things just got interesting!!!

this is more my writing style.  I'm rather bad at dialog, so i'm looking around for an editor with some experience so i can learn

love it

Wow, and to think I doubted you. This is excellently written and quite fun.

5/5.

Awesome, can't wait to see where this goes.

>>6796367963

Thanks mate.  Honestly, i wrote the prologue like that on a dare, so i can't exactly say i put much effort into it.  i might go back and change it up once i get farther into the story.  

so far so good. this is quite good and i would love to see more!!!

The Fox McCloud part was Hilarious

Eh i like where this is going ill stick with it keep up the work

I'm gonna feel really bad when Buck() gets turned to stone to find that his wife Leafdapple() and his daughter Apple Blossom() are both dead when he wakes up in the future. If seen this scenario before; at first he won't belief he's in the future till he sees the town, the farm, Celestia herself, and various family heirlooms that prove that he is indeed in the future. Then once the gravity of the situation sinks in, he'll break down emotionally and it will up to his descendants to get him through this. This a great story though and one of the best examples of this scenario.

I loved how you fallowed the Kurt Vonnegut Guide to writing a short story:

1. Use the time of a total stranger in such a way that he or she will not feel the time was wasted.

2.Give the reader at least one character he or she can root for.

3. Every character should want something, even if it is only a glass of water.

4. Every sentence must do one of two things — reveal character or advance the action.

5. Start as close to the end as possible.

6. Be a sadist. Now matter how sweet and innocent your leading characters, make awful things happen to them — in order that the reader may see what they are made of.

7.Write to please just one person. If you open a window and make love to the world, so to speak, your story will get pneumonia.

8.Give your readers as much information as possible as soon as possible. To heck with suspense. Readers should have such complete understanding of what is going on, where and why, that they could finish the story themselves, should cockroaches eat the last few pages.

Peace Out. I look forward to what happens next.

>>7111771117

Hush, you'll give everything away!   Buck's made of strange stuff, tho. He might react differently than you'd expect.  Besides, I've never been good at writing heavily emotional bits.

I'm gonna have to mix things up a little.

Anyway, to be honest, I've never heard of the Kurt Vonnegut Guide until you mentioned it!   I just wrote down what I saw in my head!  Whoever he was tho, he was a genius- his strategies seem to work for me quite well.  Anyway, at the end of the next chapter I'll have a special announcement for everypony.  It'll put you right into the thick of things... Mwa hahahahahaha!  

>>7123271232

Kurt Vonnegut JR.

1922-2007 was an American writer, artist and lecturer. He wrote mostly satire, gallows humor, and science fiction. His most famous work is Slaughterhouse-Five. He was great at giving humorous lectures about the art of story telling.

This is him illustrating the shape of a story. (here)

I love the way he simplifies everything into their basic plots.

Peace Out.

...Celestia's Nipple Hair? Congratulations, you nearly killed me with hahas. :D

Looking forward to what happens next! 5 stars, tracked and favorited

I'm liking this still, wanna see the CMC find Buckshot and see how they free him from the stone

As for an OC, I think it's fine the way it is, and the only OC I can think of right now is mine, and he's otherwise preoccupied at the moment haha.

interestinginteresting

There is no Ditzy Doo, but there is Derpy Hooves.

>>7461774617

meh...

the name is in contest.  

officially shes called Ditzy Doo, but the fans call her Derpy.  

Im just trying to score brownie points with Faust should she ever read this.

Cast: Huge Jackman as Buckshot he's like the better Mel Gibson and we've got a deal. Swordfish was such a great movie. It had hacking, action, explosions, and Halle Berry's nips. God, reading this REALLY makes me wanna go watch Swordfish, you should go watch that movie right now.  

Why I think I can make this fic better, is because I've worked on fimfiction.net user Winter Twister's: Purple Skies, Winter Skies, Applebloom's Vendetta, and I personally wrote Drago P.I and Hoity Toity Gets Possessed by Duke Nukem. Another reason I think I can make this fic great is that I'm familiar with the scenario.

The OC's I wanna see in this fic are:

Pale Hoof- he's the pony grim reaper that lives in ponyville he's from the fic "Near Death Experience" He speaks in the Royal Equestrian Voice(all caps lock), he's in a relationship with a pony named Pinwheel and because he's death he really shows no emotion.

