Pool Party and Pollen Count are just a couple of college-bound colts looking to earn a few extra bits from their summer jobs. Unfortunately they're caught up in a marital dispute at the Rich's house and find themselves 'entangled' with Mrs. Rich!
I prefer this ending: the cliffhanger. No comedic twist, no betrayal of the kinks built up to this point. Stop here and it's just beautiful and sexy.
I must be in the minority, because this was precisely what I was looking for: a cock-starved cougar getting utterly satisfied by a couple studly colts. Your portrayal of her bitchiness and the way it twists to utter lust was glorious, and the turn-around with Filthy and the boys flipping Spoiled's cruelty back on her was perfect. The descriptions were detailed, delightful, and absolutely erotic.
If I was making an ending, it would feature a gravid Spoiled Rich, annoyed with how her little ploy has led to her carrying some mudpony gardener's foal, with Filthy satisfied both that the humiliation of who she deigned to fuck is enough to keep Spoiled silent, but also that he'll be getting a son (or second daughter) soon, while Pool and Pollen head off into the sunset with the satisfaction of fucking a mature, married mare's brains out and still strutting away to their bright futures, no strings attached. It's not funny, it's not a twist, but it's erotically satisfying, and after such a fantastic clopfic, I feel that's the closure it truly deserves.
If you ever plan to write more smut of this quality involving mature mares, adultery, age difference, or themes of that sort, consider me an eager subscriber and an avid financial supporter, should you have a Patreon or commission box handy.
That was a very real and unexpected read for me. Granted, I sort of see Filthy and Spoiled's married life being something like this in a way.
I see it the same way as well, and I'll be honest the end had me laughing.
Think this here should be a Filthy
thinks
Well you got busted!
I prefer this ending: the cliffhanger. No comedic twist, no betrayal of the kinks built up to this point. Stop here and it's just beautiful and sexy.
I must be in the minority, because this was precisely what I was looking for: a cock-starved cougar getting utterly satisfied by a couple studly colts. Your portrayal of her bitchiness and the way it twists to utter lust was glorious, and the turn-around with Filthy and the boys flipping Spoiled's cruelty back on her was perfect. The descriptions were detailed, delightful, and absolutely erotic.
If I was making an ending, it would feature a gravid Spoiled Rich, annoyed with how her little ploy has led to her carrying some mudpony gardener's foal, with Filthy satisfied both that the humiliation of who she deigned to fuck is enough to keep Spoiled silent, but also that he'll be getting a son (or second daughter) soon, while Pool and Pollen head off into the sunset with the satisfaction of fucking a mature, married mare's brains out and still strutting away to their bright futures, no strings attached. It's not funny, it's not a twist, but it's erotically satisfying, and after such a fantastic clopfic, I feel that's the closure it truly deserves.
If you ever plan to write more smut of this quality involving mature mares, adultery, age difference, or themes of that sort, consider me an eager subscriber and an avid financial supporter, should you have a Patreon or commission box handy.
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Wow! That's a lovely comment, thank you so much! A lot of my fics are in this sort of vein, though fewer are of the 'comeuppance' type.