Oi. Maybe get an editor and a couple prereaders. The grammar and structure is cringeworthy enough as it is, and that's not counting the stereotypical infodump and other similar tropes in the story.
The first word of the first sentence is missing its first letter.
No one was allowed to become friends, talk to each other except when spoken to, or even socialize on the school grounds. The principal called friendship "a waste of time." and an "interference with proper etiquette." Everyone was to follow his tyrannic rules of strict discipline and perfect scores. Anyone who even slipped up or disobeyed would face serious consequences of being expelled, suspended, or just plain given detention.
This is an unreasonable mindset for any school to have and no Principal would do this. Social and emotional growth MUST coincide with mental growth or else an individual would be completely unable to function in any society. Also, private school or not, no educational board would allow such a charter for any school.
Now despite all of that, you could nix any of my complaints about this by stating that the depicted events in this first chapter take place in an alternate universe than ours.
Oi. Maybe get an editor and a couple prereaders. The grammar and structure is cringeworthy enough as it is, and that's not counting the stereotypical infodump and other similar tropes in the story.
Tropy and cringeworthy from the get go. Goodish and bad; in that order. Expectations are set, let's see where this goes.
The first word of the first sentence is missing its first letter.
This is an unreasonable mindset for any school to have and no Principal would do this. Social and emotional growth MUST coincide with mental growth or else an individual would be completely unable to function in any society. Also, private school or not, no educational board would allow such a charter for any school.
Now despite all of that, you could nix any of my complaints about this by stating that the depicted events in this first chapter take place in an alternate universe than ours.
Principal stiffson sounds like a total asshole