The tonal shift between Luna kicking ass and then deciding to stop fighting forever is pretty sudden and extreme. On the other hand, I think this idea has a lot of promise :)
9381453 Well I agree with the second statement, however if you were in the middle of combat your first priority is to survive, so peace isn't the thought. But afterwards you're free to think, if you're alive that is, and Luna was thinking of her people, not herself.
The tonal shift between Luna kicking ass and then deciding to stop fighting forever is pretty sudden and extreme. On the other hand, I think this idea has a lot of promise :)
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Well I agree with the second statement, however if you were in the middle of combat your first priority is to survive, so peace isn't the thought. But afterwards you're free to think, if you're alive that is, and Luna was thinking of her people, not herself.
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Ahhh no, I wasn't criticising her actions as unrealistic. I just think the reader could use a chance to "breathe" there.
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True. I see your point.
Strange. Could Swear i saw a Second chapter.