Snowstorm from the fic, called "Winter's Howl" he's Scoot's older brother and dating Rainbow Dash in the last chapters of that fic and scoots ended up killing their abusive alcoholic father after he murdered their step dad. I like that OC  because he isn't whiny, he's family orientated and has a strong moral code.    

Smokey from the fic called "Purple Haze" and he's Twilight's stoner boyfriend whose funny, educated, charismatic and socially responsible.

Peace Out

Eh dont think my oc would fit in still shout out to the readers oc's    (\(^o^)/)  also great chapter

Eh dont think my oc would fit in still shout out to the readers oc's    (\(^o^)/)  also great chapter

>>7469974699 Her name has been officially changed to Derpy Hooves.

Don't belive me Check the MLP wiki and Equestria Daily.

Anyway good story.

>>7524575245

Hmmmm.... So be it, I'll edit the name with the next chapter release

Nice, can't wait to see how he reacts to waking up for the first time in 1000 years

Excellent

I found the whole thing with the Hairbrush hi-larious. I'd vote banishing it into a black hole!

I'm waiting to see what happens when he comes to. Future shock ho!

fantastic

good job on the accent

Another excellent chapter, though I wanna see Luna's full blown reaction to finding out who he is

>>8041680416

Actually, she already knows, but isn't letting on just yet.  It's a bit of a shock for her as well, if you think about it.

>>8046280462 I figured that, but I mean I wanna see her reaction to seeing him in the flesh in the visible spectrum, and his reaction to seeing her haha

Ah, hell I love this story, found myself laughing several times uncontrollably. plus you've gotta love all the refferences. VERY interested to see what happens next. Continue on good sir!

That is all

I forgot how crude Aussie language sounds to foreigners...

Then again, spend your entire life talking like Buckshot and you don't even notice untill they start giving you funny looks.

Doesn't help any Aussie who talks like that is pretty much suited to the element of Honesty either...

>>8061280612

I actually developed Buck with the idea of him embodying all of the elements and all of the elements faults in some way.  But I've always liked AJ the best so Honesty is kinda his thing more than the others.

>>8076480764

WHENS THE NEXT CHAPTER cant wait

>>8059780597

how should he react? he doesn't even know that he was stoned for a 1k years.

>>8115781157

The next chapter is actually more or less all ready to go, but seeing as this one is where Buck takes the hammer I'm putting a lot of revision into it. It'll probbably be out sometime later today.

>>8130981309

YEAH WOOT CANT WAIT

aww, a very touching chapter... though methinks there's a little more turmoil in Buckshot's head then he's letting on. Looking forward to the next chapter mate!

he took that very well

>>8219482194

The Loch Ness looks tranquil from the surface, mate.  But apparently there's a monster down there.

Excellent

>>8222682226

And Bruce Banner. Sure, it seems like he's a normal swell guy, but all it takes is that one little push to transform him into a hulking engine of destruction.

I'm not sure 'Aged Wine' was the best term to use considering how the chapter openned.

Wheres the old timey piano when I need it?

it is christmas eve post now

>>8540185401

Lol sorry dude I meant Christmas DAY.  I can't post it now, it's not finished.

Thanks for the new chapter. Some misspellings here and there, but otherwise pretty good.

The image of Applebloom taking shelter under Sir Buck Apple is really cute!

Man! another cliffhanger? I'm gonna have to get you with the ending for my Chapter 4, is a real tear-jerker

>>8553385533

Bring it!

I'm so manly that I dont cry. I sweat through my eyes.

This is amazing

Hehe. Buckshot 'Aircraft Hangar' Apple. :3 I lol'd.

fantastic

FUS RO DAH! HAPPY HOLIDAYS!

Love your story bro Skyrim FTW!

man, all you people with Skyrim... have they released the DevKit yet? I need it first to make My Little Skyrim a reality

Coincidentally, I accidentally played "Dragonborn" on my harmonica.

Again It is Derpy Hooves. I also got Skyrim and a Xbox.

Welp. Somebody needs to get Buck a ponified santa outfit. Eeyup. >_>

Not gonna lie, clearing 5k views is a gift all in it's own.

>>8744787447

Congratulations bro! (Lifts bottle of soda) Here's to another 5k views!

>>8744987449

-Lifts a bottle of rum- I'll drink to that, mate

>>8745287452

You'll drink to anything!

>>8748387483

Eehehehee...

Eeyup.

Confound these calculators! They drive me to abithici!

