Hmm, very interesting and fast-paced! Good for an action story, though it borrows maybe a bit too much from Raider's of the Lost Ark
Onwards!

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Now that you mention it, looking at it the second time, the second half rather does. Thanks for pointing it out haha. Guess I was too much into the zone to realize that.

He's working for a guy named Sombra... and DOESN'T immediately suspect the guy is probably at least Bond-villain-level evil. He automatically loses 30 points for total lack of genre savvy!

A burst of gunfire tore up the trees to his right; the last few bullets blew out a taillight. A macaw exploded in mid flight in a bullet-riddled burst of blood and feathers.

!!! NO!! NOT THE MACAW!!!

He aimed the bike at a gap in the trees that looked too narrow, but he roared through with inches to spare on either side. Albert floored the gas pedal and the tires spun clods of damp earth into their wake. For a few seconds the clatter of gunfire ceased again, and as he passed through trees and vines, the hush of the rainforest, muffling their engine noise.

...Gas pedal? On a dirt bike? You must not be a rider.

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The original outline was a jeep but it was later switched out for a bike. Seems like I forgotten that tiny detail during the editing.

Thank you so much for pointing it out good sir. Have a Derpy

Stone groaned, sitting upright in the truck with a lance of pain that caused him to swear. "Rewarding enough," he grunted, "Given the difficulties."

“I hope it wasn’t too difficult?” Sombra moved to inspect the truck's contents, skeletal fingers gliding over the artifact with almost reverent appreciation.

"Rewarding enough, given the difficulties." Stone answered, sitting up, groaning, realizing that his body ached.

“I hope it wasn’t too difficult?” Sombra moved to inspect the truck's contents, skeletal fingers gliding over the artifact with almost reverent appreciation.

Was this meant to repeated twice?

Sombra flashed a thin, knowing smile. "For the right price, of course."

Sombra flashed a thin, knowing smile. "For the right price, of course."

Again, a duplicate line.

I remember this story's premise long time ago, glad to see it be rewritten/updated again. Keep up the great work!

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Wow I did not mean for that to be a double at all thank you so much for pointing that out. That's the last time I'm going to try to do posting anytime late in the night.