"Stop!!!" The guards shouted as a hooded figure ran towards the gates of Canterlot, the city they swore to protect. As the hooded figure came closer and closer, the guards took their spears, the sun "Stop!!" the guard ordered again, but still the hooded figure ran. "Stop!!" the guards shouted again as they were ready to attack. A green light glew over the hooded figure's head and two knives made of animal bones leaped out of the white cloak. "Sto..." The guard could not finish his words as the knife hitted his eye, pushing him to the wall. The second guard ran towards the killer, spear in his hooves and the second knife returned to the hooded figure's hoof as he jumped above the guard. The guard felt pain in his chest, he felt cold and as he looked at his chest, he saw a black arm of a spider and his heart was in the end of the arm. The spider arm pushed back from the guard's dead body as it turned into a black hoof. The hood figure continued to run through the gates and headed towards the castle.
Princess Celestia, the mighty ruler of Equestria, sat on her throne as two guards escort two alicorns and a unicorn to her throne room. The unicorn was a white stallion with blue mane and he wore golden armor. It was Shining Armor, captain of the royal guards and ruler of the Crystal empire. Next to him was his wife, a beautiful pink alicorn with pink mane. It was Princess Cadence, the ruler of the Crystal empire. The last guest was a lavender alivorn with purple mane. It was Twilight Sparkle, Celestia's student and the princess of friendship. All the guests bowed and Twilight started the conversation.
"Thank you all for coming" Twilight smiled as Celestia went down from her throne "I called you all for one reason. You all heared about the war that happening right now." All those who were in the room nodded. " I believe that there is a way to end this war once and for all." As the guests smiled and listend, a guard entered the room.
"Princess Celestia, there is an intruder in the castle!" Shining Armor walked to the guard and looked him in the eyes, all Shining armor saw was fear.
"Take me to him" Shining Armor ordered the guard and the two went out of the door, leaving the princesses alone. Shining Armor and the guard went through the hallways as screams echoed. Shining saw a shadow on the wall. The captain's horn glew in blue as the shadow become bigger and bigger.
"That's him" The guard said, terrified. The shadow disappeard as a white hooded figure came as his cloak was stained with red. As the hooded figure ran towards the soldiers, Shining armor shot a blue blast out of his horn, trying to stop the enemy. The hooded figure slided beneath the blue energy and jumped over Shining and continued to ran.
So close
Chyrug ran towards the throne room, his heart beated like a drum. Suddenly the half changeling got hit in the back. His cloak burned to shruds, revealing a green body armor, made of hydra's skin and two belts containing knives made out of fangs and bones. Chyrug turned around to see Shining armor chasing him. "You don't know what you doing captain!" Chyrug told Shining armor "I do not wish to hurt you!"
"You invaded the palace of princess Celestia!" Shining replied "Leave now when you still breathing!" Chyrug sighed as he ran towards the captain as half of his skin grew brown fur and horn came out of his head. Chyrug leaped out, ready to strike Shining Armor. Shining's horn glew and a force field protected him from the attack.
"Your wife is in danger!" Chyrug warned Shining "Chrysalis is in the throne room. I'm here to kill her!"
"Don't even try to fool me Chyrug, Twilight explained everything in the letter she wrote me. I know you killed Created the war only to kill Celestia!"
Chyrug stop to fight Shining as stood on the ground, his brown fur returned to be a black changeling's skin. Shining Armor put his guard down and when he was ready to bring the prisoner to Celestia, he didn't notice a small sharp sting levitating from the hybrid's armor and he felt a stabb in the back of his neck. As Shining fell to the ground, Chyrug got up and walked away.
Princess Celestia and Princess Cadence listened to Twilight as she finished to explain her plan. " I believe that Chyrug is hiding in the everfree forest, so we need many soldiers as we can to track him down and kill him." Celestia was shocked to hear these words coming out of her student's mouth.
"Twilight, in my life as your teacher, I never heard you talking about killing." Twilight sighed.
"I didn't want to come to this either, but he left me no choice. Chyrug is too dangerous, he mus d-" Twilight stopped talked as she felt sharp pain in the back. The lavender alicorn fell down as three white knives where stuck in her back. Twilight's skin become black as she grew, the blood that left her body was green and instead of Twilight, Chyrsalis was the one to lie dead on the floor. Celestia and Cadence were shocked as Cadence fell to the ground.
"Chyrug" Celestia called for the killer and the three knives who stood on Chrysalis' body flew back and levitated next to the hybrid.
"Hello Celestia" Chyrug gritted with his teeth as he moved towards her, the knives returned to his belt. Celestia wasn't scared or angry, her face was cold and full of sorrow.
"I know I've hurt Chyrug. I know you full of rage, but this isn't the way."
"You robbed me from the life i should have!" Chyrug roared in rage "You care for no one but yourself! My father did something you didn't like and you imprisoned him. My mother was a changeling and you banished her, without listening, without mercy. You let creatures like Discord a second chance, but to a stallion and a changeling who's only crime was love, you separated them and take away their child!"
