5 voting rate. Means at least I made an impression! :D
Why does this have so many downvotes? It's good.
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I dunno, but man it seems to be divisive, it has like a 1/4 response rate which is scary high. :D
This story does not deserve it's current vote ratio. It's a great read with a practically non-existent pairing that's cute as all hell.
Umm... Ummm, can we have a run of this, with or without smut, like I want this, I did not know I wanted this, but I do. Even just fluffy story's about Celestia and Trixy just going on a dinner date or taking a trip to some other country and Trixy just listening to Celestia complain about the griffin/yack/dragon trade relations. Plz
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People will be people, the thing that has me so confused is the ratio, this is so much higher a response ration than usual!
Not bad, but you really overuse the word precious. It being there nearly every paragraph is a tad overkill.
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I know! That was purposeful. *Gloats about how great she is to be able to use a word a lot on purpose.* :D
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Aww, is it that clawingly cute? It's so fluffy it has to be made of goose down.
Honestly I kind of pictured someone trying to take Trixie from princess Celestia and her having a "They stole the precious!" Gollum moment.
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*Snickers* Crossover!
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There, sequel with two chapters up.
If anyone knows of any other Celestia X Trixie fics or even just uncommon pairings with Trixie that are sweet like this let me know, Trixie needs more love
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I'm working on a sequel.
Daawww. Trixie's adorably awkward. Whose this colt that betrayed her I wonder?
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Shining Armor! (I have no idea, Shining Armor though would not be a logical answer.)
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It's not really that bad of a ratio, but I have some suggestions for you, take them or leave them.
Nearly every sentence Celestia says has "precious" in it. Obviously this is set up for later, but you don't need to hit the reader that hard with it. It feels forced that way. Oh, and because precious is a pet name, it should have a comma before it when she's addressing Trixie as precious.
Celestia asks where the confident mare from last night went, but later in the story, Celestia makes it clear she fell for Trixie because she let her guard down for the princess.
Celestia leaves, really quickly. You should pause on that moment and emphasize the hurt she must feel, the betrayal. Clearly she's upset by Trixie's confusion/hesitance.
The whole story feels just a little rushed. I have MAJOR issues with that in my own stories, so when I'm writing and I feel like I'm kind of rushing through, I go pull up a story and see how they write and look at the details I'm glossing over, the actions that can fit between the dialogue. There's just a few places I can see where more elaboration would do wonders to sell this story, such as Trixie having a little more time to herself and think about the night before and how nice it was to let her guard down. Maybe give us, the reader, a glimpse into the night before and let us some of the night that burned them into each other's hearts.
Here's a good example:
Consort, while used correctly, still feels kind of clinical or too formal for what Celestia seems to be feeling for Trixie. Use it if you like, but it might make some feel like Celestia is using Trixie in her position of power rather than seeing her as a lover.
And lastly, if you write a story, don't post it on the same day you write it. When you go to proofread a story, people tend to overlook things since they know how the story is supposed to read, instead of how it does. Oh! and read it out loud to yourself! That's helped me multiple times.
I'd be remiss if I didn't say what I liked about the story, and one of them was the opening. It was a very nice introduction into the confusion that Trixie herself was in. I like that Celestia appreciated Trixie's honesty when she dared to speak up about being left so quickly. I also appreciate how Celestia is making Trixie see that she's referring to herself in the third person, forcing her to confront her mistakes rather than distancing herself with that language.
I look forward to the sequel, and I always admire a write who isn't afraid of tackling the tough ships!
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Hehe, it used to be bad a bad ratio. Also, welcome back to following!
Hehe, well I did purposely use the crap out of precious, but I suppose I could pull it back...
I was thinking that was two different parts of the evening, but I could go rephrase it to make that more clear.
I did feel like the leaving was a bit rushed.
I couldn't decide if I wanted to actually reference the previous night or leave it completely in the shadows.
I'm happy you liked it! They're a cute couple! ^.^