>>8770087700

*notices the complete and utter typo*

Time to make another account!

>>8770287702

Or just somehow shift the blame to a completely different source, like politicians do.

>>8770887708

It's the ancient Greeks' fault! They're the ones who misspelt it! They also predicted their economic collapse, making each American pay quadrilians of dollars just to have them aid the Nazis in a galactic holocaust against my Shy-Shy! Therefor, we must use the Orbital Friendship Cannon against the Taliban! Then we will have North Dakota secede and become the New Republic of Newt Gingrich! It seems like the next logical step in history!

>>8780087800

Congratulations grasshopper. You have learned the ancient art of politics.

>>8745287452 why rum? this calls for something fancier *lifts bottle of champagne cider

love it

i kinnae wait for more, and I hope you find yourself able to type fast enough that you don't lose any of your great ideas before you have the chance to record them

i like the new image. buck looks good with a hat

What about someone trying to get the farm from the Apple? Or someone who was once a rival of Buckshot and then was somehow brought a 1000 years into the future?

*No no no Glassed, this isn't your job, your job is to read. Let the writer do his/hers job!*... I'll just stop myself now...

I like the chapter btw

-Glassed

become lunas personal gaurd he freinds with her

>>8940889408

actually, i've got something along those lines in store.  its gotta do with the moon mark on his chest.  

all i can say about it at this time is...

Mother fuckin' lasers.

nuff said.

>>8946789467

Doctor Octabuckapus, BLAAA!

Interesting please keep up the good work my good sir.

O god please don't remove my tear glands!!!!!!! also ill rate after i finish reading all up to date chapters.... right nao im thinking about a 4.5 its really good so far...

sniffle sniffle....

great story 5 stars eagerly waiting for next chapter.

I went snowboarding today, so I'll have the next chapter out by tomorrow.  

Anyway, the mountain I went to had a trail called "Applejack" (double diamonds btw).

I rode that trail ten times. Loved it.

fantastic

The story.. ME GUSTA

>>9141391413 I'm hoping to go snowboarding on Thursday... also, I need to figure out making a Mane 6 board

>>9263692636

No dude, that's not Dr. Pones' hat. He's wearing Applejack's old Stetson, because he gave her a new one for Hearth's Warming.  I thought it might be a good idea for him to have a sort of physical representaion of his modern family, in addition to the symbols that his bandanna and his leg weights stand for.

Wait, WHAT?

Oh god, here we go...

" All will be revealed in the next chapter, along with several bottles of vodka."

....... I...

............. I......

I LOVE VODKA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Please keep up the good work my good sir.

Image: http://i305.photobucket.com/albums/nn213/papulk_bucket/DSCF2019.jpg

>>9344393443

Trust me on this one, I know how HiE's usually go.  I'm going to put a spin onto this one that nopony will see coming.  Regardless, Rust will be part of the plot, but not an essential character.  However, he and _______ will be pivotal in exploring what happened after Buck was frozen.

Looking forward to more, keep em coming bro!

I told you her name is now officially Derpy Hooves, It is not Ditzy Doo. even Larun Fuast says it is Derpy, Hasbro Says it is Derpy, The wiki says it is Derpy, EQD says It is Derpy.

Any way good story, can't wait to see how Rust explains how he is still alive.

Muffins! They do everything!

>>9356993569

I know that, mate.  At this point, I just call her Ditzy Doo because I like the name better.  It reminds me of Scooby Doo, who, incidentaly, was ALSO a loopy cartoon character with an insatiable appetite for delicious baked goods.  Go figure, eh?

>>9360193601 OK It just drives me crazy that People don't use the real name of characters unless the fan names make more sense.

Like Heartstrings Is long and a little complex(I need a spell checker to spell heart correctly) while Lyra is short and simple. And i prefer Derpy.

Now I need to go play a video game with the word Skyward in the title.

Did I spy with my Brony eyes a SPONGEBOB REFERENCE?!?!

Nice touch.

Also, WHAAAAAAATTTTT?????

>>9365393653

ACTUALLY YES!

That was exactly what i was going for!  

You, my good sir, have just received the Golden Horseshoe award for extreme awesomeness.  

You got enough crazy in your head to capture the CMC in a very enjoyable way.

i can just imagine derpy doing the same face spongebob had when she asked that

You know, right when Buck was really really growin on me, and for cryin' out loud he has a FAMILY, he turns to stone ... im excited to read more