"Being with both of you, especially right now, I feel the same thing I felt back when I was still feeding under Chrysalis’ rule. At first that sounded odd to me, but then I realized that we fed off of love.” He smiled. “Which means that love is what I’m feeling right now.” He pulled them close. “I love you.” They roused fully at his confession. “I love you both so much, I always want to be with you.”
“Thorax.” Starlight looked up at him, taken by his words.
Trixie sniffled, having started to cry. Deep down she already knew that she had fallen in love but didn’t want to jinx it by daring to say it out loud. “I love you too, Thorax.” She looped her forelegs around his neck with a blissful smile. Thorax hugged her and brushed his cheek against hers.
Pillow fight yay
Some good instincts, but the pacing seems very rushed.
Slow down, give some details, and show your characters reacting to what’s going on.
The feels, so glad this isn't just clop
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Thanks. I think that the 'why' behind characters' intimacy in a story like this is just as important as the intimacy itself.
i see what you did there