Dear journal, Big Mack and Sugar Belle's wedding is in a few months. I don't want it to happen. I don't. It makes me so sad. Alas, I did agree to be a brides mare along with my sisters and Pinkie's friends. I'll do it since it will make Big Mack happy, but at the same time, it brings me to tears. I always imagined he and I as the perfect couple. I always imagined I'd be the one marrying him.
Marble
Marble then slips the journal under her bed and goes down to breakfast with Maud and Limestone. The two look at her confused. "Why are you late to breakfast?" demands Limestone.
"Mm," grumbles Marble before taking her breakfast and running back off to her room. She doesn't come out for the rest of the day. Instead, she just sits in there and cries. Well, until Maud drags Pinkie to the house to cheer her up that is.
A few hours later, Maud and Pinkie go up to Marble's room and Maud shows Pinkie in. "Marble, Maud told me what happened. She told me you ran off from breakfast this morning after a conversation with Limestone. What happened?"
"Mm, mmm, mm," responds Marble. She then takes out a piece of paper and writes on it. Limestone gets mad at me every time I'm late to breakfast. She's so harsh to the point it brings me to tears. I want to move in with you, Pinkie. At least, for a little while."
"Okay," responds Pinkie, "but only until the Cakes get back from their vacation in Manehattan to see Mr. Cake's parents." Marble nods in agreement. The two then go downstairs after Pinkie helps Marble pack her bags, not forgetting the most important thing-the journals, explains it to Maud, and then they leave. Marble is glad to be away from Limestone. Everyday, the rift between the two gets larger, and she genuinely hates it. She and Limestone used to be so close, now their relationship is dissolving away into nothingness.
9358580 Nope, that'd be a semicolon; a comma is a pause (there are long, convoluted lists of exactly what functions a comma can have, but basically it's a pause).
The above sentence, for example, could be two separate sentences, rather than one joined with a semicolon. 'Nope, that'd be a semicolon. A comma is a pause etc.' Whereas this:
'Marble is grateful that at least Pinkie understands her pain and her in general since her twin sister' makes no sense as a complete sentence. 'Limestone never really seems to since she's annoyed by how quiet she is' is better, but still not as understandable as the two together.
So I think it's one big sentence, which suggests Marble and Limestone are twins.
And Limestone's fury erupts in 3....2....1....BOOM!
9358632
If they were twins it would look like this:
Marble is grateful that at least Pinkie understands her pain and her in general since her twin sister, Limestone, never really seems to since she's annoyed by how quiet she is.
Did you notice the extra comma? It's after Limestone.
9381488 I think we might be focusing on this a bit more than is warranted for one missing comma
Ok, there are two ways the sentence could go that would make sense:
And the passage in the story does neither of those things. You're right, it doesn't have a comma after Limestone's name, so it doesn't correctly work as an aside. But it also doesn't have words before that which make sense. The sentence fragment reads:
So, her twin sister what? The second example I gave above is how I'd add a couple of words to that so it makes sense.
The sentence is kind of broken either way. That's ok, clearly a word or comma has been missed out somewhere, these things happen and we shouldn't waste time feeling too bad about them. In this instance, the missing pieces left two different options for how the sentence could be read. And the reading in which Limestone is implied to be Pinkie's twin needs only a tiny comma to be added to work, so that's the one I went for, consciously or not.
9381982
The second way you wrote is correct, but you can't blame the writer for leaving out a couple of words. They may not have an editor to check it for them.