"You are right Chyrug" Celestia lowered her head in shame "I was young and foolish back then. I made a mistake."
"So why I am the one who suffer the consequences of your mistakes?! Why I need to live in shame of my appearance, thinking my mother's people are to blame for my face, believing my changeling blood was nothing but a curse! The only curse was you. And I am going to get rid of this curse."
"Then you give me no other choise" Celestia sighed as her horn glew in golden ray "I will have to banish you." A golden blast shot from the alicorn's horn towards Chyrug, but the hybrid dodged the blast and threw knife out of the belt, aiming for the head. Celestia blocked the knife with her white angel wings and flew to attack. Chyrug jumped as the white alicorn got closer and half of his skin turned green, half of his body turned into a lizard and he landed on the wall and threw three knives. Celestia shot a golden ray. The fighters didn't notice the other's attack. Celestia was wounded in the right wing and the golden ray knocking him to the ground, burning his pony half. The black coat and the white mane burned to ashes, leaving half of his body burned and scarred and red. The pain helped him, gave him more hatred.
Chyrug woke up and his skin turned now to grey and he bacome half diamond dog. Four knives were shot towards Celestia's wings and when she used her wings again to block the knives, Chyrug jumped on her and caught her in the back. Celestia smashed her back on the wall tried to drop the half changeling, but the diamond dog claw caught her back and didn't let go. Chyrug held the princess' horn, navigating her to crush the hard floor. Celestia fell to ground, wounded and standing on her was the winner of the fight. The burns didn't stopped him. Chyrug called for the knife out of Celestia's wing.
"Now, Princess gooAAAHH" Chyrug screamed as his horn was blasted away of his head, the knife fell down next to Celestia's head. Chyrug turned around and saw the royal guards, Shining Armor, Starlight Glimmer and the elements of Harmony standing behind him. The guards came to arrest Chyrug as Twilight helped Celestia.
"I will be fine Twilight" Celestia smiled. Twilight turned to Chyrug and tears filled her eyes.
"You betrayed me again. You believe Celestia is evil and you killed people who don't deserve to die. Do you really think you are better?"
Chyrug smiled to Twilight and gigled "Why do you think I asked you to bring guards?"
"You wanted to be arrested." Twilight turned to Celestia "Princess Celestia, I have an idea what to do with the prisoner. If you don't mind"
"What do you have in mind?" Princess Celestia asked.
"Chyrug free us and asked us to stop the war, he asked me to bring guards so he will be sent to tartarus or something worse. There is good in him. I believe Sunset Shimmer will help him to release the good in him."
"Very well" Celestia nodded "He will be sent to the land in the mirror. Please connect Sunset and inform her about this things."
Twilight nodded and bowed. At the train station, the guards took Chyrug into a cell and the rest of the main 6 and Starlight went back home. Twilight watched the clouds as Starlight was worried "Are you sure about Twilight? I mean, he could be dangerous there."
"Starlight" Twilight smirked "I remember the time you were dangerous and I don't regret believing that you can be good." The two friends hugged "And also, I don't think he will enjoy stay in a place when everyone praising Celestia."
Really this is how it end....... I'm done.
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come on it's not that bad
9594511
The ending feels pretty rushed, and despite how injured he was, and everything the Apology she made was super half assed.
It's thanks to her all this happened, you left out how she let her sister come back and made peace with thorax, and he lost his father and mother. What ever happened to his mother did the Changeling Queen execute her, and and AND!!!!!
You left out how the others were punished! Lighting Dust murdered MURDERED a innocent young filly, and nothing is mentioned.
i bet your reply or answer will be they were blah blah off screen blah blah not important.
I don't know why but a lot of writers love to leave that type of stuff unfinished or say you just use your imagination excuse.
I'm serious! There a lot of fics that leave out important details like that, then when asked they give the same excuse. so unsatisfying ending
But last this is the most important chapter and it just rushed and has a terrible ending. Celestia is praised and held a heroine of doing NOTHING but screwing up everypony over.
Oh and Twilight cleans up Celestia's screw up GGGAASSSPPPP!!! What a twist!!
9594557
You know I like you thank you for this feedback and i will do better next time
9594557
and for celestia and twilight i wanted to keep it like in the show i thought you like that in the show
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.................. What Celestia passing off all her mistakes to twilight to fix As she too lazy or incompetent to bother?..that one fo the biggest flaws that inthe show and mlp cliche.
9594572
ahhh i dont watch the show next time i will kill her and send her head to her sister
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Ugghh if your going to be sarcastic. Look The story would be alot better if Celestia always learned from her screw ups, if you make a sequel, then have a bit where she reflects on her mistakes, her biggest one with Cherub with lead to what happen.
I can see Dash resentful of Cherub, and Celestia, she may even start to lose her loyalty to Celestia, for how she caused all this to happen.
But the biggest flaw i see in the last chapter it feels like...you were trying to get it over with as fast as possible.
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oh no i mean it i never watched the show